PiE Thread #2  AnonymousTue Sep 4 21:29:30 2012No.4316204 [Reply] [Original]
Quoted by: >>4316239
 
 
Writefag for Roseluck Chronicles here, so this is the new PiE thread!
 
Also enjoy the next Part of the Roseluck Chronicles below!
 
>You and roseluck start eating some breakfast
>Your slightly surprised when Roseluck asks to have some of the eggs you made
>"I thought ponies would be vegeterians"
"Well, we are, but we also eat animal by-products as well"
>You and Roseluck quickly eat and start to mkae your way down to Millennium Park
>As you exit the apartment you notice you are not the only whole with a pony
>Some ponies are indeed by themselves or with other ponies,
>But several are accompanied by humans.
>Looks like you weren't the only one to make a friend
>You probably aren't the only one who thinks that they are going insane either.
>You begin to take in the sights of a world now with ponies
>Honestly not much has changed
>Except for the inclusion of ponies
>As you walk you notice a group of ponies being led my another pony with a map
>A map that is floating infront of the lead pony.
>Roselucks words about Unicorns comeback to you
>Not only are you in a world of ponies now
>You are in a world of magic.
>You head still swims trying to comprehend the implications of ponies and magic
>Something Catches you eye above you
>You see several britly covered streaks zoom throught the air
>Those aren't birds
>Those must be pegasi
>One seems faster than the rest
>It also stands out the most from the rest too
>Its streak is colored like a rainbow
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles pt.4: The Millenium Park Speech  AnonymousTue Sep 4 21:32:49 2012No.4316239
 
Quoted by: >>4316250
 
 
 >>OP
>Ponies everwhere, magic wielding unicorns, flying pegasi
>You stumble abit from all the thoughts that cloud your head
>You look down at your pony companion
>She doesn't appear to be faring any better
>"Its alot to take in, isn't it?"
>She sounds almost breathless
"Its so big..."
>You chuckle slightly
>"The fresh air doesn't seem to be helping..."
>She coughs slightly
"This is fresh air? It feels like I can hardly breath"
>Pollution and smog, they probably don't have it...
>"Do you use fossile fuels in equestria."
"What are those?"
>That confirms it
>"Humans haven't been the nicest to our planet..."
"What do you mean?"
>"Its a long story, I'll explain later..."
>If theres a later...
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles pt.4: The Millenium Park Speech  AnonymousTue Sep 4 21:33:10 2012No.4316250
 
Quoted by: >>4316269
 
 
 >>4316239
>As you approach Millennium park the number of ponies and humans begins to swell
>You also the notices an increase in one other department
>Police officers
>Most of them appear to be outfitted in normal patrol gear
>But as you get closer and closer to Millennium park you begin to notice slight increase in armaments
>What are they expecting?
>You don't think that the ponies would hurt anyone
>No, its not for fear of the ponies
>Humans were the x-factor here
>They are here to protect the ponies from us
>It appears that all of the ponies are gathering around the ampitheater
>As you approach you can hear several voices calling out different names in the crowd
"Has anyp0ny seen Lyra anywhere?"
"Applebloom! Applebloom! Where are you sis?!"
"Oh Celestia, why is this happening"
"Roseluck, Lily?!"
>There to your right.
>"Roseluck over here, I heard your name."
>Roseluck follows you through the crowd
>You eventually find a pink pony, with green hair.
>She has two daisies as a cutie mark
"Daisy!"
>Roseluck runs over and puts her front legs around Daisy's neck
"Im so glad I found you!"
>You notice that daisy doesn't appear to be alone, a man is with her also
>"I'm glad you found one of your friends Roseluck."
"Oh, Daisy this is Anon, he saved me from a metal box last night."
>You smile at daisy and she smiles back
>The two ponies begin to converse with eachother about their other missing friend.
>The man who is with daisy looks around nervously
>"Something wrong buddy.?"
"I-I don't like crowds much. Plus doesn't this strike you as kind of weird"
>"Well, yes, ponies appear everywhere across the earth over night does strike me as kind of weird."
>He laughs nervously
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles pt.4: The Millenium Park Speech  AnonymousTue Sep 4 21:35:09 2012No.4316269
 
Quoted by: >>4316277
 
 
 >>4316250
>You turn and look at the stage.
>Up on the stage you can make out two figures.
>One is the Mayor of the city
>The other is a pony who is tan colored with a white mane
>The Mayor of Chicago approaches the podieum
"Good Morning citizens of Chicago. As you may or may not have noticed we have a few visitors with us today."
>You hear a few nervous chuckles from the crowd, but its mostly silent now.
"I have been told that they are from the land that they call Equestria."
"I have also been told that they are quite friendly."
"I am officially offering my hand in friendship to our new visitors"
"Without further ado, I present Mayor Mare, to have a word with her people about the current state of affairs."
>The mayor walks over and extends his hand down to Mayor Mare
>The mayor extends her hoof and they both shake.
>That will probably be the picture on the front page tommorow.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousTue Sep 4 21:36:50 2012No.4316277
 
Quoted by: >>4316293
 
 
 >>4316269
>Mayor mare walks over and then take the podium
>She clears her thoat and begins
"Good morning Fillies and Gentlecolts, I hope that everp0ny out there is safe and sound."
"As Mayor Emanuel stated, I am here to talk on the current situation."
"We still do not know how we all ended up here."
"We don't know exactly how may of us got transported here, or where all the rest of us are."
"I know someone of you are missing friends and family memebers."
"Every effort is being taken to reunite everyp0ny with their scattered families."
"Most of all, we don't know where and of the Princesses are."
>At this an audible gasp goes through the crowd
>Murmurs spread and begin to get louder
"Please calm down everyp0ny, we are looking for them, if they are here we will find them."
"Finally comes up the question of shelter."
"Mayor Emanuel has assured me that temporary shelters are being set up for us in several places around the city."
"But, if you can find some hosts that are willing to take you in, we highly encourage this."
"Thank you everyp0ny for your patience."
>Mayor Mare steps down and Mayor Emanuel takes the podium again
"Citizens I encourage you to be good hosts and open your homes to our visitors."
"Thank you."
>He steps down from the podium.
>As he does there is a few moments of claps and some hoof stomping
>But that is quickly overtaken by the rising clamour of voices shouting out names again.
>You turn to Roseluck, who is already staring at you
>"Well, its your choice Roseluck, what do you want to do."
>She looks down at the ground and back up at you.
"If you wouldn't mind, Anon, I would like to go back to your place."
>You nodded and start making your way throught the crowd.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousTue Sep 4 21:38:50 2012No.4316293
 
Quoted by: >>4317805 >>4380680
 
 
 >>4316277
And that is the end of part 4
 
I really enjoyed writing part 4. I am not the best speech writer though. Oh well...
 
Part 5 tommorow afternoon!
 
Constructive criticism always appreciated
 
 
 
 
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Ponies in Earth: General Info  PancakesTue Sep 4 21:42:30 2012No.4316334
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Quoted by: >>4316375 >>4317980
 
 
 Step 1 - Ponies
Step 2 - Earth
Step 3 - ????
Step 4 - PROFIT!!!
 
Previously, on Ponies in Earth:
> Casey expresses her love of soft human fabrics. Next stop: Socks!?
> Rarity is kidnapped by suspicious characters! Next stop: Panic!!!
> Pillow Case learns who has her apartment keys. Next stop: Awkward Time...
> PC joins her friends on her first night out. Next stop: The City!
> Anon sleeps uneasily, unsure of what lies next without either her memories or her cutie mark. Next stop: ???
> Sky Bright is on her way to represent the Bank of Equestria at the office of their future partner bank in Earth. Next stop: Merger or Acquisition?
 
Old Thread:
>>4115172
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousTue Sep 4 21:48:50 2012No.4316375
 
Quoted by: >>4316392
 
 
 >>4316334
Sorry, Pancakes, I didn't see your thread until after i had stopped dumping my story here, Please, don't hate me.
 
 
 
 
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PancakesTue Sep 4 21:50:50 2012No.4316392
 
 
 >>4316375
No issue. Just thought I'd include a quick summary of the active stories.
 
Removed my commentary on Roseluck Chronicles since you already updated.
 
 
 
 
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PancakesTue Sep 4 22:37:10 2012No.4316709  
 
 
Decided to postpone today's update due to the shit storm on the first few pages. I can only hope that they end their idiocy in a few hours. lolnope
 
 
 
 
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Loscil !LoscilARtETue Sep 4 23:01:09 2012No.4316986
 
Quoted by: >>4317154 >>4318108
 
 
 I'm loving these stories, and those draws of Pillow Case! Who drew them? I want moar~
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousTue Sep 4 23:19:54 2012No.4317154
 
Quoted by: >>4317171
 
 
 >>4316986
PC needs to be less adorable, Kill'in me here.
 
 
 
 
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Loscil !LoscilARtETue Sep 4 23:20:29 2012No.4317171
 
 
 >>4317154
I know, so much cuteness to handle.
But awkward PC is... Damn.
 
 
 
 
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MD !Tm27jGxpYkTue Sep 4 23:59:54 2012No.4317762
 
Quoted by: >>4317935
 
 
 Hello PiE.
I write for AiE, and I'd like to know more about you guys.
So is this basically an inversion of Anon in Equestria?
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousWed Sep 5 00:01:09 2012No.4317805
 
Quoted by: >>4317935
 
 
 >>4316293
Aside from a few spelling errors I can't really see anything that needs improving upon. Keep up the great work.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousWed Sep 5 00:16:50 2012No.4317935
 
Quoted by: >>4317951
 
 
 >>4317762
Hello MD,
 
Roseluck writefage here, basicaly thats the concept. Any stories from any percepective about ponies on earth are welcome. Please see the previous thread for the othere stories of PiE. Since this is only our second thread, we don't have many yet.
 
>>4317805
Thanks for the critique. I probably should start running my stories though a proper word processor before posting them.
 
 
 
 
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MD !Tm27jGxpYkWed Sep 5 00:18:29 2012No.4317951
 
Quoted by: >>4317980
 
 
 >>4317935
You didn't link it in your OP.
Is there a Pastebin archive of story links?
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousWed Sep 5 00:23:29 2012No.4317980
 
Quoted by: >>4318019
 
 
 >>4317951
I know, that was my bad, I probably the most novice writefag here.
 
See this post for it.
>>4316334
 
 
 
 
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MD !Tm27jGxpYkWed Sep 5 00:29:09 2012No.4318019
 
 
 >>4317980
Hmm. Seems promising. I'll keep tabs on you guys, for sure.
 
 
 
 
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Mr. BlueWed Sep 5 00:44:09 2012No.4318108
 
 
 >>4316986
I need to go ask the guy in the draw thread that did them because I forgot his name.
 
 
 
 
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Ponyville Apartments: A Foal And Her Gems  PancakesWed Sep 5 01:04:10 2012No.4318271  
 
 
>>4255641
"What do you mean, just wait!?" cries Twilight.
> "I need to make a quick call."
"Rarity just got FOALNAPPED! We need to go after her!"
> "No way are we going to catch up to them on foot."
> I keep focused on my mobile phone. I don't really want to do this.
> But there isn't much choice. Just hope that he'd pick up.
"Are you just going to stand there?"
> Ah, good. I still had his number. Who knew this would come in useful?
> But chasing after kidnappers? This will probably not end well.
"Or are you ignoring all this just because she isn't human?"
> I quickly dial the number and hold the phone to my ears.
> "Yeah, yeah. Hold on..."
"Just because she's a pony!?"
> "Hello? Is this -"
"UGH! I've had it! I'm going to go save Rarity!"
> "Yes, it's been a long time. And yes, I haven't forgotten-"
"With or without your help!"
> "Anyway, the reason I called is that I need-"
"- so just rot here, you damn dirty APE!"
> "Sure, Twilight. Wait, what?"
> The purple pony starts galloping in the direction of the black van.
> No time to explain. I focus my attention back on the phone.
> "Yes, that's right. I need to call in a big favor."
 
 
 
 
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Ponyville Apartments: A Foal And Her Gems  PancakesWed Sep 5 01:05:11 2012No.4318289
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Quoted by: >>4318448
 
 
 >>4255641
"What do you mean, just wait!?" cries Twilight.
> "I need to make a quick call."
"Rarity just got FOALNAPPED! We need to go after her!"
> "No way are we going to catch up to them on foot."
> I keep focused on my mobile phone. I don't really want to do this.
> But there isn't much choice. Just hope that he'd pick up.
"Are you just going to stand there?"
> Ah, good. I still had his number. Who knew this would come in useful?
> But chasing after kidnappers? This will probably not end well.
"Or are you ignoring all this just because she isn't human?"
> I quickly dial the number and hold the phone to my ears.
> "Yeah, yeah. Hold on..."
"Just because she's a pony!?"
> "Hello? Is this -"
"UGH! I've had it! I'm going to go save Rarity!"
> "Yes, it's been a long time. And yes, I haven't forgotten-"
"With or without your help!"
> "Anyway, the reason I called is that I need-"
"- so just rot here, you damn dirty APE!"
> "Sure, Twilight. Wait, what?"
> The purple pony starts galloping in the direction of the black van.
> No time to explain. I focus my attention back on the phone.
> "Yes, that's right. I need to call in a big favor."
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousWed Sep 5 01:27:29 2012No.4318431
 
 
 HELL YEAH STORY THREAD !
srysly someone should make a fanfiction out of this !
 
 
 
 
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Ponyville Apartments: A Foal And Her Gems  PancakesWed Sep 5 01:29:30 2012No.4318448
 
Quoted by: >>4320395 >>4333952
 
 
 >>4318289
> A few minutes later, a yellow taxicab pulls up in front of me.
> The car window lowers, revealing a familiar face.
"Long time no see, professor!"
> "Didn't I tell all of my students never to call me that?"
"Of course you did. And that's exactly why we do, professor."
> I shake my head as I get in the cab.
> The driver eyes the bags I'm carrying and smiles widely.
"Never thought you for a cross-dresser, professor."
> "Huh? Oh these. They belong to a friend."
"Oh, sure. Don't worry. Your secret's safe with me, professor."
> "Never mind. Did you check up on the vehicle description I sent you?"
> He suddenly stops smiling.
"Yep. Word is that the van belongs to the east side gangs."
> "So the east side are into kidnapping now?"
"Hell, no!" says the driver. "They only deal in drugs and guns. But I heard that some idiots jacked one of their vans just a couple of hours ago."
> "Oh, wow."
> I cover my face and shake my head.
> "Let's just try to catch up to them before the gangs arrive."
"Sure thing, professor."
> "And one last thing - you still never explained to me why a neurobiology major would drop out of college to be a professional cab driver."
> He only smiles at me mysteriously.
 
 
 
 
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Mr. BlueWed Sep 5 02:03:29 2012No.4318723
 
Quoted by: >>4320505
 
 
 Anyone else think this is going to be the way of these threads now that they start with a story? Seems like a fun idea to keep things fresh.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousWed Sep 5 04:26:49 2012No.4320395
 
Quoted by: >>4327481
 
 
 >>4318448
don't suppose you'd offer me a link to your pastebin?
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousWed Sep 5 04:35:09 2012No.4320505
 
Quoted by: >>4321128 >>4327481 >>4328777
 
 
 >>4318723
Roseluck Writefag here
 
I'm having a hard time following you Mr.Blue. Are you saying that all of our stories should intertwine somehow, or that you really liked pancakes recap of the previous thread. Some better explination would be nice.
 
P.S. anyone think I should adapt some form of name for this thread so that way I don't start off each of my post with Roseluck writefag here.
 
 
 
 
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Mortimer MouseWed Sep 5 05:24:00 2012No.4321128
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Quoted by: >>4323066
 
 
 >>4320505
You probably should get a name. Doesn't even have to be related to your story and it makes it easier to find your posts.
 
On a side note, I'm back in town and I'll be writing some stuff today and tomorrow. I'll be taking longer to post because each time I look back on what I write I see a simple mistake I could've fixed or a sentence I could've improved on. But when is anyone actually satisfied with their own work? On my last post I felt it was really short on actual content, and hopefully I'll be able to move this story along.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousWed Sep 5 07:23:29 2012No.4323066
 
Quoted by: >>4327481
 
 
 >>4321128
>But when is anyone actually satisfied with their own work?
 
Before the fall. When bad times start in.
 
I remember going to the artist's panel at Trotcon back in July. Some of the artists were more talented or popular than others, but none of them were too shabby at all.
"What do you want to improve in your work?" one of the questions went.
"Time," answered most of them; they wanted to draw faster, or to draw more in one style or another. There was one artist who didn't say either of those.
 
"I'm actually pretty content with where I'm at right now," he said.
"And that really worries me."
 
>What does this have to do with PiE?
>Nothing, but it's more fun to read than just "bump", isn't it?
 
 
 
 
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SPart !HPI3kcpRZYWed Sep 5 07:56:29 2012No.4323556
 
 
 i hope for more great stuff tomorrow, read through all your storys, i like them all ... but i dont like the 4chan post by post format, sorry guys ... but thanks to your awesome story, i stick around longer here xDD
 
have fun writing more guys! thanks for your efforts !
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousWed Sep 5 10:13:11 2012No.4326162
 
 
 bump
 
 
 
 
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PancakesWed Sep 5 11:41:10 2012No.4327481
 
 
 >>4320395
None yet. I haven't been writing on /mlp/ that long. Will post it when I get some time to organize my notes. Old thread is still up, btw.
 
"One Small Step for Marekind", the first chapter starts here: >>4123767.
 
>>4320505
A name is for convenience; a trip only if needed.
 
>>4323066
When, indeed? But yes, time is the scarcest resource for both writers and artists.
 
 
 
 
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Mr. BlueWed Sep 5 12:57:11 2012No.4328777
 
Quoted by: >>4329697
 
 
 >>4320505
Not sure how you misread that, all I said was that I like how both our threads so far don't start off with the usual "This is the X thread about X, here are our pastbins, here are links to last thread, blablabla." It's good and all for people already interested, but I think doing what we've done now, starting with a story, will get more people interested and is a nice original twist to the usual thread series' on this board.
 
 
 
 
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DakanWed Sep 5 14:02:50 2012No.4329697
 
 
 >>4328777
Honestly it was really late at night for me when i read that. I wasn't all there, I don't even know what I was thinking then.
 
BTW. Update!
I have a name now! woo! I just got off of work, Im going to eat something and take a little nap. Going to work on Part 5 later and will probably have it up later this evening.
 
 
 
 
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Mr. BlueWed Sep 5 14:03:31 2012No.4329709
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Last thread went to bed. Here's a quick pastebin of my fic so far:
http://pastebin.com/SW2aaL4m
 
And here's a quick one of that thread too:
http://pastebin.com/v4JgQzCv
 
 
 
 
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Longbow !iCBLUlGVNAWed Sep 5 17:02:31 2012No.4332027
 
 
 bump
 
Enjoying your work so far, Mr. Blue. Keep it up!
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousWed Sep 5 21:01:31 2012No.4333657
 
Quoted by: >>4337984 >>4338867
 
 
 Still waiting for motorcity's pervert pillow case story.
 
Damn nigga you deliver more stories man. Its already been a week,
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles pt5:The Long Road Ahead  DakanWed Sep 5 21:27:10 2012No.4333817
 
Quoted by: >>4333827
 
 
 Took me longer than I expected, but here it is! The Roseluck Chronicles pt5. Now with feels!
 
>You and Roseluck make your way out of Millennium Park.
>As the crowd begins to thin out, you turn around to Roseluck.
> “So if we are going to be staying together, we had better go and get some groceries.”
>Roseluck nods silently
>”So what do Equestrians like to eat besides salad and eggs?”
“We eat all kinds of fruits, vegetables and flowers, and as I said before some animal by-products.”
>”You eat flowers?”
“Yes, what do you use flowers for?”
>”We use them as decorations; we also use them to display affection for another.”
>”So does that mean the flowers that you grew were for food.”
“Yes, they were the best flowers around. I won several prizes for my flowers.”
>”Impressive.”
>”Thank you, Anon.”
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles pt5:The Long Road Ahead  DakanWed Sep 5 21:28:30 2012No.4333827
 
Quoted by: >>4333835 >>4334008
 
 
 >>4333817
>You both continue to walk along in silence until you arrive at a small grocery store.
>You, with Roseluck’s guidance pick up groceries suitable for the diet of a pony.
>After leaving the grocery store you and Roseluck make your way back the apartment.
“I really wish I had my bags with me so I could help you carry the groceries Anon.”
>”It’s no trouble at all Roseluck.”
“I appreciate you helping me out Anon.”
>”Well, I just couldn’t leave you in the dumpster could I?”
“It’s not just that, for letting me star with you until they can figure out what to do.”
>”Like I said, it’s not trouble at all.”
>The rest of the walk home is relatively quiet and uneventful.
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles pt5:The Long Road Ahead  DakanWed Sep 5 21:29:11 2012No.4333835
 
Quoted by: >>4333839
 
 
 >>4333827
>You eventually reach your apartment and begin to put away the food that you have bought.
>There is something that you have forgotten.
>It has been bothering you since you left the park.
>But what was it…
>Oh that’s right…
>You probably should have checked with your landlord before agreeing to let a pony stay in your apartment.
>Wouldn’t want to violate your lease by letting a talking pony from another world stay here.
>That would be bad.
>The more you turn that thought over in your mind the more alien it sounds.
>Talking ponies, Equestria, and magic.
>This is going to take some time to get used to…
>You shake your head clear and turn to Roseluck.
>”I’ll be right back Roseluck, I probably should have checked with my landlord to see if it would be ok if you stayed here.”
“What’s a landlord exactly?”
>”Well, I don’t own the apartment we are in, someone else does. I pay him for letting me stay in it.”
>”He makes the rules about things we can do in his apartment.”
>”So, I really should have seen if talking ponies are against the rules.”
>She chuckles at the last statement.
“If he is as nice as you are, there shouldn’t be a problem.”
>”I don’t see one either, but its better if I do the courteous thing and check first.”
>She nods and continues to put the food away as you exit the apartment.
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles pt5:The Long Road Ahead  DakanWed Sep 5 21:30:31 2012No.4333839
 
Quoted by: >>4333846
 
 
 >>4333835
>Mr. Williams lives on the first floor of the apartment complex.
>He’s a very nice and understanding man.
>He’s even been a little lenient when you’re late with the rent.
>There really shouldn’t be a problem.
>You get down to the first floor and knock on Mr. Williams’ door.
>He quickly answers it.
”Hello Anon, how are you? Seen the news lately? Crazy stuff going on out there. Anything I can help you with?
>”I’m fine Mr. Williams. The news is actually why I’m here.”
>He chuckles…
“Let me guess, you took one of them in didn’t you and you wanted to check with me about it?”
>You scratch you head as he says this.
>”Well, yes, but how did you know what I was going to ask?”
“You’re not the first one to come knocking today.”
“All I ask is that you keep no more than one, and any damage that they might cause you are liable for.”
>You smile and nod.
>”Thank you Mr. Williams, have a good day.”
“Have a good day Anon.”
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles pt5:The Long Road Ahead  DakanWed Sep 5 21:32:52 2012No.4333846
 
Quoted by: >>4333856
 
 
 >>4333839
>You make your way upstairs to tell Roseluck the good news.
>As you enter the apartment you find Roseluck is once again watching the news.
>She doesn’t notices your entrance into the apartment until you speak.
>”Anything new about your people?”
>She shakes her head.
“They aren’t people their ponies.”
>Right ponies, need to start trying to use the right syntax.
>She turns and looks at you.
“Good news?”
>You smile and nod.
>She smiles and continues to look at you.
“Anon, about what you said earlier…”
>”What do you mean Roseluck?”
>She laughs.
“Stop calling me Roseluck, call me Rose.”
>For some reason this sends you back to a moment in time watching the Titanic.
>You’re barely listening to Rose as you play some of the scenes from the movie in your head.
“Anon, are you listening to me?”
>”Wha-“
>She sighs.
“You said that you would tell me about your planet and how you haven’t taken care of it later.”
>You nod.
>You really don’t want to tell her about the faults of humanity.
>Especially to someone who hasn’t even been in this world for not even a day.
>You realize a little too late that you are wearing your thoughts on your sleeve.
>She is still staring at you.
“Is it really that bad?”
>She can see your hesitation at the question.
>Your willingness to lie to her about the state of the world.
>You finally are able to get out the words.
>”It’s too early…”
>She looks down at the floor from your answer.
>”I’ll tell you someday, but I want you to see the world for yourself before you hear my opinion on it.”
>She nods silently.
>”I would love to hear about Equestria, if you would like to…”
>She shakes her head, when she looks at you can see tears forming in her eyes.
”It’s too early, I just…”
>That was too much for her.
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles pt5:The Long Road Ahead  DakanWed Sep 5 21:33:51 2012No.4333856
 
Quoted by: >>4333880
 
 
 >>4333846
>She begins to cry.
>Good job Anon…
>You walk over and sit down on the couch next to her.
>As you do she reaches out and hugs you around the neck.
>Her tear streaked face buried into your shoulder.
>The smell of roses once again fills your nostrils.
>Your surprised the by action.
>You can barely make out the words between her sobs.
“Wha-what if we ca-can’t go b-back…”
“Wha-what if we-were st-stuck here…”
>She continues to sob uncontrollably.
>Your brain is slow to react.
>You slowly begin to stroke her mane.
>”Its ok, Rose, they will find a way to get you back home.”
>”And, if they can’t we will just cross that bridge when we come to it.”
>She continues to sob into your shoulder.
>Her whole body trembling underneath your hands.
>It’s an all too human emotion.
>Wait…what…
>No, she’s an animal…
>A talking, sentient, animal, from a magical land called Equestria.
>But an animal, none the less.
>You look up and stare at the news.
>It shows pictures from all around the world of gatherings of ponies.
>Just like the one you were just at.
>You can only comprehend one thought at the moment.
>Between the mare sobbing in your arms and the ponies gathering all around the world.
>Everything just got a lot more complicated.
 
 
 
 
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DakanWed Sep 5 21:38:50 2012No.4333880
 
Quoted by: >>4333934
 
 
 >>4333856
And that is the end of part 5
In related news that is the end of Chapter 1.
 
I won't be able to start work on Chapter 2 Pt.1 until friday. So no updates until then.
 
I had some fun writing Pt.5, I hope it doesn't come off as trying to force the last part.
 
Next Time on The Roseluck Chronicles:
-A Time Jump!
-News on the Princesses!
-Flowers!
-And the continuing question on Humanity!
 
Constructive Criticism always appreciated.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousWed Sep 5 21:48:50 2012No.4333934
 
Quoted by: >>4333943
 
 
 >>4333880
Looking good so far. You might want to start putting your story on a pastebin so newcomers can more easily catch up.
 
 
 
 
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DakanWed Sep 5 21:51:30 2012No.4333943
 
 
 >>4333934
I was actually considering that. I was going to wait until I had chapter 1 done. Now that it is. I am going though my previouse entries with Word and correcting all of the spelling and grammar mistakes. Might put one up tommorow.
 
 
 
 
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Ponyville Apartments: A Foal And Her Gems  PancakesWed Sep 5 21:53:12 2012No.4333952
 
Quoted by: >>4333957
 
 
 >>4318448
"Unhand me, this INSTANT!" cries Rarity.
> She raises her hoof threateningly at her captors.
> Two humans. Even by human standards, their fashion sense is absolutely dreadful!
> One of them holds her down forcefully against the back seat.
"Ain't that cute?" he says. "Yer not afraid of us, are ye?"
> The other one is seated up front. He takes a glance at the rear view mirror.
> Rarity shudders as he gives her the dirtiest smile.
"Hmmm, have a gander at this little beauty!" says the driver. "Maybe we should have a little fun with her, first."
"No kiddin!" replies the other one. "Ye gotta have a feel of her skin, man! I've never felt anythin' so soft! It's so SOFT, man!"
> Their eyes remind Rarity of crazed stallions in heat.
> She gasps, realizing that they don't know that she's a pony.
"How dare you!" she whispers. "To even consider doing such... dirty human things to a lady!"
"That's the least of your problems," answers the driver. "You're worth a king's ransom to small time criminals like us."
"Hell yeah!" adds the other one. "We'll be billionaires! That's like, 10 times a million, man!"
"So just tell us your rich father's name. I'm sure he's some CEO or Arabian prince, considering all those jewels in your purse."
> They would dare break the law and foalnap someone in broad daylight?
> What is wrong with these humans? And all this fuss over a few gemstones?
 
 
 
 
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Ponyville Apartments: A Foal And Her Gems  PancakesWed Sep 5 21:55:11 2012No.4333957
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Quoted by: >>4334474
 
 
 >>4333952
"Damn, man! She's like, SO SOFT!"
> The human beside Rarity starts rubbing his cheek against her leg.
> Oh, that is the last straw!
"GET OFF ME, YOU BRUTE!" she screams.
> Rarity swings her free hoof right at his face.
> It connects with his nose. A sickening crunch echoes inside the van.
> The human lets go of her and backs off.
"FUCK, MAN! FUCK! FUCK! FUCK! FUCK! FUCK!"
"Hey!" cries the driver. "What the hell's going on back there?"
"FUCK! SHE JUST BROKE MY NOSE! FUCK! FUCK! FUCK!"
> Rarity rubs her hoof painfully. Human faces are harder than they look.
> She'll need to check if she ruined her pedicure later.
"Serves you right," says Rarity. "Now you better let me go, right now! Or else, you'll be-"
> Suddenly, the injured human points something strange at her.
> A handheld device with a long hollow tube.
"OH, YOU GONNA GET IT NOW, BITCH. I'M GOING TO BLOW YER BRAINS OUT!"
"Holy shit, don't you dare shoot her!" shouts the driver. "We need her alive to get any ransom, remember!?"
"B-BUT!"
"Keeping her under control is your job! I'd like to think that a big lug like you can do that without a gun!"
"UGH, DAMN IT!"
> He lowers his hand slightly. Rarity's eyes twinkle at this chance.
> So, they want her alive, do they?
> As Applejack would say:
"ONE LIVELY LADY, COMING RIGHT UP!" cries the angry pony.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousWed Sep 5 22:07:10 2012No.4334008
 
Quoted by: >>4334107
 
 
 >>4333827
>“It’s not just that, for letting me star with you until they can figure out what to do.”
>letting me star with you
>me star with
>star
The correct word was "stay" yes?
It should be a reader's job to aid in these things
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousWed Sep 5 22:23:30 2012No.4334107
 
 
 >>4334008
Gah! Thanks will correct that before I upload to the pastebin. I probably should start proof reading these before I post...
 
 
 
 
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Ponyville Apartments: A Foal And Her Gems  PancakesWed Sep 5 23:16:50 2012No.4334474
 
Quoted by: >>4334483 >>4334496
 
 
 >>4333957
> "How much further is it?"
"Just a few more blocks. Don't worry, professor! They're sure to slow down as they approach the main intersection."
> This former student of mine is among the fastest cab drivers in the city.
> Rumor has it that he could get you from the west side to the east in less than half an hour.
> That is, if you offered a big enough tip. And now that I, oh shi-
> I cringe as a truck pops out from a blind corner.
"What's wrong, professor?" he says with a grin. "Not used to a little 'speed'?"
> "Err, yeah," I manage.
> Damn, this guy's crazy! His reflexes even more so!
> In fact, he somewhat reminds me of Rainbow Dash.
> Those two would probably hit it off right away.
> "..."
> And for the safety of the citizens of this city, I solemnly swear that I shall do everything in my power to make sure that they never meet.
"Woah! Look at that cutie!"
> He raises one hand to point at someone along the sidewalk.
> Hey, isn't that-
> "Turn around! I know that pon-err, girl!"
 
 
 
 
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Ponyville Apartments: A Foal And Her Gems  PancakesWed Sep 5 23:18:11 2012No.4334483  
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>>4334474
> I hold out my hand to her. Twilight looks at it, still unsure.
"Y-you!?" she cries. "But I thought-"
> "Get in if you want to save your friend," I said.
"What? You're actually going to help us?"
> "Of course, I am. I wouldn't be much of an apartment manager if I'd loss any of my precious tenants, now would I?"
"I-I don't understand..."
> Seems like I have to explain this in a way she could relate.
> I cleared my throat and spoke in my classroom lecture voice.
> "A famous human poet once said, 'The world only goes round by misunderstanding.' Now tell me, Miss Twilight - how do you apply this to our current situation?"
> It takes her only a few moments.
> She slowly smiles, wipes off her tears and takes my hand.
> And with one more passenger, we drive off.
"Sweet line, professor!" cries the driver. "Is this how you used to pick up those smart girls back at the university?"
> Twilight suddenly blushes beet red.
> I shake my head dismissively.
> "Ahahaha! NO. And shouldn't you be keeping your eyes on the road?"
"Sure professor. Just one problem."
> He pushes a button to turn on the radio.
> Sounds like the police band. How is this relevant to-
> Then I hear it. An accident a couple of blocks away.
> A black van just crashed into a utility pole.
 
 
 
 
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Ponyville Apartments: A Foal And Her Gems  PancakesWed Sep 5 23:19:11 2012No.4334496
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Quoted by: >>4351607
 
 
 >>4334474
> I hold out my hand to her. Twilight looks at it, still unsure.
"Y-you!?" she cries. "But I thought-"
> "Get in if you want to save your friend," I said.
"What? You're actually going to help us?"
> "Of course, I am. I wouldn't be much of an apartment manager if I'd lose any of my precious tenants, now would I?"
"I-I don't understand..."
> Seems like I have to explain this in a way she could relate.
> I cleared my throat and spoke in my classroom lecture voice.
> "A famous human poet once said, 'The world only goes round by misunderstanding.' Now tell me, Miss Twilight - how do you apply this to our current situation?"
> It takes her only a few moments.
> She slowly smiles, wipes off her tears and takes my hand.
> And with one more passenger, we drive off.
"Sweet line, professor!" cries the driver. "Is this how you used to pick up those smart girls back at the university?"
> Twilight suddenly blushes beet red.
> I shake my head dismissively.
> "Ahahaha! NO. And shouldn't you be keeping your eyes on the road?"
"Sure professor. Just one problem."
> He pushes a button to turn on the radio.
> Sounds like the police band. How is this relevant to-
> Then I hear it. An accident a couple of blocks away.
> A black van just crashed into a utility pole.
 
 
 
 
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Ponyville Apartments - Pastebin  PancakesThu Sep 6 00:07:10 2012No.4335062
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Quoted by: >>4335766 >>4336368
 
 
 Somewhat organized my notes and uploaded them to pastebin for readers, new and old.
 
Chapter 1: One Small Step for Marekind
http://pastebin.com/WbSyj7r2
 
Chapter 2: A Foal And Her Gems (ongoing)
http://pastebin.com/JZ8pyMYU
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousThu Sep 6 00:34:51 2012No.4335445  
 
 
Defensive Bump.
 
 
 
 
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SPart !HPI3kcpRZYThu Sep 6 00:52:10 2012No.4335766
 
 
 >>4335062
i like you !
 
 
 
 
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Loscil !LoscilARtEThu Sep 6 01:17:50 2012No.4336368
 
 
 >>4335062
Awesome, thanks!
Also, bump.
 
 
 
 
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Mr. BlueThu Sep 6 02:57:30 2012No.4337984
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Quoted by: >>4338288
 
 
 >>4333657
I'm also waiting for a more literal 'pillow story'.
I didn't want to be the only one using this OC.
 
I want to see someone else's take on her! Come on guys!
 
I also got this OC from the drawfriend that made those last two pictures of her I used. He just read the name "pillow Case" and made this pic here, after I told him who she was he renamed this character Southern Comfort. I promised to use the character and make him flamboyantly gay. I just haven't had a chance yet...
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousThu Sep 6 03:23:10 2012No.4338288
 
 
 >>4337984
I know you want to see someone else do a Pillow Case story. Your characterization of her sets the bar pretty high, though. Almost no conflict has happened yet, and many of us are on the edge of our seats because the character's discovery process is captivating.
 
Moar, plox!
 
 
 
 
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Mortimer MouseThu Sep 6 04:15:31 2012No.4338867
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Quoted by: >>4339219
 
 
 >>4333657
Remember, this is something we do in our free time because we enjoy it, but we still don't spend every night writing pony fanfics. Especially when I need to focus on my other work.
 
But I have half of my update typed up and I plan on finishing it tonight AFTER I get some real life work done.
 
 
 
 
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SPart !HPI3kcpRZYThu Sep 6 04:46:30 2012No.4339219
 
 
 >>4338867
i for my part, just want to let you know how much i like your story. hope that cheers you up and motivates you to keep writing in your valuable free time
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousThu Sep 6 09:08:50 2012No.4343075
 
 
 Bump for moar!
 
 
 
 
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The Motor City  Mortimer MouseThu Sep 6 09:22:50 2012No.4343288
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Quoted by: >>4343299
 
 
 Postan.
 
>GAH! Why does everything always have to go wrong for you?
>You swear to yourself one day you'll get out of this stupid city and somewhere nice, somewhere warm and free of crime.
>Somewhere like home...
>But first, you need those keys back.
>You could just go up to Joe and ask him for your keys, he HAS to give them to you.
>But John is probably with him. Oh Celestia you'll never be able to look him in the eyes again if Joe tells him what you did.
>Not only that, but he'll know you weren't honest with him and he may never trust you again!
>That's definitely not an option.
>But stealing them back is! Stupid human probably keeps them in a box or something.
>You do another fly over of the building and land in the front, entering the store.
>Checking to make sure Joe or John aren't around, you make your way over to the nearest employee and ask them where the manager is.
>They direct you to the back of the store and tell you to just knock on the door labeled with "Manager."
 
 
 
 
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The Motor City  Mortimer MouseThu Sep 6 09:22:50 2012No.4343299
 
Quoted by: >>4343309
 
 
 >>4343288
>Knocking certainly isn't an option, but you thank the employee anyways and go on your way.
>Trotting down the aisles, you try to figure out a game plan for yourself.
>You need to find Joe, John, and your keys.
>Keep John away from Joe.
>Keep Joe away from your keys.
>Keep away from Joe and John when they're together.
>Get your keys and get the buck out of here.
>You got this Pillow, play it cool...
>WOAH LOOK AT THOSE JACKETS.
>You rush over to a clothing stand and begin to-
>Focus, you stupid pegasus! Focus!
>Right, sorry.
 
 
 
 
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The Motor City  Mortimer MouseThu Sep 6 09:23:31 2012No.4343309
 
Quoted by: >>4343317
 
 
 >>4343299
>Before you know it you've reached the back of the building and subsequently the door you were looking for.
>You place the side of your face against the door, and try to listen for anyone inside.
>*WHAM*
>"I think you're worried over nothing."
>"Do you really? That pony and his team were arrested just last night. It was on the news, Joe. 'A drug epidemic' they called it. This isn't good. I was supposed to keep them calm and quiet. I didn't think they'd make such a big deal about a rumor. Now the guys are talking about moving down south because things are getting too heated up here-"
>That's all you can hear before they turn the corner and walk out of sight.
>The door swings shut, and you slowly peel off the wall in a cartoon fashion and float gently to the ground before popping back to life.
 
 
 
 
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The Motor City  Mortimer MouseThu Sep 6 09:23:11 2012No.4343317
 
Quoted by: >>4343325
 
 
 >>4343309
>You shake your head rapidly to dispell the dizzieness.
>That was John and Joe!
>But what was John talking about?
>No time! The keys might be in there!
>You make a grab for the door.
>A few fruitless pulls on the handle tell you that Joe locked it on his way out.
>Great, now you need to get Joe to open the door...
>But he's probably still with John. You need a plan.
>Come on brain! Think! THINK!
>I'M TRYING STOP PRESSURING ME.
>Okay, okay. I got it. What if we-
 
 
 
 
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The Motor City  Mortimer MouseThu Sep 6 09:24:50 2012No.4343325
 
Quoted by: >>4343338
 
 
 >>4343317
MEANWHILE
>You are Joe.
>John decided to pay a visit and check up on you while he did some grocery shopping and waits for a friend.
>You've both been exchanging information on your work.
>It's obviously a one sided conversation considering the kind of work you do compared to John.
>Man, why did you get stuck with managing while John gets the exciting job?
>Yeah you're jelly. He's your younger brother and he's doing better than you. He even says he has his eye on someone, and is considering asking them out sometime. You've been single for 4 years!
>You spend your nights alone and arguing with strangers over the internet while he gets to-
>Your train of thought is interrupted as you hear screams and the intercom plays throughout the store.
>"WILL THE MANAGER PLEASE REPORT TO THE CHANGING ROOMS. AGAIN, WILL THE MANAGER PLEASE REPORT TO THE CHANGING ROOMS."
>Oh, for fucks sake, not again...
 
 
 
 
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The Motor City  Mortimer MouseThu Sep 6 09:25:30 2012No.4343338
 
Quoted by: >>4343355
 
 
 >>4343325
>You excuse yourself from John and make your way back to your office, probably the only thing you're proud of due to how clean and tidy you keep it.
>You think you have some minor OCD, you'd go nuts if your office was a mess.
>Anyways, you unlock your door, grab the broom you usually use to beat that stupid pony with, and make a hasty exit so you can get there before she tries to make off again.
>You swear that you'll knock her head in for harassing the customers.
>But by the time you make it, the lady informs you it's too late and she's already gone.
>"She was just here! She started bucking open doors and the customers were so terrified they collected their clothes and ran out!"
>In a fit of rage, you shout to the ceiling and snap the broom over your knee.
"WHICH WAY DID SHE GO!?"
 
 
 
 
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The Motor City  Mortimer MouseThu Sep 6 09:26:51 2012No.4343355
 
Quoted by: >>4343367
 
 
 >>4343338
>You are Pillow Case
>And that plan was perfect! Joe left his door open in his haste and he's probably shouting in anger that you're gone right this moment!
>His office is actually a lot more clean than you thought it would be. Maybe that will make finding your keys easier.
>The search begins!
>You don't have much time, and quickly begin to search the room. Starting with his personal locker.
>Nothing but a few coats and a uniform, but you unhook them and check their pockets before tossing them on the ground in a hurry.
"Nope."
>Moving to his desk, you push aside papers that flutter to the floor in your frantic search.
"Nope."
>You open and close multiple drawers, digging your hooves deep down them and ripping the contents out in hopes of finding what you're looking for.
"Nope."
>Nothing! Nothing at all! You've searched the entire room and you still can't find them!
 
 
 
 
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The Motor City  Mortimer MouseThu Sep 6 09:27:30 2012No.4343367
 
Quoted by: >>4343383
 
 
 >>4343355
>You sit down on your haunches in the middle of the room and feel yourself starting to tear up.
>That is, before you notice a shoebox on top of Joe's personal locker
>You slowly stand up, and make your way over to the box.
>http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=iPZXxlckBSs
>Opening it reveals a multitude of personal items, such as phones, wallets, mp3's, but most importantly...
"MY KEYS!"
 
 
 
 
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The Motor City  Mortimer MouseThu Sep 6 09:28:51 2012No.4343383
 
Quoted by: >>4343401
 
 
 >>4343367
>You've found them! Finally!
>You didn't even have to have an awkward confrontation!
>A cough from behind you sends a sharp shiver up your spine and causes your heart to skip a beat.
>"Just what do you think you're doing!?"
>Turning around, Joe stands before you. His arms crossed and his face contorted to one of pure anger.
"I, uh, just wanted my keys. I'll be going now!"
>"Look at my office! What have you done to it!?"
>Looking around yourself, you kind of did make a mess of the place. It looks like a twister came through.
>You swear a single tear rolls down his cheek.
>"Not only that, but you've harrassed customers for the fourth time this week! I'll have you jailed for this, freak!"
>He grabs you by the sweater, only for you to try and buck him in the stomach.
>Only to aim too low and instead crush his testicles...
 
 
 
 
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The Motor City  Mortimer MouseThu Sep 6 09:29:30 2012No.4343401
 
Quoted by: >>4343446
 
 
 >>4343383
>You bust out of the office, and gallop your way out of the place.
>On your way out, you take flight and see John sitting on a bench talking on his phone.
>"Yeah, don't worry. I'll convince them not to."
>He notices you.
>"I'll call you back."
>Hanging up his phone, John stands up, grabs his grocery bags, and turns to you.
>"There you are. Find your keys?"
"YEAHIGOTEMLETSGETOUTOFHERE"
>You grab him under his arms and frantically beat your wings in a vain attempt to fly you and John away as fast as possible.
>Unfortunately, you don't have that kind of wing power and his feet are just dragging along the ground.
>Joe exits the building cupping his manhood as humans and other ponies stare in disgust.
>"Come back here again and I'll beat you senseless!" He shouts as tears flow from his eyes like a waterfall.
 
 
 
 
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The Motor City  Mortimer MouseThu Sep 6 09:32:11 2012No.4343446
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Quoted by: >>4351132
 
 
 >>4343401
>Wow, you actually feel kind of bad for what you did today.
"LALALALALALALALALALA"
>"Pillow, what are you doing?"
>Trying to muffle your older brother's cries of pain and despair.
"I JUST FEEL IN THE MOOD TO SING JOHN LET'S GET TO YOUR CAR."
 
------------
 
And there we have it.
 
I really should learn to space these better. I keep going over the word limit and splitting up my posts.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousThu Sep 6 11:33:31 2012No.4345232
 
 
 Bamp
 
 
 
 
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Loscil !LoscilARtEThu Sep 6 12:01:30 2012No.4345743
 
 
 For those who lost the previous thread:
http://www.mediafire.com/?v4yvb02lsbqrpow
Plus, the most recent draws made for Pillow Case.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousThu Sep 6 15:23:30 2012No.4348501
 
 
 Slow thread today
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousThu Sep 6 15:31:30 2012No.4348590
 
 
 going to bump the shit out of this thread today
 
 
 
 
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DakanThu Sep 6 18:19:55 2012No.4350074
 
Quoted by: >>4350656
 
 
 Hello all!
 
Update: The Roseluck Chronicles Chapter 1 has a pastebin!
http://pastebin.com/0j2XsQPn
 
Please enjoy! Also update on Chapter 2 pt.1 still looks like friday evening folks, sorry
 
 
 
 
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.  LeStrangeThu Sep 6 19:44:50 2012No.4350656
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Quoted by: >>4350703
 
 
 >>4350074
why do you remind me of good?
Nachos for you.
 
 
 
 
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DakanThu Sep 6 19:54:51 2012No.4350703
 
 
 >>4350656
Who do I remind you of?
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousThu Sep 6 21:07:30 2012No.4351132
 
 
 >>4343446
More of this man. Need to know what happens next.
 
 
 
 
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Ponyville Apartments: A Foal And Her Gems  PancakesThu Sep 6 22:17:32 2012No.4351607
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Quoted by: >>4351623
 
 
 >>4334496
> We arrive at the scene. The black van is badly smashed.
> It looks like it ran straight at the utility post without braking.
> A familiar white unicorn pony with purple hair walks away from it.
"Rarity!" cries Twilight. "What happened!? Are you alright?"
> The purple pony jumps out of the vehicle. I quickly follow behind her.
"Hello, Twilight!" says Rarity. "You arrived just in time to assist me."
"B-but your hooves! They're all bloody!"
> The unicorn pony glances at them, as if noticing it for the first time.
"So they are!" she says calmly. "But not to worry! This isn't anything that a good pedicure can't fix. And besides, this isn't MY blood."
> She gives us the loveliest smile as she speaks.
> A few seconds pass as I take in what she just said.
> Hello, brain? Remind me never to piss off this pony.
> "Uh, right then. So what do you need our help for?"
"With those," Rarity says.
> She points her hoof at the black van.
> From the windows, I can see two human figures.
> They aren't moving.
> "Err, you aren't planning to eat them, are you?"
"Of course not," she says. "Those two need medical attention."
"Are you crazy!?" cries Twilight. "They're FOALNAPPERS! We should just leave them and-"
> Rarity puts a hoof to her mouth, silencing her.
"We're helping them, Twilight. No excuses."
 
 
 
 
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Ponyville Apartments: A Foal And Her Gems  PancakesThu Sep 6 22:18:31 2012No.4351623
 
Quoted by: >>4351628
 
 
 >>4351607
> Not sure if I should be impressed at Rarity's principles,
> Or worried that she is suffering from Stockholm syndrome.
> But either way, I'm not arguing against a pony who just beat the hell out of two full grown men with her bare hooves.
> After a few minutes, we manage to drag them out into the street.
"Good work!" says Rarity. "And the ambulance?"
"I've already called for one," says our driver. "They'll be here in five minutes."
"We probably should get going," says Twilight. "We don't want to be here when the authorities arrive."
> I nod in agreement. We should hurry back and-
"Ugh..."
> One of the kidnappers slowly regains consciousness.
> A big but dull-looking fellow. His eyes widen when he sees Rarity.
"OH MY GOD! I-IT'S THAT CRAZY LADY!"
> He cowers fearfully. The unicorn pony turns to him.
"And you! Do you promise never to do that again?" she asks.
"O-of course! Just please don't hurt me!"
> Rarity glares at him for a moment, then nods.
"Very good, then. Now be a good human and do only good human things from now on, alright?"
"Uh, sure. R-right."
> And with that, we start heading back to the cab.
"Wait!"
> The other kidnapper is awake now. He stares at Rarity, confused.
"Is that it?" he says. "What's the catch, lady? Why did you help us?"
> The unicorn pony turns around and smiles.
"Because this is a more beautiful way of doing things, don't you think?"
 
 
 
 
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Ponyville Apartments: A Foal And Her Gems  PancakesThu Sep 6 22:20:51 2012No.4351628
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Quoted by: >>4351785 >>4377121
 
 
 >>4351623
"Dear Princess Celestia,"
"Today, I learned that humans and ponies value things very differently,"
"And we can't just assume that our way of looking at things is the only way."
"We need to try to understand the human point of view,"
"And communicate in actions that which is often misunderstood in words."
"- Your Loyal Subject, Rarity"
 
> Rarity lowers her quill for a moment. Someone is knocking at her door.
"Oh, hello, Twilight. Is dinner ready?"
"More or less," says the purple pony. "Rainbow Dash made something I can't recognize. Applejack says it's edible, though."
"I do hope so, darling."
"And Rarity? Have you gotten rid of those gems?"
"Of course, I have. And I found the perfect way to do so."
> She closes the door as she follows after Twilight.
 
> In Rarity's room, the television is still on.
> The local newscaster discusses today's big events.
"Glad to hear that no one died in that accident, Johnny! And now for tonight's shocking news!"
"We just learned that the city orphanage has received a HUGE donation from an anonymous donor."
"But that's not all! The donation was in the form of precious gems!"
"We haven't yet received word of their exact value, but this will likely cover the cost of the new buildings and facilities that the kids need."
"Is this the start of a new trend of philanthropy and giving?"
"Who knows? Only time will tell. Now, back to you, Johnny!"
 
 
 
 
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PancakesThu Sep 6 22:46:50 2012No.4351785
 
Quoted by: >>4352017 >>4356067
 
 
 >>4351628
And this ends Chapter 2. Still deciding between Fluttershy or Rainbow Dash for the next main heroine.
 
Let me know what you think so far.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousThu Sep 6 23:29:54 2012No.4352017
 
Quoted by: >>4361112
 
 
 >>4351785
So far so good.
>Rarity beating the shit out of criminals
FUCK YES
 
 
 
 
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SPart !HPI3kcpRZYFri Sep 7 00:34:10 2012No.4352403
 
Quoted by: >>4352938
 
 
 fluttershy please ! would be fun to read what she's going to do in a zoo or kindergarten xD
 
 
 
 
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SPart !HPI3kcpRZYFri Sep 7 01:53:30 2012No.4352938
 
Quoted by: >>4354948 >>4361112
 
 
 >>4352403
or in a zoo, meeting a kindergarden group !!!
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousFri Sep 7 05:26:50 2012No.4354948
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>>4352938
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousFri Sep 7 06:09:53 2012No.4355563
 
Quoted by: >>4355629
 
 
 Just let me unleash this turd before i change my mind for the 100th time
 
World greeted me with cacophony of colors and loud sound of portal closing behind me.
Tall, ugly buildings were sorrounding me, all covered in flashing lights and weird drawings. Awful stench attacking my nostrils, coming from nearby pile of rubbish.
>"I thought this was supposed to be hi-tech world"
It appears i landed in a back alley of sorts, cluttered by metal boxes and strange four-wheeled contraptions.
>"Nevermind that, there will be plenty of time for sightseeing later. First thigs first - status. Limbs?"
I stretched my legs and tensed muscles.
>"Still on my hooves, all four of them. Other parts seem to be in place as well. Horn?"
Trash cans and walls began to reflect a faint blue glow.
>"Operational. Armour?"
I tried pulling my breastplates and straps.
>"Intact. Ready to deploy."
I chuckled to myself, reminiscencing sergeant Break Tooth's routine.
>"I have yet to meet someone who talks like that. Some stuff really doesn't leave the basic."
My train of tought was suddenly stopped. I could hear someone talking. In equestrian at that!
>"Other agents? Shooting Star is that you? Wait a minute..."
"Yeah, and they make you pay for it! What the hell is- "
A tall, bipedal creature was looking straight at me, wide eyes and mouth agape. It dropped a small black box it was talking to. Before it reached the ground i realized my mistake.
>"Camouflage."
>Shit!
I decided to stage a tactical withdrawal.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousFri Sep 7 06:13:11 2012No.4355629
 
Quoted by: >>4355661
 
 
 >>4355563
>"Run run run! There's gotta be some cover here!"
I could hear the creature yelling something, it tried to follow me.
>"Wait! Come back! What are you!?"
>"Celestia dammit where are carton boxes when you need them?"
I noticed the wheeled metal things had actual keyholes in them. I tried opening them.
>"Come on, come on, work you piece of-"
Having all pins magically pushed in, the mechanism clicked and door stood wide open. I hopped in and shut it behind me, hiding between the seats.
>"Where are you? I don't want to hurt you, come out!
>"Go away you ape."
Despite my wishes i could still hear it though, rummagin around the place.
>"Just give up already"
It stops just outside of my metal hideout, oblivious to my presence. I risked a quick glance at it.
>"Damn, you're a stubborn one. What are you anyway?"
It sat on some box, combing it's long hair and looking around.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousFri Sep 7 06:16:51 2012No.4355661
 
 
 >>4355629
>"Smooth skin, no scales, almost no fur. Sweet scent and that shade of pink on cheeks...a female. Female chasing after me, hah. Well at least she's a mammal."
Woman took off a piece of clothing, warmed up after the chase.
>"Correction, she's definitely a mammal. Those are...huge. Almost impractical. I could just bury my face in them..."
She turned around, forcing me to dive between seats again. However it seemed that she finally gave up, probably considering me a product of her imagination.
I leaned out of my cover to see her walking away. My eyes rested on her firm legs and nice, round flank, tightly packed inside those black pants, moving hypnotically.
>"Just look at it go...this may be the best world yet..."
>"What the hay am i even thinking about. I should be glad i managed to hide. Orders were clear - no engagement with locals unless necessary."
>"How could I have forgotten about my Standard Issue Disguise spell? It will take days to combine something from scratch."
>"Let's just focus on finding someplace safe."
I noticed black metal railing coming out of the brick wall. The ladder was no use for a pony. It required some old school hard way tweaking. With magic.
>"Oh you're coming down alright! Yeah, just a little bit further-"
Covered in blue light, ladder finally fell out of it's hinges, landing on metal carriage i was hiding in, with loud clang. I could use it to climb on top, before another close encounter.
>"I will admit it, this is the one moment i really wish i had wings instead of that horn. Now, onto the main objective..."
The Sun came out from behind the clouds, with the promise of transforming cold morning into hot day. There i was sitting on rooftop, considering my next move.
>"Gotta love them offworld assignments"
 
 
 
 
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ohmygoshohmygosh  LeStrangeFri Sep 7 06:48:10 2012No.4356067
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Quoted by: >>4361112
 
 
 >>4351785
you are the main reason why i continue to follow this thread.
I come from school and hope for a new part of the story and it just... it makes my day.
Onward to awesomeness Pancakes!!!
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousFri Sep 7 10:33:11 2012No.4359490
 
 
 Bump.
 
 
 
 
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PancakesFri Sep 7 12:16:30 2012No.4361112
 
 
 >>4352017
>>4356067
That's good to hear! I was afraid that this wasn't going to translate well into a story, since the concept was originally meant for a management / raising sim. Each day, the player would manage the activities for the ponies to help them integrate themselves with human society. Events would be available to influence their outlook, both good and bad. And this of course includes how much trust and affection they have for the player, and whether they would stay on Earth or return to Equestria at the end of the game.
 
>>4352938
This idea sounds fun. Will see if I can come up with something workable.
 
 
 
 
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DakanFri Sep 7 18:00:50 2012No.4365534
 
 
 Hello all, just wanted to make a quick update. I just got home from work, I'm currently working on roseluck chronicles ch 2 right now. Hope to have it done "soon"
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousFri Sep 7 21:33:10 2012No.4366576
 
 
 Bump.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSat Sep 8 00:50:51 2012No.4367741
 
 
 poni
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSat Sep 8 05:30:52 2012No.4369820
 
 
 Bump.
 
 
 
 
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SPart !HPI3kcpRZYSat Sep 8 09:50:51 2012No.4373134
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cute motivation cosplayer bump !
 
 
 
 
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PonyGone !RAGT.LOVE.Sat Sep 8 10:33:31 2012No.4373768
 
Quoted by: >>4373992 >>4375349
 
 
 So... I can use any one of the ponies? Even ScrewBall
 
 
 
 
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Mortimer MouseSat Sep 8 10:49:31 2012No.4373992  
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>>4373768
Yes.
 
Especially Screwball
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSat Sep 8 12:18:31 2012No.4375349
 
 
 >>4373768
Screwball would be awesome. Just imagine the awkward moments.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSat Sep 8 12:42:52 2012No.4375714
 
Quoted by: >>4375757 >>4375758 >>4375760
 
 
 So, this works like AiE, but with Ponies on Earth?
 
 
 
 
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SPart !HPI3kcpRZYSat Sep 8 12:45:11 2012No.4375757
 
 
 >>4375714
yes
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSat Sep 8 12:45:11 2012No.4375758
 
 
 >>4375714
Correctomundo.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSat Sep 8 12:46:11 2012No.4375760
 
 
 >>4375714
That's right.
 
 
 
 
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Ponyville Apartments: Mission Adorable  PancakesSat Sep 8 14:13:12 2012No.4377121
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Quoted by: >>4377165
 
 
 >>4351628
> "Are you alright?"
"..."
> The yellow pegasus pony shakes her head.
> She seems a little bit nervous.
> More than usual, anyway.
> Of the pony residents, she is quietest one.
> "Here," I say as I hold out my hand.
"... okay," she whispers.
> I can feel her hoof shaking, but she seems to calm down a bit.
> From our first meeting, I learned that Fluttershy is afraid of humans.
> Probably because she thinks we are all carnivorous monsters.
> Truthfully, she isn't entirely incorrect.
> I mean, I understand that a vegetarian diet is actually very healthy.
> But this isn't something every human is used to.
> Even I have been secretly sneaking out at night for a burger or steak.
"Umm, excuse me?"
> "Yes, Fluttershy?"
"D-do you mind if I get a little closer to you?"
> "Uh, sure. I guess?"
"Oh, thank you..."
> We continue walking together, her hoof linked around my arm.
> I still don't understand why she is fine around me, though.
> But more than that, there is something that worries me.
> I feel a little uncomfortable around her.
> Especially when we're alone together.
> And I can't explain it.
"..."
> Well, it's probably just my imagination.
 
 
 
 
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Ponyville Apartments: Mission Adorable  PancakesSat Sep 8 14:16:12 2012No.4377165
 
Quoted by: >>4377376 >>4377608
 
 
 >>4377121
> I feel a gentle tug on my shirt.
> "Hmm? Something on your mind?"
"Well," says Fluttershy. "I just wanted to apologize."
> "Apologize? For what?"
"It must be troubling for you to accompany me outside like this."
> She lowers her head a bit.
"I mean, I know I asked you to, but it was really thoughtless of me. Applejack already agreed to come, and you probably have better things to do back home."
> I shake my head and pat her lightly on the head.
> I'd be an idiot not to come along with these ponies.
> Especially after what happened the other day with Rarity.
> I had better watch out for them more closely until they get a better handle of things here on Earth.
> "Don't worry about it. Let's just say that I did it for my own interests as well."
"Your own interests?" repeats Fluttershy. "Oh! Oh, my! B-but..."
> She turns away and blushes.
> I can't make out what she is mutters.
> "Eh? What is it?"
"N-nothing! I mean, you don't need to worry about it, right now."
> "I see."
> I wait a bit, but she doesn't say anything else.
> She does seem a little bit happier, though.
> Did I miss something here?
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSat Sep 8 14:30:51 2012No.4377376
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>>4377165
>pancakes updates
pic related
 
 
 
 
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Ponyville Apartments: Mission Adorable  PancakesSat Sep 8 14:49:31 2012No.4377608
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Quoted by: >>4377639 >>4456837
 
 
 >>4377165
> A hoof suddenly slams on my back. Hard.
> I cringe a bit as I turn around.
> Applejack is all smiles.
"Sorry for makin' y'all wait," she says. "I might've gotten a teeny bit distracted from all the different plants in this here garden show."
> "Yeah, I can see that."
> Her saddlebag is now full to the brim. It looks fairly heavy.
"When I mentioned that I ran a farm back home, they started sharing all sorts of stories! Some of 'em even let me buy their seeds so I can try growing 'em!"
"Oh, but Applejack," says Fluttershy. "Don't you think that there isn't enough space back in the apartment building?"
"It'll be fine, sugarcube. I'm sending most of these back to Equestria for the rest of the Apple family."
> "Send them to Equestria? But, how?"
"By mail, of course!"
> By mail? Like how that wall-eyed pegasus sent me that letter?
> Now that I think about it, how do these ponies move things between the two worlds, anyway?
> They act as if they are in constant communication with Equestria.
> Though I have never actually seen how they do it.
> Maybe I should ask Twilight when we get back.
"Hey, you alright, sugarcube?" asks Applejack. "You got quiet all of a sudden."
> "Ah, sorry about that. Just lost in thought."
 
 
 
 
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Ponyville Apartments: Mission Adorable  PancakesSat Sep 8 14:51:33 2012No.4377639
 
Quoted by: >>4456837 >>4485870
 
 
 >>4377608
"So, where'd y'all want to go to next?" asks Applejack.
> "I don't have any particular preference. How about you, Fluttershy?"
"Oh, me?" says Fluttershy. "Well, it would be nice to visit a place with lots of animals... or children. That is, if you two don't mind."
"Sounds great! I'd like to see the animals on Earth, myself. Heard that they look mighty different from ours back home."
> "Hmm, then I guess the best place would be the City Zoo."
> Fluttershy forms the biggest smile on her lips.
> She looks positively delighted.
"That sounds, wonderful!" she says. "What are we waiting for?"
> The yellow pegasus pulls my arm excitedly.
> Her wings brush at my side. They flap slightly.
> So soft. I shudder a bit from the feeling.
"Hold up, girl!" says Applejack. "Now don't get yourself too excited, y'hear?"
> The orange pony pulls Fluttershy away from me.
> She lowers her voice to a whisper.
"Remember what Twilight said - no flying! We need to keep ourselves secret from the humans. So try to relax, alright?"
"S-sorry about that," says Fluttershy. "I'll be on my best behavior."
> I sure hope so.
> We quickly head for the zoo.
> Fluttershy squeaks all the way.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSat Sep 8 14:52:11 2012No.4377655
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Ken D. Blackwell !PAGANm/9UkSat Sep 8 14:56:11 2012No.4377698
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>>4377655
 
 
 
 
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Roseluck Chronicles Ch2: Flowers in the city, pt1: One week later  DakanSat Sep 8 21:04:12 2012No.4380619
 
Quoted by: >>4380630
 
 
 Hello all, sorry that this is kinda late.
I take that back, really late.
Something came up IRL.
So here it is the Next installment of the Roseluck Chronicles!
 
>One week
>One week since everything changed.
>Well not everything.
>Surprising little has changed since that night.
>The earth still turns the sun and the moon still rise
>Pegasi fly through the sky and unicorns perform magic
>Ponies roam the streets throughout the day.
>Not much has changed with the world at all.
>Something has changed with you though.
>You still go to work and school throughout the week.
>But there is something different.
>You feel happier.
>You really can’t explain it though.
>You feel like it’s less of a chore going to classes in the morning
>Your work in the afternoon is still tedious, but it feels less so.
>Maybe it’s the magic all around you now.
>It does make the world a more interesting place to live in.
>Maybe it’s because you’re finally getting used to the idea of the magic around you.
>Or maybe, just maybe…
 
 
 
 
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Roseluck Chronicles 2:1  AnonymousSat Sep 8 21:05:11 2012No.4380630
 
Quoted by: >>4380632 >>4380701
 
 
 >>4380619
>The cold wind of a September night hits you as you leave work.
>It snaps you back to reality.
>You shiver and pull your jacket tighter around you.
>You start making your way back to your apartment
>And back to Rose.
>Rose…
>She is always happy to see you come back.
>Even though you are usually tired from a long day of classes and work.
> You always make some time to talk to her about how you day was
>She then talks about news about her pony friends.
>Maybe she is the reason…
>Only partially…
>It’s nice to go home and look forward to something.
>The conversation is always nice and it gives you a nice way to wind down from the day.
>You quicken your pace and begin to race your way home.
 
 
 
 
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Roseluck Chronicles 2:1  AnonymousSat Sep 8 21:06:52 2012No.4380632
 
Quoted by: >>4380649 >>4380701
 
 
 >>4380630
>You make your way up the stair to your apartment.
>As you approach your door you can hear the sound of voices coming from inside
>Must be the news you reassure yourself.
>As you open the door you see rose sitting on the couch, watching the news
>Like she always is when you make it home.
>Upon the door open she looks up and smiles at you.
“Hello, Anon! How was your day?”
>You smile back, hanging your jacket up on the coat hanger.
>“It was fine, how was yours?”
“It was good, what’s for dinner tonight?”
>You shrug, you haven’t really thought about dinner.
>”How do you like the sound of spaghetti?”
“Sounds good to me.”
>With that you start on dinner
>It isn’t long before the noodles are boiled and the sauce is ready
>You bring to plates of spaghetti to the living room and sit down next to Rose on the couch
 
 
 
 
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Roseluck Chronicles 2:1  AnonymousSat Sep 8 21:09:32 2012No.4380649
 
Quoted by: >>4380653 >>4380701
 
 
 >>4380632
>You settle in next to Rose and prepare to eat
>Rose smiles at you.
“So tell me about your day…”
>You smile and start talking about your morning at school
>She listens quietly and slowly eats her spaghetti.
>you launch into a long explanation about what you learned today
>You don’t know if she understands what you are talking about.
>But she never says anything and is happy to listen to you talk.
>You often wonder if she likes to hear about your schooling or if it’s you just talking
>You finish off with how your afternoon was at work
>Although there is very little you seem to be able to talk to her about from work
>Its always the same thing over and over again after all.
>But, she doesn’t mind.
>You finish the story about your day and smile back at her.
>”So anything new in pony society today”
>She frowns a bit at the question.
>”Is there something wrong?”
“They still haven’t found the princesses, or any news about how we got here.”
 
 
 
 
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Roseluck Chronicles 2:1  AnonymousSat Sep 8 21:10:52 2012No.4380653
 
Quoted by: >>4380656 >>4380701
 
 
 >>4380649
>You also frown at this.
>Right their princesses, Luna and Celestia. The ones who controlled their sun and moon
>No one has been able to find them in the past week.
>It has all the ponies worrying.
>Some even wonder if they might be still in Equestria
>And as far as the event that brought the ponies here.
>Well, an even bigger mystery.
>None of the unicorns have ever heard of a spell that would bring them to another world
>Although some good news has come out of this.
>As far as everyone can tell, all of the other ponies have been accounted for
>Save the princesses.
>You sigh as you remember the events from the past week
>”How is everyp0ny doing other than that though?”
>Everyp0ny, still need to get used to that.
“Everyp0ny seems to be fine. They are adjusting to your world.”
“There are a lot of differences, like the weather.”
>”Oh yeah, you mentioned that the pegasi control the weather in Equestria.”
>She nods
“Since weather happens automatically happens here, they are having hard time adjusting to the randomness.”
“It appears that the pegasi can still move clouds and stuff though.”
>”It seems like the unicorns’ magic is unaffected though.”
>She nods again
 
 
 
 
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Roseluck Chronicles 2:1  AnonymousSat Sep 8 21:11:32 2012No.4380656
 
Quoted by: >>4380689 >>4380701
 
 
 >>4380653
>By now both of you have finished you spaghetti
>You get up and bring the plate over to the sink
>You yawn as you place the plates down
>It’s getting late
>You turn to Rose who has been watching you since you got up
>”It’s getting late rose, aren’t you tired”
>At the mention of this she yawns herself
>She smiles and nods
“Anon? Can I ask you something?”
>”Sure rose what is it?”
“I was wondering if tomorrow we could go out and see the city…”
>You think back, has she even left the apartment since we went to the park…
>Probably not, maybe a day out on the city would do her some good.
>See the sights and sounds,
>Maybe experience our world first hand.
>You smile at Rose
>”That sounds like a great idea for tomorrow”
>”As a matter of fact, I’ll get up early and get everything going.”
>”We’ll make a whole day of it”
>She smiles back at you and slowly lays down on the couch.
“Thank you anon, goodnight.”
>”Goodnight rose…”
 
 
 
 
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Blender- !YZfhywTDsoSat Sep 8 21:15:31 2012No.4380680
 
Quoted by: >>4380692
 
 
 >>4316293
Where do you keep parts 1 - 3?
I'd like to have a read of them
 
 
 
 
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DakanSat Sep 8 21:16:51 2012No.4380689
 
 
 >>4380656
Ok end of Chapter 2 Part 1
 
Pastebin link for Chapter 2
http://pastebin.com/GGPmyxDw
 
I really want to have part 2 & 3 sometime tommorow. Hopefully I will. Enjoy part one, and as always...
 
Constructive Criticism is appreciated
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSat Sep 8 21:17:12 2012No.4380692
 
Quoted by: >>4380701
 
 
 >>4380680
Here is the complete chapter 1
 
http://pastebin.com/0j2XsQPn
 
 
 
 
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DakanSat Sep 8 21:19:11 2012No.4380701
 
Quoted by: >>4380892
 
 
 >>4380692
>>4380656
>>4380653
>>4380632
>>4380649
>>4380630
On a side note...
 
Why does it keep clearing my name field!
 
 
 
 
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Blender- !YZfhywTDsoSat Sep 8 21:52:51 2012No.4380892
 
Quoted by: >>4380937
 
 
 >>4380701
No idea.
 
Storywise: I liked it for the most part, some of the pacing was a little off and the suggested feelings Anon had for Rose were a little too much too soon (maybe that was just me).
And grammar / spelling could be improved also.
But for the most part, I liked it. A nice change up to the AiE I usually read / write.
 
 
 
 
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DakanSat Sep 8 22:02:51 2012No.4380937
 
 
 >>4380892
I realized this about the pacing And the feeling. Since the I have tried to back off on that part. I feel like that early slip up is going to keep haunting me. As for the grammar, I'm trying to improve as I go. Honestly this is the first story I have ever written. So it's kind of an experiment. Thanks for your interest in the story.
 
 
 
 
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SPart !HPI3kcpRZYSun Sep 9 00:46:31 2012No.4382195
 
Quoted by: >>4383194
 
 
 one week just TV ? is the programm that good in the states ?
 
 
 
 
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DakanSun Sep 9 02:39:58 2012No.4383194
 
Quoted by: >>4383546
 
 
 >>4382195
As far as anon knows, and what they have talked about. She has been watching the News. Or it could be from a disease called Lack-of-a-plot-device-itis. I seem to suffer from that a lot. Will add to my notes of things I need to expand upon.
 
 
 
 
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SPart !HPI3kcpRZYSun Sep 9 03:16:52 2012No.4383546
 
Quoted by: >>4387531
 
 
 >>4383194
haha at least she learned how bad humans are...
guess books are a good plot device too xD
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSun Sep 9 07:00:32 2012No.4386626
 
 
 Bamp
 
 
 
 
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DakanSun Sep 9 08:23:32 2012No.4387531
 
Quoted by: >>4387632
 
 
 >>4383546
Book?! who would use a crazy idea like books? that is the most absurd thing i've ever heard. Honestly... books...
 
Update:working on part 2
 
also bump
 
 
 
 
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SPart !HPI3kcpRZYSun Sep 9 08:30:51 2012No.4387632
 
 
 >>4387531
ask Twilight Sparkel about books xD
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch2 Pt2:A Musical Morning  DakanSun Sep 9 09:58:52 2012No.4388779
 
Quoted by: >>4388793
 
 
 >You awake bright and early the next morning.
>You quickly dress and stroll into the kitchen.
>As you do you take a quick glance over at the couch where Rose
>Still asleep
>You shrug, might as well start on breakfast.
>You open up a few cabinets and retrieve the pancake mix.
>Pancakes, always a good way to start off a Saturday morning.
>It isn’t long before you’re flipping pancakes over a hot skillet.
>Above the hissing of the skillet you can hear Rose beginning to stir
>”Good Morning Rose, how many pancakes would you like?”
>She blinks a few times and yawns.
“Good morning Anon, just three please.”
>You hear her get up and trot into the bathroom
>The sound of running water makes you realize something.
>You have never heard her use the shower before.
>As a matter of fact, this was the first time you have ever seen her enter the bathroom
 
 
 
 
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Roseluck Chronicles Ch2 Pt2:A Musical Morning  DakanSun Sep 9 09:59:12 2012No.4388793
 
Quoted by: >>4388811
 
 
 >>4388779
>Your almost too caught up in your thoughts to catch the next sound that comes from the bathroom
>Humming
>No a little more than humming, singing a melody.
>No definite words, but singing nonetheless.
>It is this that brings an all too sudden realization to you.
>You know next to nothing about the mare that is living with you.
>You know about her other pony friends; you know a little about their society, you even know a few names of their important people.
>But you know next to nothing about Rose.
>You resolve to change that today
>After all, with the way things look, you two might be stuck together for a while.
>You really should get to know her.
>You finish up the last of the pancakes and put them over on the living room table
>You wait a few minutes for Rose to finish while enjoying the music summing from the shower.
>Eventually the singing and the water stops and you can hear in the process of drying off.
>She slowly walks out of the bathroom slightly damp from a shower and joins you on the couch
 
 
 
 
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Roseluck Chronicles Ch2 Pt2:A Musical Morning  DakanSun Sep 9 10:01:33 2012No.4388811
 
Quoted by: >>4388829
 
 
 >>4388793
>As she sits down next to you, you are once again greeted with a strong smell of roses
>How does she always smell like roses…?
>The thought casually slips from you mind
>You smile at her, “So, you have a beautiful singing voice.”
>She blushes a bit and looks embarrassed
“I didn’t think you would hear it, I usually just sing to my flowers back at home…”
>She looks down at the pancakes, and smiles.
“The pancakes look delicious.”
>”Thank you; they are a secret family recipe.”
“Oh? What’s so secret about them?”
>”If I told you that, it wouldn’t be a secret anymore…”
>She laughs at this.
>”I have never seen you take a shower before.”
>That was a stupid comment to make
>She coughs slightly on the pancake she had in her mouth.
>The look that she gives is one of worry.
“I’m sorry, should I have not done that..?”
>”No it’s perfectly fine, I’m actually thankful, I wouldn’t want a smelly pony running around my apartment.”
>You chuckle at this, but she seems less than amused
 
 
 
 
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Roseluck Chronicles Ch2 Pt2:A Musical Morning  DakanSun Sep 9 10:02:12 2012No.4388829
 
Quoted by: >>4388839
 
 
 >>4388811
>Good one knuckle head now try and save it.
>”I just didn’t know if you ponies used showers or not…”
>”I guess there is a lot I don’t know about you…”
>She nods.
“There is a lot that we don’t know about each other.”
>”I guess you’re right. But, anyways I want to let you know that you shouldn’t be embarrassed about taking a shower or making yourself something to eat. Mi casa es su casa.”
>She tilts her head at this.
“What does that mean?”
>Mental note, there is no Spanish language equivalent for ponies.
>”It means that ‘my house is your house.’ Basically, you should feel completely at home while you’re staying with me.”
>She smiles broadly at this.
“Thank you so much, Anon.”
>She immediately springs on you with a hug.
>You are overcome by the smell of damp fur and roses.
>You hug her back, running your fingers through her silky mane again.
>”It really is not trouble at all. I am glad to help.”
>She releases her hug and goes back to eating her pancakes.
>You both quickly finish up your breakfast and start getting ready for you day out in town.
 
 
 
 
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Roseluck Chronicles Ch2 Pt2:A Musical Morning  DakanSun Sep 9 10:02:51 2012No.4388839
 
Quoted by: >>4388849
 
 
 >>4388829
>”So Rose, anything in particular that you want to do while we are out today?”
>She brings her hoof up and scratches her head.
“Well, I was hoping we could find somewhere with lots of flowers. I haven’t seen any since I’ve gotten here.”
>You nod, that’s right she loves flower.
>You make a quick mental note of that fact.
>”Anything else?”
“Well, since it does seem like I’m going to be here for a while, I was wondering if we could go shopping for some boots, and warm clothes. The News has been talking about how winter is coming and how cold it’s going to be.”
>Chicago winters get pretty chilly, you remind yourself
>”I don’t know if we will be able to find clothes that can fit you. I’m sure that we can make a good try to find some though.”
“There is also one other things I would like to do.”
>”What that…?
“I would like it if we could go see, what is it called, a movie.”
>You smile. You haven’t been to a movie in a long time.
>”Sure, a movie actually sounds great today.”
>”Well, let’s get a move on; looks like we have a long day ahead of us.
>You both make your way out of the apartment complex and down into the city streets of Chicago.
 
 
 
 
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DakanSun Sep 9 10:04:51 2012No.4388849
 
Quoted by: >>4389220
 
 
 >>4388839
Ok end of Ch2 Pt2
I liked the way this turned out. I can't wait to start on the next part.
 
Part 3 this afternoon.
 
Constructive Criticism alway appreciated
 
 
 
 
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SPart !HPI3kcpRZYSun Sep 9 10:27:11 2012No.4389220
 
Quoted by: >>4389549
 
 
 >>4388849
nice hehe
what movie are they going to watch ?
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSun Sep 9 10:30:51 2012No.4389278
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Quoted by: >>4389541
 
 
 Dark Knight Rises
 
 
 
 
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SPart !HPI3kcpRZYSun Sep 9 10:45:11 2012No.4389541
 
Quoted by: >>4426529
 
 
 >>4389278
that's not even funny ... you know ... ah maybe on 4chan it was funny ...
 
 
 
 
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DakanSun Sep 9 10:46:52 2012No.4389549
 
Quoted by: >>4393960
 
 
 >>4389220
I'll drop a hint. It's going to be horribly punny. Yet it sets up a terribly romantic moment a lot farther down the road.
 
Captcha: tiancle giving
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSun Sep 9 12:45:11 2012No.4391480
 
 
 Nightly bump.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSun Sep 9 13:15:11 2012No.4391979
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Quoted by: >>4393953
 
 
 bumpety for The Roseluck Chronicles. Stim-ply amazing.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSun Sep 9 17:14:18 2012No.4393953
 
Quoted by: >>4393960
 
 
 >>4391979
That sounds like fun. Also 4 hour bump.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSun Sep 9 17:14:38 2012No.4393960
 
 
 >>4393953
Meant for
>>4389549
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch2. Pt3:A day in the City  DakanSun Sep 9 22:32:00 2012No.4396350
 
Quoted by: >>4396353
 
 
 Origianlly I wanted to have this up sooner. But IRL decided to rear its ugly head... but here it is, the longest part up to date of the Roseluck Chronicles! Enjoy!
 
>You and Rose step out into the morning streets of Chicago.
>And you are both immediately met by the chilly morning breeze
>Rose shudders against the chill and looks up at you.
>”Right first order of business, some warm clothes.”
>You both set off down the street toward the Mag Mile.
>Even at this semi early hour the streets are just starting to fill with people and ponies
>You notice that most of them aren’t that dissimilar than you.
>Usually a group of maybe two or three.
>Almost all of the groups have at least one pony with them.
>You occasionally see a lone pony walking along.
>Or you’ll hear the flutter of feathers above and see a pair of pegasi pass over.
>But most are exactly like you.
>It brings relief to you that you’re not the only one escorting around a pony.
>You notice that Rose is once again at awe with the city.
>You smile at the mare walking besides you.
>”If you have any questions, please ask…”
>Rose looks back up at you
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch2. Pt3:A day in the City  DakanSun Sep 9 22:33:39 2012No.4396353
 
Quoted by: >>4396358
 
 
 >>4396350
“Tell me about the city.”
>Such a broad topic
>Where to start…
>You begin by telling her about most of the major landmarks around the city.
>Millennium Park, Navy Pier, The Willis Tower, all the major sports stadiums, Union Station, The Mag Mile, and any others you can name off the top of your head.
 >You then launch into a brief explanation of some historical events from the city.
>By the time you are done with your history lesson you have reached the beginning of the Mag Mile
>As you turn and walk down the Mag Mile most of the stores are just opening for business.
>The streets are more crowded with people here.
>Now it’s your turn Anon…
>”Tell me about Ponyville.”
>You hear Rose sigh…
>She launches into an explanation of ponyville and the surrounding areas.
>You try and keep up with all of the terms she is talking about
>But to be honest you head is still swimming with the reality of it all
>You remind yourself that she probably feels the same about you and your world
>You try and soak up as much information as possible
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch2. Pt3:A day in the City  DakanSun Sep 9 22:34:59 2012No.4396358
 
Quoted by: >>4396366
 
 
 >>4396353
>As you near the end of the talk you spot a store with a bunch of coats and boots in the shop window
>It’s rather a small and modest store, but they have a nice selection of clothing
> You and rose make your way over to the store and are greeted by one of the employees.
>You smile at the clerk, “Hello, I was hoping you can help me and my friend find some warm clothes that will fit her.”
>The store clerk sighs as he looks down at Rose.
“You aren’t the first Pony that has come looking for clothing…”
>The clerk walks into the back and returns a few minutes later with a few jackets
“These should fit you, although they are kind of hard to closes up since most of them are made with zippers.”
“If you’re looking for boots, you aren’t going to find much luck anywhere. Until someone makes some custom boots; human boots don’t fit comfortably on ponies…”
>You thank the store clerk
>You help rose try on some of the jackets.
>At first she even has a hard time getting them onto her body.
>You can see what the store clerk meant by having trouble with them.
>Roses hooves weren’t made to grip small object such as zippers.
>Maybe with enough practice she could use her mouth to zipper it up, but for right now, she will need some assistance.
>After picking out a few jackets, a scarf, and warm hat you two make your way out onto the streets again
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch2 Pt3;A day in the City  DakanSun Sep 9 22:35:18 2012No.4396366
 
Quoted by: >>4396373
 
 
 >>4396358
>After walking down a few stores you notice something that catches your eye
>You guide Rose into a store that specializes in hand bags.
>You start talking to the sales woman about a bag that would be comfortable on Rose.
>The sales woman doesn’t look exactly thrilled with the idea of having a pony in her store.
“I’m sorry but I have nothing that would be suitable for that thing. Please leave.”
>You feel anger build inside of you as you quickly escort Rose out of the store.
>Once outside slowly put your emotions in check.
>”I’m so sorry, you had to hear that Rose…”
>Rose is looking at the ground and barely even acknowledges you.
“It’s ok, I know that some humans don’t view us as you do, I just didn’t…”
>You reach down and slowly pet her mane.
>”I know, I think that enough shopping for today. Let’s make our way to the park.”
>You walk off of the Mag Mile and start to head for Millennium Park
>It is one of the closet places that you know of that has flowers that are in bloom right now.
>If it was earlier in the year, you would have probably have taken Rose to the Botanic Gardens.
>But, the park will have to do.
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch2 Pt3;A day in the City  DakanSun Sep 9 22:36:59 2012No.4396373
 
Quoted by: >>4396382
 
 
 >>4396366
>On your way to the park, Rose asks the question you have feared
“Tell me about the Earth and Humanity…”
>You might as well be blunt with her.
>She has already seen the cruelty of a human, and she has been watching the news all week.
>She should know the rest of the story.
>”We aren’t all like that…”
>”Most of us are good natured, hardworking, and mean the world good.”
>”It just seems that the bad are the ones who stand out the most.”
>Using that as a starting point, you launch into an abbreviated history of mankind
>You lightly touch on the differences of the beginnings of mankind.
>You go through the rise and fall of the great empires of mankind
>You move on to the discovery of America and the history leading up to present day.
>”Our history is marred with blood of the innocent and wicked, all in the name of the survival of the species.”
>”On top of all that we don’t take care of the planet and we continue to hurt others for our own personal gain.”
>By now, you are just reaching the park.
>”But even though all of that, there are the bright points in our history that make it all worthwhile.”
>You reach down and pat Rose on the head.
>”I believe that when man looks back and writes about the day when ponies came to the earth, it will be written as one of the brightest points in our history.”
>”Well, here we are, the closest in the city you are going to get to blooming flowers…”
>In truth there aren’t many flowers in bloom.
>But the ones that are bloom in patches on the side of the walkways that run through the park.
>You see Rose gallop over and take a deep breath over by the flowers.
>She looks the happiest she has been since she has arrived on Earth.
>For some odd reason, that makes you happy…
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch2 Pt3;A day in the City  DakanSun Sep 9 22:38:58 2012No.4396382
 
Quoted by: >>4396406
 
 
 >>4396373
>You spend a few hours walking through the park admiring the flowers.
>Eventually, you two rest on a park bench.
>Your turn again, Anon.
>”Tell me about the Land of Equestria, about the history of the ponies.”
>Rose smiles at you
“I guess that’s a fair question…”
“In all honesty, we aren’t that different.”
“Ponies have had wars and there are somep0nies that can be just as mean as humans.”
“The only real difference I can see is that we take better care of our land…”
>She goes on to explain that there might be a difference between our lack of magical ability
>She then jumps into an explanation of the land of Equestria, and its history.
>She was right of course seems like the human condition can be applied to ponies.
>Maybe it should be renamed as the living condition.
>Since all living things apply to it.
>You are so engrossed with her stories about Equestria that you nearly forget to check your watch.
>Its almost time get you should be leaving to get to the movies.
>You relay this to Rose
>She nods and gets up and follows you out of the park.
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch2 Pt3:A day in the City  DakanSun Sep 9 22:43:39 2012No.4396406
 
Quoted by: >>4399319 >>4399797
 
 
 >>4396382
>On the way to the movie theater you decide it is a good idea to tell Rose about the different kind of movies.
>You give her a summary of movie genres and what each entails.
>By the time you reach the theater you think she has a pretty good understanding about movies
>You point out each movie and tell her the genre that the movie falls under
>You also give her a mini summary about the movie making sure not to spoil anything.
>After you do this you ask her which movie she wants to see
>She takes a long look at the list of movies on the board and eventually point to the movie
>You chuckle to yourself about the movie selection
>”Ok, if you’re sure, I’ll tell you though, it’s a long one, we might want to get a big bucket of popcorn for this.”
>You walk up to the ticket counter
>”Hello, I would like two tickets to the next show of Titanic please.”
 
End of Part 3
I think that this part came together really well. I wasn't exactly sure if I should include that part with the saleswoman in it, but it turned out pretty good in the end.
 
So Part 4 hopefully sometime during the week, not sure though, definetly on Fri. or Sat. I will be wrapping up this chapter during the weeked. Optimisticaly, I want to have Ch3 Pt1 up sometime on Sunday.
 
Constructive Criticism alway appreciated
 
 
 
 
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SPart !HPI3kcpRZYMon Sep 10 03:32:59 2012No.4399319
 
 
 >>4396406
thought you would add the moonlanding ...
because that would be quiet funny ...
 
anyway good work so far
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousMon Sep 10 04:05:19 2012No.4399797
 
Quoted by: >>4410646
 
 
 >>4396406
 
You and Pancake are the reasons I frequent when i can to this thread. Keep up the work and I'm sure you won't disappoint, at least not me anyway
 
 
 
 
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DakanMon Sep 10 06:37:38 2012No.4401996
 
 
 Good morning PiE bump
 
 
 
 
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LimeLightMon Sep 10 07:03:39 2012No.4402559
 
Quoted by: >>4404393
 
 
 Well... I guess I'll never hear about pillow again qq
 
 
 
 
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DakanMon Sep 10 09:03:19 2012No.4404393
 
 
 >>4402559
Hey, I'm sure they want to tell their story as much as you want to hear it. But like most of these stories. They are written for the entertainment of both reader and writer. And most of them are written on their free time. Patience is a virtue my friend, and it will be rewarded in time.
 
 
 
 
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DakanMon Sep 10 11:59:38 2012No.4407314
 
 
 Time for a bump...
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousMon Sep 10 15:15:19 2012No.4410646
 
Quoted by: >>4410671
 
 
 >>4399797
Seconded.
 
BTW did Mr. Blue die or something?
 
 
 
 
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Mr. BlueMon Sep 10 15:17:19 2012No.4410671
 
 
 >>4410646
Real life is eating me up. I have no time for things. I'm having to take a break from anything more than a little late night and rare early day browsing on this board. Just a busy time of year.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousMon Sep 10 18:55:19 2012No.4412564
 
Quoted by: >>4414158
 
 
 4-hour bump.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousTue Sep 11 00:10:00 2012No.4414158
 
Quoted by: >>4416386
 
 
 >>4412564
Another bump here.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousTue Sep 11 05:49:00 2012No.4416386
 
 
 >>4414158
And another.
 
 
 
 
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Mortimer MouseTue Sep 11 10:41:19 2012No.4421180
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Sorry about not posting anything if any of you were wondering where I've been. I've just been having some outside problems. Anyways- I have a little of the next part written up and I plan on completing it and posting soon
 
Anyways; pastebin is here in case anyone wants to catch up on my extremely slow but progressing story http://pastebin.com/u/Mortimer_Mouse
 
Also bump.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousTue Sep 11 14:06:20 2012No.4425120
 
 
 Page 9 bump.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousTue Sep 11 15:46:01 2012No.4426529
 
Quoted by: >>4429771
 
 
 >>4389541
>that's not even funny
 
Sorry, did that joke offend you? Because it was pretty good to me. Also stop with the whole "4chan internet hate machine" thinking.
 
 
 
 
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DakanTue Sep 11 20:00:59 2012No.4428599
 
 
 An little update...
 
Starting to look like that pt4 will be late friday, and more so saturday...
 
Also bump...
 
 
 
 
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SPart !HPI3kcpRZYTue Sep 11 23:38:59 2012No.4429771
 
 
 >>4426529
lol hell no, i have no problem with jokes like that. as long as shit don't happend in my country xD
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousWed Sep 12 04:36:43 2012No.4431674
 
 
 Giving the thread the ol 5-hour bump.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousWed Sep 12 05:10:23 2012No.4432121
 
Quoted by: >>4433925 >>4434561 >>4436340 >>4439192
 
 
 A question for those here...
 
Back in the AiE thread a few weeks back there were two stories that would qualify as PiE rather than AiE.
 
The first involved an amnesia troubled unicorn mare named 'Anon' coming to Earth and rescued by a human named Jack. What ever happened to that and does anyone remember who wrote it?
 
The second involved Applejack coming to Earth while the other ponies were all trying to figure out what happened to her, while she was dealing with appearing in some Anon's home.
 
Does anyone know who wrote either/have their pastebins/know if anything more is being done with either?
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousWed Sep 12 07:37:04 2012No.4433925
 
 
 >>4432121
I wish I did. Those two were actually really well.
 
Also, bump
 
 
 
 
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Ponygone !RAGT.LOVE.Wed Sep 12 08:22:04 2012No.4434561
 
 
 >>4432121
I remember those, good stuff
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousWed Sep 12 10:02:23 2012No.4436340
 
 
 >>4432121
I can answer your first one with a pastebin and name of the story
http://pastebin.com/u/Blazang
Anon in Earth
I really wish the writer would continue that story, it was shaping up to be quite interesting.
 
As for the second one I remember seeing it but I can't for the life of me remember the name of the writer, sorry.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousWed Sep 12 12:35:23 2012No.4439192
 
 
 >>4432121
Found it, it was Hobbypony. Here's his pastebin:
http://pastebin.com/u/Hobbypony
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousWed Sep 12 16:49:00 2012No.4443328
 
 
 bumparu
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousWed Sep 12 21:30:44 2012No.4445305
 
 
 Bump!
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousThu Sep 13 00:55:51 2012No.4446814
 
 
 4 hour bamp
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousThu Sep 13 01:51:03 2012No.4447274
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Quoted by: >>4448640
 
 
 Needs more motor city/pervert pillow story.
 
We need more of it man, dont abandon it without an ending.
 
 
 
 
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Mortimer MouseThu Sep 13 04:09:24 2012No.4448640
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>>4447274
I never said I was abandoning it.
 
Also I updated my pastebin with maybe four or five paragraphs of writing because I got stuck for a day or two and decided not to post it here because it wasn't a whole lot, but I'll be continuing from there.
 
And I may have hinted at when I'll actually do a proper update.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousThu Sep 13 09:41:03 2012No.4453454
 
 
 Page 8 bump.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousThu Sep 13 12:37:24 2012No.4456683
 
 
 Burmp
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousThu Sep 13 12:45:03 2012No.4456837
 
 
 >>4377639
>>4377608
It is always a pleasure
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousThu Sep 13 16:59:24 2012No.4460391
 
Quoted by: >>4460421
 
 
 sooo...who is gonna make all this into some pics so i can save an read later?
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousThu Sep 13 17:01:03 2012No.4460421
 
 
 >>4460391
>reading from pics
>2012
nigga, we use google docs and pastebin
get on our level
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousThu Sep 13 22:11:04 2012No.4462575
 
 
 5 hours? Bump.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousThu Sep 13 23:46:43 2012No.4463267
 
 
 bump
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousFri Sep 14 03:24:43 2012No.4464556
 
 
 almost Friday bump
 
 
 
 
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SPart !HPI3kcpRZYFri Sep 14 04:58:43 2012No.4465641
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2 hours befor frieday bumb xD
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousFri Sep 14 09:26:43 2012No.4469463  
 
 
Ohshitniggerwhatareyoudoingonpage10?
 
 
 
 
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PancakesFri Sep 14 09:54:43 2012No.4469926
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Quoted by: >>4471085
 
 
 Just posting to let you know that I am already dead tired. Updates maybe tomorrow. Week's been hell.
 
Pic unrelated, but would make a crazy fun story. Hitler starts WW2 after Fluttershy returns to Equestria.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousFri Sep 14 12:39:24 2012No.4471085
 
 
 >>4469926
Updates whoot! Can't wait you guys!
You writefags got us hooked so eedwe're cool with waiting. Take all the time you n
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousFri Sep 14 14:35:23 2012No.4472830
 
 
 Is Friday bump.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousFri Sep 14 18:20:23 2012No.4475626
 
 
 patient waiting bump
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousFri Sep 14 19:32:44 2012No.4476184
 
Quoted by: >>4476203 >>4477702 >>4479046
 
 
 I might consider writing for this thread since a lot of the original writefags appear to have been busy during the last several days
Some questions,the first one heavily related... As this is pretty much my first trip in writelandia,I'd like to know if I should write my story first,proofread it before posting,or should I attempt to wirte it on the go
Another a bit unrelated topic I'd like to ask upon is if AiE ever had a story in which the ponies and humans actually don't share language and they have to figure out how to communicate with each other
 
 
 
 
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Mortimer MouseFri Sep 14 19:34:23 2012No.4476203
 
Quoted by: >>4476291
 
 
 >>4476184
I personally always try to do a quick proof-read of whatever I write before posting. As for the language barrier, AiE usually solved that problem with Twilight or Celestia casting some kind of translator spell.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousFri Sep 14 19:48:24 2012No.4476291
 
 
 >>4476203
This... honestly sounds lazy as fuck
Personally I think it would be interesting to see how far anons on both sides would reach if they had to figure out what the hell the other side is mostly talking about on daily basis
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousFri Sep 14 23:03:23 2012No.4477500
 
 
 3 hour bump before bed.
 
 
 
 
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DakanFri Sep 14 23:29:55 2012No.4477664
 
 
 Hey all, I know i pormise a new chapter on fri night. but, honestly im pretty drunk rightnow. so im gonna sllep off my stupor. See you all tommorow morning. When i will have a new chapter. ready.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousFri Sep 14 23:34:43 2012No.4477693
 
 
 The direct inverse of AiE? Paint me interested. Lurk mode initiate!
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousFri Sep 14 23:35:03 2012No.4477702
 
 
 >>4476184
There has been a story where they didn't share a language, I just don't remember who wrote it. Although, the writefag has been inactive so it's discontinued.
 
 
 
 
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Mr. BlueSat Sep 15 02:50:44 2012No.4479046
 
 
 >>4476184
For me it depends on if you're doing the alternate universe route or the other planet in same universe route. If it's an alternate earth then you can easily write off similarities between worlds. If you want to be serious and mess around with language then you'll have to work in the possibility that Equestria and Earth had been connected somehow because if you want scifi realism then you need to acknowledge that an alien world would not have creatures that looked anything like us, the closest you could hope is 'also carbon based and exist in the only 3 dimensions."
 
So unless you're writing a simple thing where the language deal will be handled like all other mainstream scifi (by ignoring it) then you don't need to pretend at realism. Otherwise the options are 1. alternate universe/timeline, or 2. The world had been in contact before, resulting in myhtology concerning Unicorns, pegasi, Griffins, dragons etc.
 
I have ideas for a scifi version of Equestria where certain portals connected the two worlds and maybe others at various times. I have the griffins being less lionlike and more reptilian, hailing from the same world as the dragons. Things like that. all ideas for stories I'll never even think up.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSat Sep 15 03:56:44 2012No.4479750
 
 
 /r/questing list of all stories in a pastebin or something like that. That'd be appreciated.
Also It'd easier to read instead clicking backlinked posts.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSat Sep 15 09:06:43 2012No.4484052
 
 
 page 10 bump
 
 
 
 
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SPart !HPI3kcpRZYSat Sep 15 10:20:43 2012No.4485185
 
 
 just2be sure bump
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSat Sep 15 11:05:23 2012No.4485863
 
 
 Bump to keep the spammer from 404'ing it.
 
 
 
 
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Ponyville Apartments: Mission Adorable  PancakesSat Sep 15 11:05:05 2012No.4485870
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 >>4377639
"Oh! Are those baby bears? They're so cute!"
> Fluttershy squees in delight.
"And those little lion cubs! And those tiny tortoises!"
> Her wings flap a bit. I pat her back quickly to flatten them.
> She notices and lowers her head.
"S-sorry," she whispers. "I got a little too excited."
> I gently pat her on the head.
> "Try to relax. You have plenty of time to enjoy yourself."
"That's right, sugarcube!" says Applejack. "We'll be followin' right behind you."
"But how about you two? Won't you be bored if we stay here too long?"
"Ah, don't sweat it! Me and this here human have a lot to talk about."
> Huh? We do? I don't think Applejack mentioned anything before we left.
> Fluttershy looks a little worried.
"A-are you sure, Applejack? Twilight said that-"
"Don't worry. I know what Twilight said."
> The pegasus pony glances at me for a moment.
> She slowly lets go of my arm and sighs.
"Alright then," says Fluttershy. "If you say so."
> She looks back at us one more time before running up to the lion cage.
> And in an instant, she returns to her excited self.
> Fluttershy seems to be enjoying the place.
> And I doubt if she can cause much trouble here.
> So I clear my throat and turn to Applejack.
> "So, what is it that you wanted to talk about?"
"The truth," whispers the earth pony.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSat Sep 15 11:09:23 2012No.4485924
 
 
 no, bamp
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSat Sep 15 11:14:43 2012No.4486020
 
 
 >>4485870
Hell yeah, story time! Keep 'em rollin'!
 
 
 
 
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Ponyville Apartments: Mission Adorable  PancakesSat Sep 15 11:32:45 2012No.4486349
 
Quoted by: >>4486926
 
 
 >>4485870
> Applejack doesn't say anything else.
> Looks like it is my turn to ask questions.
> "Well then, let's start with a simple one. How did you ponies learn about Earth?"
"Heh," says the earth pony. "That one isn't simple at all."
> She pauses for a moment, thinking.
"From what I reckon, Equestrian folk discovered this place only recently. And by accident, too. Can't tell you much besides that, since I don't know much about the first incident myself."
> "You aren't the first ponies to arrive here?"
"Nope. The existence of Earth is being kept secret from everyp0ny. Only a few are even aware that humans exist. Heck, my friends and I only learned about y'all a few weeks ago."
> "I see. Then humans and ponies met in the past?"
"Yep. Don't know much of how those encounters went, though. All I know is what our researchers and scientists told us during our briefing."
> "And that is?"
"They said that the technology and magic on Earth is on a similar level as Equestria. And that it was only a matter of time until humans discover a way to travel to our world."
> I see. So that's what it is.
> That's why they want to observe human behavior.
> "So I'm guessing that you're supposed to be ambassadors of Equestria, or something?"
"Hmm."
> She pauses to think again. Applejack looks a little sad when she speaks.
"I'm not really sure, to tell you the truth. We've just been instructed to send reports about humans while we're here."
> Then, she cheers up and gives me an encouraging smile.
"But I do hope that y'all can live in peace with us Equestrian folk, someday."
 
 
 
 
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Ponyville Apartments: Mission Adorable  PancakesSat Sep 15 12:07:05 2012No.4486926
 
Quoted by: >>4487441 >>4487470
 
 
 >>4486349
> A group of excited children pass by.
> Their guardian seems to be a single middle-aged woman.
"Remember children," says the woman. "It was thanks to our anonymous donor that we can spend the day at the zoo. So be on your best behavior, alright?"
"Can we have some ice cream?" asks one of the children.
"We'll all have ice cream after we see the animals."
> The children cheer at this.
"Now go ahead and explore, but come back here with your partner when it's time."
> With that, the children from the orphanage scatter in different directions.
> Hmm? Fluttershy seems to have noticed the children.
> She watches them very closely, covering her mouth to stop from squeaking.
> The pegasus pony is even more excited than before.
> But she is no longer looking at the animals.
> Is it my imagination, or...
> Suddenly, I feel a tug on my shirt.
"Is that all you wanted to ask?" says Applejack.
> "Oh, sorry. I got a little distracted."
> The earth pony looks up at me, worried.
"So what else would you like to know?"
> Hmm. I paused to think.
> "Well, how about you tell me more about your farm?"
 
 
 
 
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Ponyville Apartments: Mission Adorable  PancakesSat Sep 15 12:34:44 2012No.4487441  
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>>4486926
"And that's how we buck apples back at Sweet Apple Acres!"
> "Interesting. Never thought that one could harvest apples that way."
> Mental note: do not get kicked by this pony.
> It will likely hurt. A whole lot.
"Well, thanks for listenin'."
> We both fall silent for a while. Then, Applejack stops.
"That... wasn't what you really wanted to ask me, was it?"
> "What makes you say that?"
"Well, I know that Twilight hasn't been perfectly honest with you and-"
> I raise my hand to interrupt.
> "Don't worry about it. You told me more than enough already."
"But-"
> "I said, don't worry about it."
> Applejack sighs and smiles back at me.
"Heh, if you say so. I'm startin' to see what Twilight meant about you."
> "Meant about what?"
"Err, never mind!"
> The earth pony blushes. She quickly tries to continue the conversation.
"B-but anyway, I need to tell you that I still disagree with all of this secrecy. If all humans were even half like you, I'm sure we'd have no trouble getting along!"
> Then, her smile slowly fades away.
"But humans aren't all like that, are they?" she whispers.
> I shake my head sadly.
> Applejack sighs.
> "By the way, why are you telling me all this?"
"Oh that?"
> The earth pony brightens up and smiles.
"Why that's because I like you, of course!"
> She speaks without hesitation. I feel myself blushing a little.
> But before I could reply, a shrill scream fills my ears.
> And only then did we realize.
> Fluttershy is missing.
 
 
 
 
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Ponyville Apartments: Mission Adorable  PancakesSat Sep 15 12:36:45 2012No.4487470
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Quoted by: >>4487573 >>4511184
 
 
 >>4486926
"And that's how we buck apples back at Sweet Apple Acres!"
> "Interesting. Never thought that one could harvest apples that way."
> Mental note: do not get kicked by this pony.
> It will likely hurt. A whole lot.
"Well, thanks for listenin'."
> We both fall silent for a while. Then, Applejack stops.
"That... wasn't what you really wanted to ask me, was it?"
> "What makes you say that?"
"Well, I know that Twilight hasn't been perfectly honest with you and-"
> I raise my hand to interrupt.
> "Don't worry about it. You told me more than enough already."
"But-"
> "I said, don't worry about it."
> Applejack sighs and smiles back at me.
"Heh, if you say so. I'm startin' to see what Twilight meant about you."
> "Meant about what?"
"Err, never mind!"
> She quickly tries to continue the conversation.
"B-but anyway, I need to tell you that I still disagree with all of this secrecy. If all humans were even half like you, I'm sure we'd have no trouble getting along!"
> Then, her smile slowly fades away.
"But humans aren't all like that, are they?" she whispers.
> I shake my head sadly.
> Applejack sighs.
> "By the way, why are you telling me all this?"
"Oh that?"
> The earth pony brightens up and smiles.
"Why that's because I like you, of course!"
> She speaks without hesitation. I feel myself blushing a little.
> But before I could reply, a shrill scream fills my ears.
> And only then did we realize.
> Fluttershy is missing.
 
 
 
 
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PancakesSat Sep 15 12:41:04 2012No.4487573
 
 
 >>4487470
Ending here for now. The current chapter isn't in pastebin yet, but the first two chapters are there.
 
http://pastebin.com/u/ChocolateChipPancake
 
 
 
 
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Mr. BlueSat Sep 15 13:37:04 2012No.4488536
 
 
 've got some goodies ready but I'm working on more and might want to make some changes. So I'll be posting them all tomorrow,earlier in the day I guess.
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch2 Pt4: The best in the City  DakanSat Sep 15 14:33:05 2012No.4489397
 
Quoted by: >>4489413
 
 
 Welcome back PiE time for the next chapter in the Roseluck Chronicles!
 
>You and Rose exit the movie theater a few hours later
>You can tell that Rose really enjoyed the movie
>She can’t seem to keep still as she talks about every scene in great detail
“It was so sad at the end, when Rose had to let Jack go…”
>You nod, only half listening to her go on about the movie.
“Anon, did that all really happen?”
>The question catches you by surprise.
>”Huh? What was the question…”
>She sighs
“Have you been listening?”
>You shrug, “No not really, I’m sorry”
>She bumps into playfully
“You told me that the movie was about an actual event in the past.”
“I asked if it all really happened.”
>”Well, it’s based on actual events. There was a ship that was named the Titanic.”
>”That ship also went down after being struck by an iceberg.”
>”The love story between Rose and Jack is fictional though.”
>Rose looks slight disappointed by this
>”Is something wrong?”
“It was such a great love story though, it’s just a shame that it was made up.”
>You smile and pet rose’s head.
>”Somewhere, there is a great love story that is similar, and it actually happened.”
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch2 Pt4: The best in the City  DakanSat Sep 15 14:34:23 2012No.4489413
 
Quoted by: >>4489426
 
 
 >>4489397
>Suddenly you feel yourself grow hungry.
>You remember one of you favorite restaurants is near by
>”Rose, are you hungry?”
“I am a bit hungry; do you have something in mind?”
>You smile and continue on down the road
>”You have told me a lot about your friends and Equestria, but I still don’t know much about you.”
>You see Rose turn her head away from you
>What is that about…
>It’s almost as if…
“There is nothing to really tell about me.”
“I have already told you about my shop and my garden back at home.”
“I have also told you about my cutie mark…”
>”You have never told me how you got it…”
“I haven’t? It’s not that great of a story…”
>”I want to hear it.”
>She turns back to you and smiles broadly
>”Ok, It all starts with my mother’s garden…”
>She tells you about her mother who also grew and sold flowers.
>How there was a particular bush in her Mother’s garden that wouldn’t bloom
>Her mother had given up on the bush
>But Rose didn’t
>She kept taking care of the bush watering it and singing to it everyday
>One day while she was singing to it the bush began to bloom beautiful red roses.
>It was at the same time that her cutie mark appeared; the exact same rose that bloomed on that bush
>”That is a great story”
>Rose smiles and turns her head away again
“Thank you.”
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch2 Pt4: The best in the City  DakanSat Sep 15 14:35:04 2012No.4489426
 
Quoted by: >>4489446
 
 
 >>4489413
>You arrive at the restaurant.
>It’s a local pizza joint
>And by your opinion the best pizza in the city
>You hold open the door and let Rose in and follow.
>You smile at the waitress.
>”Hello Joy, table for two and a vegetarian special please.”
>Joy raises an eyebrow at you and rose.
>”Is there something wrong?”
>She shakes her head and leads you both to a table in the back of the restaurant.
“Anything you want to drink?”
>”I’ll have a Bud, please.”
“And for the pony…”
>Rose turns to you and shrugs
“What is a Bud?”
>”It’s a type of beer, an alcoholic drink.”
>She nods and looks down at the menu
“Hmm, an appletini sounds nice…”
>”Are you sure about that…”
“It has apples in the name, how bad can it be…”
>”Well it is alcoholic, I don’t know if Equestria has alcohol or not.
“We have cider, it is made of apples.”
>”Ok, one Bud and one appletini then Joy.”
>Joy shrugs and walks off to get the drinks
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch2 Pt4: The best in the City  DakanSat Sep 15 14:36:24 2012No.4489446
 
Quoted by: >>4489503
 
 
 >>4489426
>You turn back to rose.
>”Do you have pizza in Equestria?”
>She shakes her head
“No, what is it?”
>”It’s an Italian dish. It has a pie crust, tomato sauce and cheese.”
>”Chicago has the best pizza in America and this pizza parlor has the best pizza in Chicago.”
>”So it’s the best of the best here.
>Rose nods and the drink arrive a short time later.
>Rose delicately picks up the martini glass
>How do they pick up stuff like that…
>Ponies hooves must not be like normal hooves…
>Maybe they are made of marshmallows…
>She slowly sips from the glass
>”Well, how does it taste?”
>She smiles
”It’s delicious”
>She takes a bigger drink from it.
>”You may want to slow down; you wouldn’t want to get drunk…”
>She nods again and puts down the glass.
“You haven’t told me a lot about yourself either you know…”
>You chuckle
>”You’re right, what do you want to know?”
“Well, I already know humans don’t have cutie marks. How do you all know what you’re good at?
“More so, what do you do? You tell me about your work and everything, but I want to know more.”
>”Well, we kind of learn through school and life what we are good at.”
>”Humans don’t have a specific skill. We are more versatile. We can be good at a wide range of things.”
>”With me, my current job is something to get me by until I get done with college. Then I hope to start my own business.”
“What kind of business do you want to start?”
>You lean back in your chair.
>”I don’t know, I guess I always told myself I would figure that out when I get my degree.”
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch2 Pt4:The best in the City  DakanSat Sep 15 14:39:04 2012No.4489503
 
Quoted by: >>4489519
 
 
 >>4489446
>The pizza arrives at your table; rose finishes her appletini and orders another.
>It’s a deep dish vegetarian pizza, topped with all sorts of fruits and vegetables.
>Personally you don’t mind vegetarian, but you would rather have a nice sausage and peperoni pizza.
>You help yourself to a slice and help serve rose a slice.
“It looks great!”
>”It tastes even better”
>You both dig in
>Always the best pizza in Chicago
>As you eat you can’t help but notice that Rose finishes her second martini and orders a third.
>”You really need to slow down Rose, it will make you sick if you drink that fast.”
“It’s no problem really”
>You can hear a slight slur creeping into her voice.
>As you both finish the pizza, she finishes her third and begins to order her second.
>”You have had enough, you don’t need anymore.”
“Awww, but Anon I’m fine perfectly fine.”
>Her speech is heavily slurred.
>”Right… it’s time to get home, check please Joy.”
>After paying your bill you start your walk back to the apartment.
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch2 Pt4:The best in the City  DakanSat Sep 15 14:40:23 2012No.4489519
 
Quoted by: >>4489585
 
 
 >>4489503
>A walk for you, more so a drunken stumble for Rose.
“Anon, the lights in the city are so pretty…”
>”Yes they are Rose; they are beautiful.”
>Rose leans against you as you continue to walk
“I think you were right Anon; I have had one too many…”
>You arrive at the apartment and help Rose up the stairs
>You help her over to the couch and sit down on it.
>She moves and lays her head down on your lap
>The smell of roses fills your nostrils…
“Pet my mane, Anon, it feels nice when you do that…”
>You slowly start to run your hands through her silky mane.
>You feel Rose relax in your lap and slowly drift off to sleep.
>You sit there petting her for a while; feeling yourself grow more and more tired.
>It wouldn’t hurt anything to fall asleep here.
>You wouldn’t want to disturb Roses peaceful sleep
>You lean back into the couch and close your eyes.
>It’s just like falling asleep with a cat or a dog in your lap.
>She’s just a pony after all
>She’s just a friend after all
>You slowly drift off, the smell of roses help fill your head with flowers.
 
 
 
 
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DakanSat Sep 15 14:45:24 2012No.4489585
 
Quoted by: >>4493211
 
 
 >>4489519
That is the end Pt 4! Part 5 later today.
Pastebin updated with the pastest part. You can find it and all previous entries here.
http://pastebin.com/u/Fourdak
 
I liked this part and didn't. I felt the first conversation came off as a bit awkward. I don't know why. By the end I was really enjoying writing this part.
 
Constructive Criticism always appreciated.
 
 
 
 
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DakanSat Sep 15 18:47:03 2012No.4492031
 
 
 Update, working on pt5 right now. soon it shall be completed
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch2 Pt5:The Morning Revelation  DakanSat Sep 15 21:07:05 2012No.4492954
 
Quoted by: >>4492961
 
 
 And I'm back. Here is Part 5!
 
>Your eyes flutter open with the morning light
>The nostrils are still filled with the smell of roses
>You look down and see Rose still fast asleep on your lap
>You slowly move her head off of your lap to try and get up
>As you do you feel her stir in your hands
>You stop quickly to see if she has awoken
>She is still asleep
>Get up and begin the day
>A quick shower, a change of clothes, and you are ready to begin breakfast
>You start scramble some eggs, toast some bread, and quarter an apple
>You also make a few cups of coffee, you sense somep0ny will need it.
>As you finish up you hear a groan come from the living room
>”Good Morning Rose, how do you feel?”
>Another groan comes from the living room
>”I told you to slow down on the appletinis last night”
>Another groan and something about equestrian cider never doing this
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch2 Pt5:The Morning Revelation  DakanSat Sep 15 21:08:25 2012No.4492961
 
Quoted by: >>4492970
 
 
 >>4492954
>You chuckle and pick up a plate of food and coffee, and deliver it to Rose
>She looks between you and the food with half closed eyes
”Why does it hurt…?”
>”It’s called a hangover, it happens when you drink a lot of alcohol to a point where it dehydrates you.”
>”Usually it comes with a headache, nausea…”
>She covers her ears with her hooves
 “Too loud… too loud…”
>You drop you voice down to barley above a whisper
>”Sensitivity to light and sound.”
>”The best way to take care of this is with a good breakfast and a strong coffee.”
>She eyes the coffee again and grabs her stomach and groans
>You chuckle again
>”No rush to eat it, but it will help in the long run.”
>”I’ll be right back; I’m going to grab the paper from down stairs.”
>She nods and continues to groan and hold her stomach
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch2 Pt5:The Morning Revelation  DakanSat Sep 15 21:09:05 2012No.4492970
 
Quoted by: >>4492974
 
 
 >>4492961
>You walk out of the apartment and down the stair and pick up a morning paper
>You flip it open and start to read it as you ascend the stairs
>Adorning the front page is news about ponies from around the world
>It is nice to see such uplifting news there instead of the usual fare
>A piece of news catches your eye
>A word from Mayor Mare
>She first addresses the concerns about the missing princesses
>She then goes on to state about the possibility of going home
>As the paper quotes ‘With no princesses in sight and out unicorns unable to determine source of what brought us here, I am urging the ponies to beginning to settle in for a longer stay on Earth.’
>’This includes a more permanent living and work.’
>You fold the paper up and soak in the news
>Permanent
>They must know something they aren’t telling us, it’s only been a week and they are calling for ponies to settle down…
>This isn’t the first time that the ones in power have hidden something for the public’s own good.
>If you had to guess, maybe they did discover something…
>Maybe something connecting the missing princesses to the event…
>Maybe the discovery that there is no way back to Equestria…
>The thoughts spin in your mind you barely notice you are standing in front of your door
>You have yet to even think about how to tell Rose
>Easy enough, just tell her the truth
>She has handled this fairly well
>You just need to discuss with her getting a job.
>And then when she is better off, you can discuss a more permanent living arrangement
>You flash back to Rose crying on your shoulder
>Asking you what would happen if they were stuck here
>How you assured her you would cross that bridge when it came to it.
>Well here is that bridge.
>Now it is time to cross it
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch2 Pt5:The Morning Revelation  DakanSat Sep 15 21:10:24 2012No.4492974
 
Quoted by: >>4492979
 
 
 >>4492970
>You take a deep breath and enter into the apartment
>Rose is still lying on the couch, but it looks like she tried to eat some of the food on the plate
>She seems to perk up when you enter though
>”Looks like you have at least eaten something.”
>She smiles and looks at the food again
“Yes, I still feel a bit queasy, but the food tasted great.”
“I think the coffee is helping.”
>You notice that the cup of coffee is now empty
>”I’ll get you another cup”
>You quickly pick up the empty cup and refill it.
>You hand it back to Rose and sit down next to here on the couch
>She takes a sip and looks at the paper in your hand
“Anything new?”
>You look down at the paper
>”Yes, there is actually something that we need to discuss”
>She looks at you worried
“Is there something wrong?”
>”Nothing is wrong, there is just something we need to discuss”
>She looks at you patiently
>You take a deep breath and explain to her what you read in the paper
>She quietly listens to you as you tell her about what the paper said
>And then about what you think might be going on behind the scenes
>Her expression is unchanged
>When you finished, she only nods
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch2 Pt5:The Morning Revelation  DakanSat Sep 15 21:11:04 2012No.4492979
 
Quoted by: >>4492985
 
 
 >>4492974
>”Rose, I’m going to help you find a job. And then, we shall find somewhere for you to stay on a longer basis.”
>At this she turns away from you.
“I’m going to take a shower.”
>She gets up and goes into the bathroom; leaving you puzzled on the couch
>You hear the water start and wait for the singing to begin
>No song reaches your ears
>Only the sounds of heart break
>Over the sound of falling water comes the quiet sound of tears
>Maybe she couldn’t handle it
>No, she was perfectly fine about taking the news.
>There was something else
>You go over what you said in your mind one more time.
>You will help her find a job and a place of living
>How can that be bad?
>Your puzzlement continues echoed only by the hollow sound of falling tears
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch2 Pt5:The Morning Revelation  DakanSat Sep 15 21:12:24 2012No.4492985
 
Quoted by: >>4492989
 
 
 >>4492979
>You pick up the newspaper again and flip to the want ads
>Let’s see, all the normal job offerings…
>New paperboy needed, dog walker, a cook for a local diner, florist needed…
>Wait go back
>Florist…
>Rose is great with flowers!
>You quickly rip the add out of the paper and place it off to the side
>You slowly hear the crying subside and the sound of water falling quickly stops
>Rose walks out of the bathroom and sits down next to you.
>”Good news, I found a job you would be perfect at.”
>”It’s a job at a local floral shop; it’s not far from the apartment either.”
>She stares blankly at you.
“That nice.”
>The coldness in her voice cuts through you like a hot knife through butter
>Ok, now you know it is something you said.
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch2 Pt5:The Morning Revelation  DakanSat Sep 15 21:13:04 2012No.4492989
 
Quoted by: >>4493011
 
 
 >>4492985
>Before you can even ask about what might be wrong she is already on the move
>She grabs the piece of paper from you hand with her mouth and trots over to the coat rack
>She start to put on her jacket but she has trouble getting it on
>You move over to her to give her a hand with zipping it up
>She moves away from you as you approach
“Don’t worry about me; I can handle it.”
>Wow, sadness and anger
>You really fucked up.
>You try to stop her from leaving
>But she rushes from out of the door
>You hope in your head that she will return
>Why wouldn’t she, this is where she is staying after all…
>Ding, Ding, Ding…
>Yeah, you’re an idiot.
>She has to return
>And when she does you’ll explain everything.
>Why are you so worried though…?
>She is just an animal
>She is just a pony
>She is just a friend
>She is just…
 
 
 
 
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DakanSat Sep 15 21:17:03 2012No.4493011
 
Quoted by: >>4493211 >>4493258 >>4494550 >>4495981
 
 
 >>4492989
End of Part 5
End of Chapter 2
 
ok, so wow. That was probably some of the best writing I think I have done. I am really eager to get to chapter 3. Which will be up tommorow morning.
 
Next time on the Roseluck Chronicles
>rape
Deception!
Inception
and War...
Wait a minute that can't be right...
 
Here we go!
Next Time!
It's Halloween!
Feelings revealed!
And the Future begins to unfold...
 
<Insert signature here>
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSat Sep 15 21:52:23 2012No.4493211
 
Quoted by: >>4493225
 
 
 >>4489585
>>4493011
 
Fantastic work so far, and I would agree it is some of your finest work to date.
 
I was a little worried after the premature romantic feelings that you might shy away from romance altogether but its nice to see it slowly working its way back in and feeling very natural.
 
 
 
 
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DakanSat Sep 15 21:57:23 2012No.4493225
 
Quoted by: >>4493656
 
 
 >>4493211
You never had to worry about me shying away all together...
 
I just realized that I showed my hand to quickly. I think the correction is going well so far. I feared that I had permenatly fucked my story though. I'm glad to see that it is still enjoyable
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSat Sep 15 22:02:43 2012No.4493258
 
 
 >>4493011
 
You are amazing.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSat Sep 15 23:02:43 2012No.4493656
 
 
 >>4493225
I for one didn't mind the cards being flashed that quickly. I can see somebody in such a surreal situation having an equally strange emotional reaction, but oh well. I certainly wouldn't say it could permanently fuck a story though just create an awkward part.
 
 
 
 
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A Simple Wish  DakanSat Sep 15 23:33:05 2012No.4493907
 
 
 Hey all can't sleep. Im not going to work on chapter 3 until tommorow, but since I can't sleep Im going to write something. The story that follow is something I was thinking about writing in the future. But i guess you can call this a teaser for now. I call the following A Simple Wish.
 
>Night had fallen accross the land of Equestria
>Lyra once again stares off into the night sky
>Her thoughts of far away land and different creatures
>Her thoughts are of humans
 
>Worlds away underneath a simular sky
>Mathew stares into the blackness of space
>His thoughts are along the same lines of Lyras
>Visions of ponies and friendship dances through this Brony's head
 
>This is a dangerous night to stare into the sky
 
>Lyra continues to stare far into the distance
>She wishes humans were real
>She wishes to live with them and experience their world
>She knows they are real, out there somewhere.
>She just wishes to be with them, instead of here.
 
>Back on Earth, mathews thoughts mirror Lyras
>He wishes for a pony friend
>He wishes for magic and friendship
>He too knows that ponies are real, somewhere out there.
 
>This night is a dangerous night for such wishes
 
>In the sky of both worlds a shooting star appears
>two indviduals cloes their eyes and make a wish
>it is a simple wish
>"I wish I could live in the world of humans"
>"I wish I could have a pony friend"
 
>It is very dangerous to make such simples wishes
>Becareful what you wish for
>Because sometimes
>Wishes come true...
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSun Sep 16 01:34:42 2012No.4494550
 
 
 >>4493011
Man Roseluck is favorite background pony since the moment i saw her, keep the good jo
 
 
 
 
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SPart !HPI3kcpRZYSun Sep 16 04:04:56 2012No.4495981
 
 
 >>4493011
great work ! and nice story twist ! i like it!
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSun Sep 16 04:47:36 2012No.4496532
 
 
 Bump
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSun Sep 16 05:08:56 2012No.4496885
 
 
 anti spam bump
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSun Sep 16 05:21:36 2012No.4497137
 
 
 gonna bump it
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSun Sep 16 05:26:57 2012No.4497254
 
Quoted by: >>4497792
 
 
 We've survived the great page deletion exodus.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSun Sep 16 05:39:37 2012No.4497509
 
 
 This is ridiculous, bump.
 
 
 
 
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SPart !HPI3kcpRZYSun Sep 16 05:52:16 2012No.4497792
 
 
 >>4497254
bump to be sure
 
 
 
 
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Pillow Case - She Likes Cloth  Mr. blueSun Sep 16 06:06:56 2012No.4498129
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Quoted by: >>4498137
 
 
 Time for PiE! Got a little bit written and then a prize at the end. Here we go!
-------------------------
 
“Don’t act so disappointed Pillow, I was only messing with you. I didn’t think you’d actually ‘like’ looking at socks. I didn’t know you were like ‘that’.”
> “I’m not! I am not Strawberry! ...They’re just so—”
“Yeah, we know Pillow.” Emily giggles. “The cutie marks says it all.”
> “It’s not like I’d wear those things in public anyway. I just like human made fabrics.”
>I’m no ‘tail lifter’.
>Unlike some ponies in my family.
>Stupid cousin Cross Stitch. Slut.
>What did he even see in her anyway...
>Beside, socks wouldn’t look nearly so ‘provocative’ with something like that dress Strawberry’s wearing.
>They’re only slutty if that’s all you’re wearing. That’s what Stitch always said at least.
>Gah! No, no more thinking about her. She makes me so angry!
>I could just... I don’t know what, but it wouldn’t be very nice.
 
 
 
 
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Pillow Case - She Likes Cloth  Mr. blueSun Sep 16 06:07:36 2012No.4498137
 
Quoted by: >>4498146
 
 
 >>4498129
>We were done shopping and moved to checkout.
>Strawberry said not to worry about paying her back when I got my bits exchanged for American money. That was real nice of her.
>Ugh! That checkout line!
>It looked so short with only humans waiting in it, but you can fit so many humans in one space.
>That many ponies inf lines would have already stretched across the store
>It took forever!
>Then we had to go outside to the parking lot again.
>They kept telling me not to be afraid because the cars had to stop at the crosswalk in front of the doors no matter what.
>But those things are scary when they’re moving!
>They just growl like some kind of monster and they could trample a pony easily, even at their slower speeds.
>Riding in them isn’t so bad though. They can move super fast but aren’t stuck on a track or anything.
>I liked Emily’s car though. It’s a lot smaller than any others I’ve seen, and it’s such a pretty light blue color.
 
 
 
 
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Pillow Case - She Likes Cloth  Mr. blueSun Sep 16 06:07:37 2012No.4498146
 
Quoted by: >>4498168
 
 
 >>4498137
>Strawberry was telling me on the ride over about all the complicated rules they made so the cars can move so fast without crashing.
>They’ll stay in nice neat lanes, flash some lights to move to other lanes or turn, there were signs everywhere saying so many things that you had to obey, and there were the red lights that turned on when you have to wait your turn so others could drive in front of you.
>There was so much, I don’t think I could ever learn enough to drive myself.
>Strawberry said very few ponies drive anyway, especially in the city, and especially pegasi.
>The three of us are getting in the car again. Berry opened the door for me because I couldn’t figure it out.
>How was I supposed to know that you needed to lift that tiny metal handle with your hoof? I guess it makes more sense for human hands.
>The same goes for the seatbelts. They are so uncomfortable, but Emily said she’d have to pay a fine if anyone in her car didn’t have one.
>How would they even know that anyway?
 
 
 
 
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Pillow Case - She Likes Cloth  Mr. blueSun Sep 16 06:08:56 2012No.4498168
 
Quoted by: >>4498177
 
 
 >>4498146
>As soon as I get in I dig through the bags for my new sweater and hoodie.
>I had to take them off until we bought them and it’s a little chilly outside, but I don’t need an excuse.
>I tear their tags off with my teeth and slip them on.
>Much better. I almost feel safer with them on somehow.
>I don’t know.
>It’s probably a psychological thing.
>Like that blanket that I carried everywhere when I was a little filly.
>Whatever happened to Blankey? I bet mom threw her away.
>She always complained about me dragging the thing across the ground.
>I lean back in the seat and hug my forelegs again.
>So soft.
> “So where are we going now?”
 
 
 
 
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Pillow Case - She Likes Cloth  Mr. blueSun Sep 16 06:08:36 2012No.4498177
 
Quoted by: >>4498186
 
 
 >>4498168
“Well Emily has plans later so she can’t drive us around all day. So I was planning on keeping things simple for today if that’s fine. I was thinking we’d go out to eat and then head back to my place.”
> Berry looks back at me for confirmation and I just nod. I was already feeling overwhelmed just watching everything fly by the window of the car.
>I’d also forgotten about my lunch back at the station. I just left it there when I saw Strawberry.
“So what were you thinking then?” Emily asks.
“How about that vegan place Becki’s been talking about?”
“Yeah, she took me there. It’s alright I guess. Their only selling point is ‘being vegan’ though. They’re really sort of bland.”
“I guess I should have assumed that with Becki. I was just worried about Casey.”
>She looks back at me.
“I’m used to it but I’m not sure how you are around the smell of meat. I’ve known some ponies to be a little touchy about it, and this is your first day here.”
> “Oh. Umm. I guess I’ll be fine.” Just as long as I don’t have to eat any.
 
 
 
 
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Pillow Case - She Likes Cloth  Mr. blueSun Sep 16 06:09:36 2012No.4498186
 
Quoted by: >>4498194
 
 
 >>4498177
>I don’t know if I’m just being a pushover or if I’m actually ok with it.
>Hey! I already decided I wouldn’t judge anypo-anyone. If humans have an... interesting diet then that's fine! They don’t eat hay right? I bet they’d feel just as weird being in an Equestrian restaurant.
>Except hay isn’t part of an animal...
>No. I can handle it. I’ve got my new security sweater to keep me safe right? I had Blankey to hide from the monster humans under my bed as a filly.
>This is just like that except they’re not really monsters anymore.
>Because that was racist Granny.
>Shame on you. You shouldn’t tell those horrible stories to impressionable little pagasus fillies who are afraid of the dark.
“So how does Chinese sound?” Strawberry asks, looking back and forth between the two of us.
> Emily just shrugs.
> I have no idea what that is. It might be good if Berry likes it. I’m in the mood for something else though.
 
 
 
 
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Pillow Case - She Likes Cloth  Mr. blueSun Sep 16 06:09:17 2012No.4498194
 
Quoted by: >>4498199
 
 
 >>4498186
> “Um, would it be fine if we got some pizza?”
>I read a thing about Chicago when I was trying to decide on coming here. It said something about pizza I think. No wait, was that another city? I don’t know. They all sound the same sometimes.
“Really? Pizza?” Berry looks at my skeptically.
> What? It’s not like they can put meat on something as good as pizza right?
“Actually I’m feeling in the mood for pizza too.” Emily says.
“You sure that’s what you want Casey?” Berry asks.
> “Yeah. I like pizza.”
“Alright then. Pizza it is. You know is area better than me Em, but pick something pony friendly.”
> “There are places that aren’t friendly to ponies?”
“What? No, well yes, I mean,” Berry facehoofed and turned to look at me. “I meant with a pony friendly ‘menu’ Casey, I don’t know any pizza places that hate ponies. A lot of them love hiring pegasi for deliveries. There are people that don’t like ponies, just like how there are ponies that don’t like humans, but most of both are very friendly together. So don’t worry about it, alright?”
>”Alright Berry.”
“And some ponies and humans,” Emily said flashing Strawberry a sinister grin, “are a little more ‘friendly’ together than others.”
>I try not to giggle. I’m not sure if I should laugh at that, but it is funny.
 
 
 
 
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Pillow Case - She Likes Cloth  Mr. blueSun Sep 16 06:10:56 2012No.4498199
 
Quoted by: >>4498292
 
 
 >>4498194
>Berry’s getting all flustered now. Awww. How does she even get more red than that anyway? That’s just making me laugh harder.
“not you too Pillow.” Strawberry says sounding wounded.
> “Sorry Berry.”
“She’s right Casey, you shouldn’t laugh at ponies just because they keep their roommates up all night shouting their boyfriend’s name.”
“ALRIGHT THAT’S-that’s quite enough.” Strawberry’s voice gets really high when she’s upset.
>I giggle some more for that.
>Wait. Why was she shouting his na-OMIGOSH TOO MUCH INFORMATION EMILY!
>Sweet Celestia I need some brain bleach or something.
>Bad thoughts! Bad thoughts! >Not That There Is Anything Bad, Wrong, OrImmoral About What Two Sentient Adults Of Any Race Do Together In The Privacy Of Their Homes Of Their Own Volition.
>Or Even Showing A Small Amount Of Affection In Public As Any More ‘Traditional Couple Would.
>Nice save there Pillow Case. Nice save. Fight the racism.
>I thump my head lightly against the glass window stare out at the city speed by.
 
 
 
 
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Mr. blueSun Sep 16 06:16:56 2012No.4498292
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Quoted by: >>4500067 >>4509772
 
 
 >>4498199
And that's all I've got for now, all except this thing I drew yesterday. I feel accomplished for once. Yay me.
 
Here's the pastebin of everything so far:
http://pastebin.com/HtNbiz2s
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSun Sep 16 07:11:17 2012No.4499079
 
 
 Page 3 bump.
 
 
 
 
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Mr. BlueSun Sep 16 08:21:36 2012No.4500021
 
 
 Page 6 bump.
 
 
 
 
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SPart !HPI3kcpRZYSun Sep 16 08:23:16 2012No.4500067
 
 
 >>4498292
bookmarked, thank you Mr Blue !
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSun Sep 16 08:39:55 2012No.4500300
 
Quoted by: >>4500385 >>4501180 >>4502123
 
 
 OK guys, before I start work on my story, I want you guys to tell me what you think of my idea.
 
Basically Earth and Equestria's planet ( Equestia is just a country, all other nations gotta come with it) merge into one, including the sun and the moon. When this happens there is great chaos, riots, food supplies running low, massacre's committed by everyone, alliances and nations formed, discord has a ball etc. But surely the most peculiar thing is that some , not all, humans gain magical abilities and some, not all ponies adopt human charactertistics like standing upright and hands. Eventually things begin to stabilize and a new world starts to emerge.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSun Sep 16 08:44:57 2012No.4500385
 
Quoted by: >>4500835
 
 
 >>4500300
Anyone? Or have I arrived too late?
 
 
 
 
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Mortimer MouseSun Sep 16 09:10:17 2012No.4500835
 
Quoted by: >>4501045
 
 
 >>4500385
It sounds like a good plot. That part about ponies with hands sounds really weird, though.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSun Sep 16 09:23:16 2012No.4501045
 
Quoted by: >>4501114
 
 
 >>4500835
Weird in a bad way?
 
 
 
 
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Mortimer MouseSun Sep 16 09:28:16 2012No.4501114
 
Quoted by: >>4501175
 
 
 >>4501045
Hard to say. It sounds like you're essentially making Anthro ponies.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSun Sep 16 09:31:36 2012No.4501175
 
Quoted by: >>4501215
 
 
 >>4501114
oh god I wanna avoid that. I'll scrap hands. How about uncontrolled magic runs rampant across the lands?
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSun Sep 16 09:31:16 2012No.4501180
 
Quoted by: >>4501313 >>4501436
 
 
 >>4500300
Sounds pretty grim at the start. Although is that the background of the plot and you plan to start after things begin to stabilize? Like will it begin in the aftermath or will you go into detail on this game-changing incident? Either way could be worth a story.
 
 
 
 
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Mortimer MouseSun Sep 16 09:33:37 2012No.4501215
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Quoted by: >>4501436
 
 
 >>4501175
Now you're talking. Magic is always fun.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSun Sep 16 09:38:56 2012No.4501313
 
 
 >>4501180
Starts off in Times Square, things start appearing, things start to go belly up.
 
Then it switches to one year later. With a multi species group of bewildered survivors making their way to the emerging civilisations. Here they go into details bout what happened to the world.
 
 
 
 
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Mortimer MouseSun Sep 16 09:41:37 2012No.4501354
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Haha! Time to post!
 
I've been REALLY sick these past few days and I hope that doesn't show in my writing. Anyways, enjoy.
 
 
 
 
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The Motor City  Mortimer MouseSun Sep 16 09:41:16 2012No.4501361
 
Quoted by: >>4501373
 
 
 >The car ride home was embarrassingly uneventful.
>John kept looking like he was about to ask you something, only to withdraw when you two made eye contact.
>You've made it back to the apartment building and you're helping John with his groceries.
>Even though he insists he can take all of the bags in one trip, you take one in your mouth anyways.
>You help John store his food away, and move towards his door.
"I guess this is a good-bye, John."
>"Don't be like that. We'll see each other around."
>Yeah, on our way out in the morning...
"Okay."
>You hang your head, and twist the knob on the door.
"Before I go, is there anything you want to tell me?"
>He hesitates briefly before shaking his head.
"Okay....bye."
>"Bye, Pillow."
>You exit John's apartment and enter your own with a jump onto your couch.
>You let out a disappointed sigh while hugging one of your couch pillows.
"I miss him already..."
 
 
 
 
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The Motor City  Mortimer MouseSun Sep 16 09:42:56 2012No.4501373
 
Quoted by: >>4501384
 
 
 >>4501361
>You don't have a lot of friends.
>Well, you did, but they all found jobs with their special talents and opted for warmer locations when they moved to Earth.
>And then when you moved to Earth, all of the humans you made friends with moved to Equestria.
>They wanted you to come back with them at first, but eventually they realized the allure of a whole new dimension.
>Maybe one day you'll go back.
>Michigan weather sucks.
>You're currently living off the benevolence of the human government, everyp0ny receives a monthly check if they've recently moved between worlds for three years on their first move.
>It's your first year.
>It was difficult working the whole money thing out, but after humans learned that Unicorn magic could power their machines and solve something called an "energy crisis", they were practically kissing Celestia's hooves.
>In exchange, you and other new ponies get lods of mone for a few years.
>You don't get much, but it's enough to live off of.
 
 
 
 
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The Motor City  Mortimer MouseSun Sep 16 09:42:38 2012No.4501384
 
Quoted by: >>4501394
 
 
 >>4501373
>A few knocks on your door gain your attention.
>You poke your head over the couch, and take a deep breath.
>You launch yourself over to it with speed that could rival a Wonderbolt's, knocking your sofa over and sending papers on your table flying in the air.
>Whipping open the door reveals John, more nervous than you've ever seen him.
>OHMYGOSHOHMYGOSHOHYMYGOSH
>"Hey, Pillow, uh, how's it going?"
"GREAT JOHN HOW ARE YOU!?"
>Smooth.
>He seems a bit taken back by your eagerness, but continues on anyways.
>"You know, I was thinking, you're new to Earth, right?"
"Yeah!"
>"So I figured I could show you around the city sometime."
"Like...on a date?"
>"Well, it doesn't have to be-"
"IT'S A DATE!"
>Did you just say that out loud?
>John stares at you while blood rushes to your cheeks.
"I dunno. I'm a pretty busy mare so-"
>"Oh, alright. Well I'll see you around." He begins to turn back to his apartment.
"NOWAIT"
>You wrap your hooves around his arm and pull him back to your door.
 
 
 
 
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The Motor City  Mortimer MouseSun Sep 16 09:43:38 2012No.4501394
 
Quoted by: >>4501402
 
 
 >>4501384
"I would love to."
>"You sure?"
"Yes! Of course! When?!"
>"This weekend, Saturday."
"Great! We'll have tons of fun!"
>"I sure hope we do. I'll see you then. If you need anything, just knock on my door."
"Okay!"
>"Don't worry about money, I'll pay for everything. See you tomorrow!" He opens his door and waves good-bye through that last part.
"You too!"
>You too. Really?
>You shut your door and facehoof.
 
 
 
 
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The Motor City  Mortimer MouseSun Sep 16 09:43:16 2012No.4501402
 
Quoted by: >>4501424
 
 
 >>4501394
>Saturday greets you with a rude awakening, sunlight burns through your eyelids before being hidden by the clouds in the sky.
>But you're not going to let that get you down, you're spending the day with John!
>As you try to rise out of bed, your sheets wrap around your back leg and trip you to the floor.
>Sweet Celestia that hurt.
>You flutter back to your hooves and rub your aching face on your way to the bathroom.
>A glance at the mirror and an exhale into your hoof reveals your mane is a mess and your morning breath is so bad the entire city can probably smell it.
>You brush your teeth and hop in the shower.
 
 
 
 
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The Motor City  Mortimer MouseSun Sep 16 09:44:36 2012No.4501424
 
Quoted by: >>4501444
 
 
 >>4501402
>With your morning routine done, you exit the bathroom with a wet mane
>If only John could see you now, he'd probably buck you right there.
>You know you would.
>You sit down on your couch and flick through the channels on your television, only listening to the program briefly before switching to the next channel.
>"The other girls must be crazy if they think they're gonna beat me honey boo-boo chiiiiild-"
>*click*
>"Aaaaaaaand, we're back! Welcome to Cooking with Carrot Top!"
>*click*
>"Police are in the process of tracking a suspected member of an organized drug cartel. Citizens are advised to be on the look out for suspicious activity."
>Hours pass as you burn daylight by watching television and being a lazy fat ass.
>Not your most productive day so far.
>You press the remote again and turn off the television.
>T.V sucks. When is John supposed to be here?
>Maybe you should just check up on him.
 
 
 
 
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BakalightSun Sep 16 09:45:36 2012No.4501436
 
Quoted by: >>4501806
 
 
 >>4501180
>>4501215
Well I've started writing this now. It will be first fore way into writing so be as harsh as you can when critiquing it, Hoefully I'll have it up by tormorrow. I'll be posting with this trip
 
 
 
 
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The Motor City  Mortimer MouseSun Sep 16 09:45:17 2012No.4501444
 
Quoted by: >>4501451
 
 
 >>4501424
>You throw on your sweater and exit your apartment, only to knock on John's.
>No answer.
>You knock again.
>Nothing.
>Is he asleep or something?
>It's 6 in the afternoon!
>Maybe you should find a way to burn time, he'll wake up sooner or later.
>Too bad. You're starving
>"What's going on, Pillow?"
>Speak of the devil, John just came up the stairs.
 
 
 
 
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The Motor City  Mortimer MouseSun Sep 16 09:46:17 2012No.4501451
 
Quoted by: >>4501460
 
 
 >>4501444
>He looks out of breath and he's sweating profusely.
>You bite your lower lip, control yourself you stupid pony!
"Were you out jogging or something?"
>"You could say that" He says in between breaths
>"So. Whatcha' doing at my door?"
"I was just wondering when you wanted to head out. You never gave me a specific time yesterday"
>He looks around nervously, like he's searching for something.
>"Yeah, we should leave now. Let me just go inside and get my car keys."
>He opens his door, but when you try to follow him inside he blocks you.
>"Uh, sorry. You can't come in. I'll be out in a second, promise."
>What is he trying to hide?
 
 
 
 
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The Motor City  Mortimer MouseSun Sep 16 09:46:56 2012No.4501460
 
Quoted by: >>4501470
 
 
 >>4501451
>Whatever, he takes a little while than you expected but he's out in a few minutes.
>"Alright. Let's go."
>As you and John descend the stairs, you press him a little bit.
"What took you so long? It's rude to keep a mare waiting."
>"Funny."
>You exit the apartment building and slide into John's car.
>Police sirens echo off of the buildings from the distance and John accelerates before you can even buckle up.
"Whoa there, what's the rush?"
>"I just don't want to waste time. That's all."
>That sounds a little fishy to you, something's off here.
>Come to think of it, John's been acting very suspicious lately.
>You'll have to keep an eye on him today.
"So, where are we headed?"
>"I haven't decided officially, but I have more than a few places in mind."
 
 
 
 
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The Motor City  Mortimer MouseSun Sep 16 09:47:36 2012No.4501470
 
Quoted by: >>4501477
 
 
 >>4501460
>"We could head to a place called Comedy Castle. They do Stand-Up and it's usually a hit or miss but their food is fine."
>That actually sounds pretty neat.
>After that, I was thinking we could do the River-walk."
"The River-walk?"
>"The River-walk is one of the biggest attractions in downtown Detroit and is one of my favorite things about it. The walk way starts at around Cobo and goes all the way down a few miles to Rivard Park."
>You could use a walk. You feel like a vegetable after your day so far.
"Sounds great. Especially that Comedy Castle place, I've never seen human comedy."
 
 
 
 
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The Motor City  Mortimer MouseSun Sep 16 09:47:17 2012No.4501477
 
Quoted by: >>4501488
 
 
 >>4501470
>Okay. This isn't what you were expecting.
>First of all, it's only the first comedian and he's failing miserably.
>He's an Earth Pony and a mumbler. His cutie mark is a robot, but you don't need that to know comedy is NOT his special talent. His face is covered in acne, even though he appears to be an adult. The rest of the audience is getting bored and hungry because the food hasn't come out yet.
>Second, this place isn't even a castle!
>Not like you were expecting something reminiscent of Canterlot or anything.
>John seems to be enjoying himself, though.
>"Oh man, this is good."
"What are you talking about? He's stuttering and we can hardly hear him."
>"I know! Listen, there's two ways to enjoy Stand up. Either laugh because they're great at what they do, or laugh because they're failing miserably."
 
 
 
 
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The Motor City  Mortimer MouseSun Sep 16 09:48:56 2012No.4501488
 
Quoted by: >>4501510
 
 
 >>4501477
>"And, uh, uh, anyone out here ever-"
>The audience starts to boo him off stage, and he begins to shuffle his way off before bumping into one of the waitresses and spilling the tray of spaghetti she was carrying.
>Pasta flies everywhere, and the audience laughs for the first time tonight.
>You and John can barely control your laughter, that was the funniest thing you've ever seen.
>"Glad to see you two are having fun."
>Oh, it's the waiter. She snuck up on you.
>She sets down your food and John chips in.
>"Well now we are! Let's hope the next the one is just as good."
>"The next one is a regular here. I'm sure you'll love him."
>The host comes on stage carrying the microphone and addresses the audience.
>"Alright folks, I apologize for that one. I guess you could say he had too much on his plate to handle!"
>This is going to be a long night.
 
 
 
 
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The Motor City  Mortimer MouseSun Sep 16 09:49:37 2012No.4501510
 
Quoted by: >>4501524
 
 
 >>4501488
>About 7 mediocre comedians later, the last one for the night is preparing to come on.
>Most of the audience has left by now. You can't blame them. You, John, and another small group of ponies and humans on the other side of the room are the only ones left now.
>You and John have finished your food, and are discussing leaving to spend more time walking.
>You can't wait, you're definitely going to make a move on John.
>If he makes a move on you first? Oh Luna you'll be the happiest pony alive!
>This is going to be THE. BEST. NIGHT. EVER.
>The host comes on stage again and speaks up.
>"Alright people and ponies, we've had a good night so far and it's time for our final act. He signed up just about half an hour ago so technically I'm not supposed to let him perform, but he made me an offer I just couldn't refuse!"
>With that, the host makes his way off stage while counting a huge wad of cash.
 
 
 
 
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The Motor City  Mortimer MouseSun Sep 16 09:50:16 2012No.4501524
 
Quoted by: >>4501534
 
 
 >>4501510
>A hulk of a man wearing an overcoat and a hat that covers his face saunters on stage and turns out to the small audience.
>He immediately makes eye contact with you and John.
>"Hope you all are having a good time out here tonight. Because it's about to get even better!" His voice sounds as deep as the ocean, and at the same time it's as if he's speaking through a fan.
>You have a bad feeling about this...
>Even John is looking at you worriedly.
>"Especially our lovely couple here." He motions his hand towards you two.
>You try to cover your flushed face with your hoof, and the man speaks up again.
>"Oh, come on now. Don't be shy. I thought such a mysterious, and more importantly, dangerous man would attract more of a hotblooded mate."
"Wait...what?"
>"Oh. You haven't told her?"
>The man looks at John, you do as well.
>"Pillow, we need to leave."
 
 
 
 
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The Motor City  Mortimer MouseSun Sep 16 09:50:56 2012No.4501534
 
Quoted by: >>4501541
 
 
 >>4501524
"What is he talking about?"
>"Pillow, we need to leave NOW."
>The crowd on the other side of the room stands up and begins to slowly make their way over to you.
>"Don't you all just HATE liars?" The man begins.
>John grabs you and moves for the door, but it won't budge.
>He whips around to face the group as you cower behind him.
>One of the ponies in the group launches himself at John only for him to kick the pony in the jaw with a loud crack.
>A human throws a punch at John, but he grabs him by the arm, turns, twists, and slams him down on one of the tables.
>"I know I do. They're the worst kind of men. Cheating, useless scumbags. The lot of them."
 
 
 
 
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The Motor City  Mortimer MouseSun Sep 16 09:51:37 2012No.4501541
 
Quoted by: >>4501590
 
 
 >>4501534
>"Do you know what happens when a liar dies, 'John'?"
>A different human grabs John from behind while a pony bucks him in the stomach.
>One of the humans grab make a grab for you. But you fly over his head and kick the human restricting John in the head, freeing him and knocking the human unconscious.
>John turns around with a kick in your direction, but instead his leg flies over your head and connects with the face of another human behind you.
>"They lie still."
>The man on stage reaches into his coat, and removes a pistol.
>One shot in John's leg is all it takes to bring him to the ground.
>You try to scream, but a cloth covering your mouth prevents you from doing so.
>Darkness fills your vision as a sweet antiseptic-like smell whisks you to sleep.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSun Sep 16 09:51:16 2012No.4501552
 
Quoted by: >>4501590 >>4501650
 
 
 So is this going to be a new thing now? The next Anon in Equestia?
 
 
 
 
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The Motor City  Mortimer MouseSun Sep 16 09:53:36 2012No.4501590
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>>4501541
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Man colds suck. That's all for now. Pastebin is here again in case anyone wants to catch up.
http://pastebin.com/u/Mortimer_Mouse
 
>>4501552
Yes.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSun Sep 16 09:57:36 2012No.4501650
 
Quoted by: >>4501829 >>4510210
 
 
 >>4501552
I wonder how the Old Guard ( AiE writers) are gonna take to us?
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSun Sep 16 10:07:17 2012No.4501806
 
Quoted by: >>4501838
 
 
 >>4501436
>tormorrow
>Hoefully
You're off to a great start already!
Joking aside you have an interesting concept and threads like these should always be looking for new writers.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSun Sep 16 10:09:37 2012No.4501829
 
Quoted by: >>4501926
 
 
 >>4501650
Just asked them. They are indifferent to this rising phenomenon and will check us out when they have the time.
 
What where you expected some petty tribalism between threads or something?
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSun Sep 16 10:10:16 2012No.4501838
 
 
 >>4501806
Oh fuck I'm sorry. I'm a wee drunk at the moment.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSun Sep 16 10:16:56 2012No.4501926
 
 
 >>4501829
Yes.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSun Sep 16 10:30:57 2012No.4502123
 
Quoted by: >>4502130 >>4502155 >>4502299
 
 
 >>4500300
I know a fic where Equestria is magically transported to earth in the middle of the paciffic. It takes place pre-WWI though and it's more about the ponies adapting their political structure and way of life to fit with the new world. It has Teddy Roosevelt in it.
 
Look up Interesting Times on Fimfiction if you're interested.
 
Anyway, concept sounds interesting, but might I suggest a something to make it more interesting? What if the humans didn't develop magic but rather the means to use it, like all human invention, being able to unlock it through tools of a kind. Maybe it didn't exist in their world before merging with another so not that it does a few are able to learn it through the use of a sort of compound made from the same material as a unicorn's horn. This will allow some fun things to pop up, like maybe this substance from their horns is just more concentrated there. Maybe all ponies have some amount of it in their bones, the pegasi using it to 'levitate' themselves enough for their tiny wings to carry them, and earth ponies maybe becoming more durable and stronger for it.
 
So then you can have the humans use it in similar ways. A concentrated amount used to made a staff or rod with which, after very much practice and much skill, one holding it could have the same magical potential of the average unicorn but unlike unicorns not taking naturally to it. It would also allow the other races to use magic too.
 
the ponies with hands thing takes the fun away from a lot of the thing though. It's more interesting when there are more physical differences between the various races involved in this sort of meeting of worlds. It's like how there's no good humanized mlp fanfiction because once they're more human the fun is gone, unless it's some kind of tf thing and you focus on that.
 
I could go on and on, I always have too many ideas.
 
 
 
 
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Mr. BlueSun Sep 16 10:30:57 2012No.4502130
 
 
 >>4502123
Forgot my name.
 
 
 
 
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Mr. BlueSun Sep 16 10:32:56 2012No.4502155
 
Quoted by: >>4502466
 
 
 >>4502123
Oh, and one more interesting thing to note.
The word Alicorn actually means 'the stuff that unicorns horns are made from' and its use for winged unicorns was incorrectly spread by certain bits of fantasy writing in more recent times.
 
Add that in to all the stuff I was saying.
 
 
 
 
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BakalightSun Sep 16 10:41:16 2012No.4502299
 
 
 >>4502123
Thats actually a great idea. The ponies could have show some resentment and wonder to the concept. Resentment because it seems that anyone can use magic now and wonder over humanities ingenuity.
 
I was also thinking that a magical item could form a bond with its user. Kind of a DNA coded staff or rod.
 
The hands idea has been stripped from the story, dont worry.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSun Sep 16 10:51:16 2012No.4502466
 
Quoted by: >>4502767
 
 
 >>4502155
Wait... so what IS the proper term for a winged unicorn? The term "winged unicorn" sounds like it could get stale much faster than "Alicorn."
 
I know it's kind of off-topic, but I am very curious.
 
 
 
 
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BakalightSun Sep 16 10:52:16 2012No.4502471
 
 
 GTG and get some shut eye now. Thanks for the advice guys.
 
 
 
 
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Mr. BlueSun Sep 16 11:09:37 2012No.4502767
 
 
 >>4502466
Technically Pegasus is the name of a specific Winged Horse and not the name of winged horses in general.
 
and because there are differences in origin between the myths that both creatures come from there relaly is no true name for a combination of the two.
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch3:Nightmare NIght Pt1: Making Amends  DakanSun Sep 16 12:05:17 2012No.4503769
 
Quoted by: >>4503790
 
 
 What is that? Chapter 3 is ready now? Well why not!
 
>She came back
>Eventually
>It felt like an eternity to you
>But in reality it was only a few hours
>Immediately when she got back you tried to explain what you meant
>She was free to stay here with you as long as she liked
>Even if she wanted to live with you permanently
>For some reason though, you word seem to come awkwardly
>Your thoughts we half formed and rushed
>You half expected that she wouldn’t return
>As the words leave your mouth you know that she doesn’t believe what you say
>She is cold and distant as she tells you her experience at the floral shop
>How when she entered the shopkeeper had practically thrown the job at her
>How she had instantly fallen in love with the idea of a pony with the talent of a botanist working for her
>You never really understood subtext
>But you sense that she was trying to convey something more to you.
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch3 Pt1  DakanSun Sep 16 12:07:37 2012No.4503790
 
Quoted by: >>4503832 >>4503928
 
 
 >>4503769
>The next month passes by all too quickly
>Life feels like it is returning to normal
>As normal as life can be in a world full of ponies
>Although in about a month and a half since the arrival of ponies, life is pretty much the same
>It is pretty much accepted fact that the princesses may be gone forever
>It is also accepted that the ponies may be staying on earth.
>Many of the earth ponies have moved out of the Cities to the country, most starting small towns and farms
>The unicorns stay in the major cities finding comfort in the busy city life
>The pegasi had a harder time of it
>They finial had “some” control over the weather
>The were basically limited to moving clouds and causing them to rain
>The clouds still moved to the power of the winds though
>So when the pegasi tried to build a settlement in the clouds; it ended up drifting through the air on its own accord
>Pegasi became nomadic floating wherever their cloud cities would take them
>That is what the world calls normal now
>Things don’t seem to be returning to normal between you and rose though
>Between work, school and her job
>You and Rose barely talk to each other
>You work and school performance start to suffer from it
>The easy going feeling you had when rose first arrived on earth has all but disappeared
>You and rose slowly drift away from each other
>When you do talk; she often talks about moving out of the city, to the country where she can start a garden
>You know this is a constant reminder that one day she will try and leave you
>And sometimes, you wish she would leave.
>But then you remember, you promised you would help her through this
>You remember, that she is your friend
>A good friend…
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch3 Pt1  DakanSun Sep 16 12:09:16 2012No.4503832
 
Quoted by: >>4503964
 
 
 >>4503790
>These thoughts preoccupy you as you walk through the hallways of the university
>You have just finished you last class of the morning
>You have an hour or two before you need to be at work for the afternoon shift
>You shake your head trying to clear your thoughts
>Your eyes settle on a poster in front of you
>It’s a poster for the university Halloween party
>Dancing, booze, and music
>Special Guest DjP0n3
>Theme this year is Masquerade
>Hmmm…idea…
>It’s been awhile since you and Rose have been out together for some fun
>Maybe a night at a party would be good
>Maybe you can talk to her about what you said that day
>The party is this weekend, that doesn’t leave much time to get a suit together
>You hope that you can convince Rose to come…
>The rest of the day at work drags on way to long
>You leave work once again tired and frustrated
>But you remind yourself about the plan
>Convince Rose to come with you to the Halloween Party
>Shouldn’t be that difficult
>You swallow hard as you step out into the chilly evening air
>As least you hope not
>You find yourself, in the first time in a month, rushing home again
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch3 Pt1  DakanSun Sep 16 12:15:37 2012No.4503928
 
 
 >>4503790
>When you get back to the apartment Rose is not there
>It’s ok, you remind yourself, Rose said she was closing the shop today.
>You have time to throw something together for dinner.
>You quickly raid through the refrigerator and cabinets
>You come up with a salad, two apples, a half jar of sauce and spaghetti
>Why do you always have spaghetti on hand?
>Doesn’t matter…
>You set the water to boil and quickly make a small pre dinner salad with sliced apples as a side
>Ok now for the main course
>You boil the noddle and the sauce
>You make up to plates and place them on the table
>You hear the lock on the door click as you just finish up dinner
>In walks Rose and she looks exhausted
>She has gotten quite good at taking on and off her coat without your help
>She looks between you and the dinner you have prepared
“Evening Anon, are we having guests?”
>You shake your head
>”I just feel like have a nice dinner together”
>She cocks her head to the side and sighs
“Ok, let me get settled in and I will join you in a few minutes.”
>You sit down at the table and patiently wait for Rose
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch3 Pt1  DakanSun Sep 16 12:17:36 2012No.4503964
 
Quoted by: >>4503989
 
 
 >>4503832
>She appears from the bathroom a few minutes later and sits down across from you
>The immediately starts eating her salad
>Ok, so this is going to be a little tougher than you thought
>”So Rose, how was your day?”
>She looks up at you, almost surprised by the question
“It was fine, how was yours…”
>Good, you got her talking
>”It was boring as always, saw something interesting there…”
>Rose interrupts you before you can finish
“What is this about Anon?”
>You’re taken aback by the suddenness
>”What do you mean?”
>She looks at the food and back at you again
“A full dinner and talking like we used to…”
“We haven’t done this in a while, something is up.”
>You lower your head
>”I liked it when we talked and spent time together…”
>She stares at you
>”That why when I saw a poster at the University, I thought that we could try and get back to that.”
>She eyes you suspiciously
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch3 Pt1  DakanSun Sep 16 12:18:57 2012No.4503989
 
Quoted by: >>4504013 >>4509010
 
 
 >>4503964
“What poster?”
>You perk up a bit, you’ve caught her interest
>”The annual Halloween dance is this weekend. I thought maybe we could go together and have some fun.”
>She cocks her head at you again
“Aren’t Halloween and Nightmare Night the same concept?”
>You think back to everything that Rose told you about Equestria’s celebration
>”Yes, essentially everybody dresses up in costumes and goes door to door for free candy”
>She smiles slightly
“And you want to go out to a dance with me?”
>”Well yes, the theme is Masquerade; it’s dressing up in suits and dresses while wearing a mask to cover the face.”
>Her smile grows bigger
>”I know its short notice for a dress, but do you want to go?”
>She nods
“Don’t worry; I know the perfect pony to go to for a dress.”
>You smile back across the table
>”That’s great; it’ll be nice to go out as friends again.”
>You turn back to your meal
>You don’t notice her smile fade away from her face.
”Right, as friends…”
 
 
 
 
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DakanSun Sep 16 12:20:17 2012No.4504013
 
Quoted by: >>4504491
 
 
 >>4503989
End of Part 1
Looks like things are off to kind of a Rocky start
 
Part 2 later today maybe
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSun Sep 16 12:43:37 2012No.4504491
 
 
 >>4504013
oh man you and pancake are the reason why i come to here, keep it up
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSun Sep 16 17:04:16 2012No.4509010
 
 
 >>4503989
Damn this anon is the most oblivious idiot ever. I know, I know, pacing etc.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSun Sep 16 17:13:16 2012No.4509143
 
Quoted by: >>4509167
 
 
 Update on Ch3 Pt2, it's written! But storm knocked out the power. No power = no Internet (posting from my phone) so I'll post once I have power.
 
 
 
 
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DakanSun Sep 16 17:15:36 2012No.4509167
 
 
 >>4509143
Forgot my name, grr
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSun Sep 16 18:09:37 2012No.4509772
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>>4498292
Mr. Blue you're alive! Its great to see your story continued.
 
All these continuations from everybody over the past few days are fantastic.
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch3 Pt2:Before the Party  DakanSun Sep 16 18:51:17 2012No.4510138
 
Quoted by: >>4510160
 
 
 Power is back on, more Roseluck!
 
>The rest of the week flashed by at lightning pace
>After that dinner you once again didn’t have time to talk to Rose
>But you spirits have been kept high by you Saturday night date
>Date…
>No not a date
>This is an outing between friends
>Nothing more…
>It is now noon on Saturday
>Rose had taken off early morning to get ready for tonight
>Doesn’t matter if you’re from Earth or Equestia, women take forever to get ready
>You have just left to pick up your suit and find a suitable mask
>As the clerk went to the back to find you’re suit you take time to look through their masks
>There are several masks out for the holiday
>Several are made to fit humans; some are made to fit the face of a pony
>As time goes on you notice more items have been made with ponies in mind
>As mask jumps out from the rest
>A simple green mask that only covered the area around the eyes
>You pick it up and hold it up to your face in front of a mirror
“It fits you nicely”
>The clerk has returned with your suit.
>You pay the man for the suit rental and for the mask
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch3 Pt2:Before the Party  DakanSun Sep 16 18:54:17 2012No.4510160
 
Quoted by: >>4510170
 
 
 >>4510138
>You return back to the apartment
>It’s still a few hours before you need even start getting ready
>You spend your time relaxing and thinking
>It’s going to be great to go out with Rose for the night
>Something nags at the back of your mind
>Your thoughts turn to Rose
>Even though you both have drifted apart for the past month, you still count her as a good friend
>She has a beautiful singing voice
>She always smells of roses
>A mystery you still don’t understand
>And yet you don’t really wish to know why
>That time she got drunk on appletinis and fell asleep on your lap
>How beautiful she looked laying there…
>The feeling you felt when you realized she might leave you…
>There is something more…
>No, there can’t be anything more there…
>She’s an animal
>She’s a Pony!
>She’s a friend!
>You feel a conflict building inside of you
>Every time you think about rose you can’t help but smile to yourself
>But, she’s a fucking pony! An animal! It is wrong on so many levels…
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch3 Pt2:Before the Party  DakanSun Sep 16 18:55:36 2012No.4510170
 
Quoted by: >>4510178
 
 
 >>4510160
>Who says…
>This makes you pause.
>How is she exactly different?
>Besides the obvious physical difference
>She still has feelings
>She when you look in her eyes you can see intelligence there
>The conflict bothers your mind so much you barely notice the passage of time
>Swearing to yourself, you rush to the bathroom to wash up before Rose gets back
>After a good shower you go and change quickly into your suit
>You just about finished changing when you hear the door open to the apartment
“Anon, are you in here?”
>”Yes, I’m just about finished getting dressed”
>You grab your mask and exit the bedroom
>As you lay your eyes on Rose you mouth drops open
>She is wearing an elegant light rose colored dress
>the bottom edge is adorned with roses
>It looks like her shoes are roses also; the stems wrap themselves up her legs
>Her mas covers the upper half of her face and is decorated with miniature roses
>She is beautiful
>She smiles and giggles at you
“I hope that mean that you like it.”
>You hardly can form words, and only manage a small nod
>She giggles again
“Rarity said that the dress may have that effect on you. I didn’t believe her until now.”
“Are you ready to go then Anon?”
>You finally find your voice.
>”Yes, I’m ready to go. You look beautiful Rose”
>She turns her head away from you again
>You come along side and place a hand on the back of her mane.
>”Let’s go we have a full night ahead of us”
>You lead her out the door and down to the streets
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch3 Pt2:Before the Party  DakanSun Sep 16 18:56:58 2012No.4510178
 
Quoted by: >>4510190
 
 
 >>4510170
>The university would usually be a simple short walk from you apartment
>But considering the occasion and the type of dress you hail a taxi instead
>As you get into the taxi you notice that Rose has taken the seat very close to you
>The smell of roses fills the cab
>To you the smell has almost become intoxicating
>These feelings for her are real, you tell yourself
>You reach up and start to run your fingers thorough her silky mane
>As you touch her mane though she pulls away slightly
>What was that about…
>Might as well try and break the silence
>”So Rose, have you ever heard of Dj P0n3?”
>She turn hear head towards you and smiles
“Yes, that’s Vinyl Scratches stage name. She is a pony from Ponyville.”
>You nod
>Then you notice something peculiar
>Her hoof is resting on your thigh
>When did that happen?
>You guess it wouldn’t hurt
>You reach down and wrap your hand around her hoof
>You were expecting something hard; you were met with something soft.
>When you do this Rose sighs and you can see she relaxes a bit…
>The rest of the taxi ride is relatively uneventful
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch3 Pt2:Before the Party  DakanSun Sep 16 18:57:18 2012No.4510190
 
Quoted by: >>4510208
 
 
 >>4510178
>You shortly arrive at the University and make your way to the Hall
>As you enter the Hall is decked out in all sorts of Halloween decor
>Several tables line the hall with the middle open as a dance floor
>At the back you can see a white pony behind a turntable
>You escort Rose over to one of the tables
>”Do you want something to drink?”
>She simply nods
>As you make your way over to the refreshments table you notice that you aren’t the only “mixed” couple
>You can see that other humans have their arms wrapped around ponies
>Although they are the minority by far
>And all of these couples are getting the strangest looks from those around them
>You reach the refreshment table and grab yourself a beer
>As you look over the difference punches they have to offer, you realize one thing
>Every single one of them has already be spiked
>You sigh slightly and grab a ladle full of the least foul smelling of the brews
>You return to the table and hand Rose her glass
>You lean in close as you do
>”Please be careful, the punch is already spiked”
>She giggles and nods
>She takes a sip of the punch and coughs a bit
>”Is something wrong?”
“The punch is a bit strong”
>You chuckle a bit
>This is most certainly going to be an interesting night…
 
 
 
 
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DakanSun Sep 16 18:59:37 2012No.4510208
 
Quoted by: >>4510714
 
 
 >>4510190
End of Part 2
 
It goes deeper and deeper...
I really want to update next sometime during the week. But, I may not be able to until friday...
 
 
 
 
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HateBit !!8FC5lRlbeuJSun Sep 16 18:59:37 2012No.4510210
 
 
 >>4501650
Hurry up and write some goddamn stories so we can read 'em already. The AiE writers are working on AiE at the moment, myself included, so it's up to you jerks to pump this shit out until all our current stories are stale and suck and we move here.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousSun Sep 16 20:00:56 2012No.4510714
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>>4510208
Thanks for the heads up. we'll be patiently waiting for moar.
 
 
 
 
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Ponyville Apartments: Mission Adorable  PancakesSun Sep 16 21:26:57 2012No.4511184
 
Quoted by: >>4511198 >>4519583
 
 
 >>4487470
> I take a moment to catch my breath.
> Damn, this pony can run fast!
> "Finally... caught up..."
"What in tarnation is going on around 'ere!?" cries Applejack.
> I look in the direction of her hoof.
> Animals are running loose everywhere.
> Some children from the orphanage are riding them.
> While the other orphans cheerfully lead the smaller animals around.
> The zoo keepers try desperately to keep the animals under control.
> The adult visitors scream and panic. A few have fainted in shock.
> My brain quickly puts two and two together.
> I turn to the orange pony.
> "Where's Fluttershy?" I ask carefully.
"Fluttershy? I thought that you were watching her."
> Then, her eyes widen.
"T-this is bad! Really bad! We need to find her! And fast!"
> "But you said that she's really good with animals."
"That's exactly why! We need to stop her before-"
> Another shrill scream. We both turn around.
> A young girl, no more than 4 or 5 years old, is riding on the back of a full-grown grizzly bear.
> She seems to think that bear cavalry is a great idea.
> The grizzly roars at the nearby zoo keepers.
> They quickly back away. The little girl just laughs, thinking that this is a game.
> I turn to Applejack, who quickly pulls something out of her saddlebag.
"I'll handle this one, sugarcube!"
 
 
 
 
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Ponyville Apartments: Mission Adorable  PancakesSun Sep 16 21:28:57 2012No.4511198
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 >>4511184
> "Er, Applejack? You aren't seriously considering-"
"Hold on to this for a while!"
> The orange pony pushes her saddlebag into my arms.
> I collapse painfully under its weight.
"Careful now! That might be a bit heavy."
> A bit heavy? This weighs heavier than a sack of grain!
> She was carrying this around the whole time!?
"Just stay here and wait for my signal."
> "Your signal? Wait! What are you-"
> Applejack dashes off before I can stop her.
> She runs straight at the grizzly bear.
> The pony holds something in its mouth. A rope!?
"Time to hogtie this little doggie!"
> With incredible accuracy, she twirls the lasso and throws it around one of the grizzly's paws.
> Then, she pulls on the rope at an angle with her mouth.
> Before it can react, the grizzly topples over and lands face first.
"And now for some lil' pon-er, human toss!"
> Applejack quickly hops up on the bear's back while it is confused.
> She grabs the cuff of the little girl's shirt with her mouth.
> And tosses her all the way over... to me!?
"You're on!" cries Applejack. "Catch her!"
> I drop the saddlebag full of seeds and raise my arms.
> And by some miracle, I manage to catch the little girl safely.
"Yeah!" cries the child. "That was fun! Let's do it again!"
> "Oh, wow," I mutter.
> After putting the girl down, a bloodcurdling roar fills the area.
> I turn around to see that the grizzly bear has recovered.
> And it does not look particularly pleased at Applejack.
 
 
 
 
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Ponyville Apartments: Mission Adorable  PancakesSun Sep 16 23:14:57 2012No.4511845
 
Quoted by: >>4511894 >>4519583
 
 
 >>4511198
"Now get back in there before I get REALLY mad, y'hear!?"
> Bruised and badly beaten, the grizzly obediently returns to its pen.
> The zoo keepers lock the enclosure behind it.
> And after one last whimper, the bear retreats inside its den.
> Applejack sighs in relief.
"That took a little longer than I thought. Sorry about that."
> "Are you alright?"
"Just a bit tired. But what's up with them?"
> She points at the adults watching the scene.
> They look more than a bit shocked.
> "Well, here in the city," I explain. "Humans generally don't expect to see someone wrestle a full-grown grizzly bear into submission."
"Oh," she says, "S-sorry 'bout that. Kinda forgot about where we were, back there."
> Applejack looks crestfallen as she picks up her saddlebag.
> I can feel a number of eyes watching us closely.
> "We should find Fluttershy before things get any worse."
"I suppose you're right. Well, then-"
> One of the zoo keepers suddenly comes up to us.
"W-wait! Are you leaving already!?" he cries out.
> Applejack and I stop walking.
"We could really use your help," says the zoo keeper. "There are a number of dangerous animals still running about, and our staff are spread thinly enough as it is."
"But, I-"
"Please, Miss?"
> Applejack turns to me. Her eyes tell me that she wants to help.
> I look around for a moment. Then, I pause to think.
> Wild animals running about. Stray orphans that need to be found.
> I sigh and give her a nod.
> "Go ahead. I'll look for Fluttershy."
 
 
 
 
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Ponyville Apartments: Mission Adorable  PancakesSun Sep 16 23:23:36 2012No.4511894
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Quoted by: >>4519583 >>4529613 >>4529630
 
 
 >>4511845
> After half an hour of searching, I pause to rest.
> My legs ache and still no trace of Fluttershy.
> If she left the zoo, then she could be anywhere in the city by now.
> But that isn't like her. She loves this place.
*sob*
> She must still be here.
*sniff*
> I close my eyes and try to think.
*sob*
> Where could she be?
*sniff*
> And what was that crying noise?
*sob*
> Crying noise? I quickly turn around.
> I notice a familiar pink mane hidden among the bushes.
> The sobbing continues as I carefully walk closer.
> "Fluttershy?" I ask slowly.
> The noises suddenly stop.
"N-nop0ny here," whispers someone from the bushes.
> I approach closer. Sure enough, it's the yellow pegasus pony.
> "Fluttershy? Are you alright?"
"Ah! D-don't come any closer!"
> I freeze in my tracks. Fluttershy just spread her wings.
> Gotta calm her down before she flies off in panic.
> Last thing we need right now is for someone to see her flying.
> The ponies' illusion spell might work perfectly, but we'll have a hell of a time explaining a flying human girl.
> "It's just me," I whisper. "I've come to find you."
"A-are you here to take me away? I wasn't human-napping! I-I just-"
> Fluttershy's eyes are filled with fear and panic.
> She retreats from me and takes a step back.
> Her wings start to flap. Her hooves rise from the ground.
> There is no more time.
> My body moves on its own.
> And grabs her in a tight embrace.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousMon Sep 17 02:49:00 2012No.4513841
 
 
 bumping this thread. Soon I shall start my own story here.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousMon Sep 17 04:28:57 2012No.4514976
 
 
 Bumpity. Anyone else here?
 
 
 
 
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BakalightMon Sep 17 04:44:57 2012No.4515175
 
 
 Hey to anyone who gives two shits, I'm having some trouble writing this fucker. Going through some rewrites and shit at the moment. So nothing from me tonight but I will post my story this week.
 
Christ writing is fun but hard. Especially when your doing it for the first time.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousMon Sep 17 05:37:16 2012No.4515865
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Quoted by: >>4516975
 
 
 MORE PONIES
MORE PONY POV STORIES
PONYPONYPONYPONY
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousMon Sep 17 06:41:37 2012No.4516975
 
Quoted by: >>4517843
 
 
 >>4515865
Christ almighty where did everyone go?
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousMon Sep 17 07:37:17 2012No.4517843
 
 
 >>4516975
It'll pick up soon. People just aren't online.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousMon Sep 17 08:34:56 2012No.4518867
 
 
 I'll have a story ready for you guys tomorrow but in my meantime keep this thread alive or have a new one readily available.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousMon Sep 17 09:04:58 2012No.4519302
 
 
 good update
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousMon Sep 17 09:27:16 2012No.4519583
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>>4511894
>>4511845
>>4511198
>>4511184
pic related
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousMon Sep 17 13:49:36 2012No.4524949
 
 
 bumpin
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousMon Sep 17 18:03:16 2012No.4528399
 
 
 4-hour bump.
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch3 Pt3:The Dance  DakanMon Sep 17 21:10:17 2012No.4529476
 
Quoted by: >>4529488 >>4529490
 
 
 I know what I said about the next update wouldn't be until friday. But, I got some free time and I wrote something. I present part 3.
 
>The music started soon after you take your seat next to rose
>The bass pounded heavy over the speakers
>Well, from the sound of it Vinyl knows her audience
>A few people get up and start to dance
>You and rose stay seated for the moment
>As you watch the people around you dance you occasionally glance over at rose
>She sits quietly drinking her punch, staring at the people dancing
>You begin to wonder what she is thinking…
>Wasn’t that why you asked her to come out with you tonight?
>So you can restrengthen your friendship with Rose?
>So why do you sit here and do nothing…
>As you start thinking about doing something you hear a voice behind you
”Hey Anon, didn’t expect to see you here!”
>You turn around in your seat and see one of your class mates
>His name is Robert; he is from your Economics class.
>Accompanying him is a turquoise unicorn, it appears to have a Lyre as a cutie mark
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch3 Pt3:The Dance  DakanMon Sep 17 21:11:36 2012No.4529488
 
Quoted by: >>4529494
 
 
 >>4529476
“And you brought a date! Mind if we sit?
>As he mentions the word date, you see Rose turn away from you
>”Sure have a seat Rob; this is my friend Rose. Rose, this is a classmate of mine Robert.”
>He bows before pulling a chair out for his pony friend.
>He then takes a seat himself
“Nice to meet you Rose, and this beautiful mare is my date Lyra.”
>”Nice to meet you Lyra.”
>She smiles at you and then turns to Rose
“Rose and I know each other from Ponyville; she always had the best flowers.”
>Rose smiles back at Lyra
“Thank you Lyra, that is very nice to say”
>Robert clears his throat
“Do you want something to drink lyra?”
>She responds with a polite nod
>You notice that Rose’s glass is almost empty
>”Would you like a refill on your drink Rose?”
“Yes please”
>She responds without looking at you
>You and Rob get up and head over to the refreshment table
 
 
 
 
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Rózowa RózaMon Sep 17 21:11:36 2012No.4529490
 
 
 >>4529476
Thank God!
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch3 Pt3:The Dance  DakanMon Sep 17 21:12:17 2012No.4529494
 
Quoted by: >>4529503
 
 
 >>4529488
>Strikes up the conversation
“I never thought you would be dating a pony Anon.”
>You chuckle
>”We aren’t dating; we are just friends, why would you say that anyways?”
>He looks at you with a strange look
“Just friends huh? You fooled me! Especially the way she looks at you…”
>”What do you mean?”
>You take a look back at your table.
>Rose is in deep conversation with Lyra
>Every so often she glances in your direction before quickly turning back to Lyra
>“Besides, she’s a pony”
“So, what’s your point?”
>You laugh a little harder
>”She’s an animal man! She’s not human! She’s…”
“What, different?”
>”Well, yes she’s different”
“They aren’t that different you know…”
>You look at Rob who is now staring in Lyra’s direction
“She’s helped me a lot, and I have helped her.”
>”Wait, have you…?”
>He chuckles a bit
“They are not different, no matter what you think. You just need to give them a chance.”
>You look back over at Rose again
>This time she is staring at you.
>”A chance huh?”
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch3 Pt3:The Dance  DakanMon Sep 17 21:13:37 2012No.4529503
 
Quoted by: >>4529512
 
 
 >>4529494
>You grab Rose’s drink and head back towards the table
>When you get back you realize Rose hasn’t taken her eyes off of you
>You place her drink down and hold out your hand
>”Would you like to dance Rose?”
>Her eyes light up as you ask her
>Her voice is breathless as she answers you
“Yes”
>Roses leaves her seat and trots next to you out onto the dance floor
>The DJ continues to “drop the bass”
>As you dance with Rose the crowd keeps getting denser and denser
>Pretty soon the dancing is just glorified grinding
>You and rose dance closely her body grinding against yours
>The smell of roses only heighten the feeling
>You both occasionally take break to get some more drinks
>As you go on you can feel a decent buzz coming on
>You are also pretty sure that Rose has one by now too
>As the night continues on the songs start to slow up
>Until you recognize the beginning chords of it.
>You look at Rose who also recognizes the song
>She smiles drunkenly at you and you back at her
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch3 Pt3:The Dance  DakanMon Sep 17 21:14:38 2012No.4529512
 
Quoted by: >>4529530
 
 
 >>4529503
>She rises up and places one hoof on your shoulder and the other in your hand
>You pull her close and begin to slowly turn in circles to My Heart Will Go On
>Rose slowly leans her head against your shoulders
>The smell of roses mixes with your intoxication
>You bury your head into her mane
>You would give anything for with moment to go on forever
>But like all good things…
>She pulls her head back and stares into your eyes
>A smiles slowly creeps across her face
>She closes her eyes
>And slowly moves towards you
>Time slows to a crawl and you are left to your thoughts
>This is it…
>The culmination of everything
>A start of something new…
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch3 Pt3:The Dance  DakanMon Sep 17 21:16:58 2012No.4529530
 
Quoted by: >>4529534
 
 
 >>4529512
>But…
>NO BUTS!
>She’s an animal
>She’s a Pony
>She’s a friend
>You can’t do this
>You begin to panic
>Think brain think!
>Your brain takes over
>A decision is made
>At the last moment
>You turn your head…
>Wrong answer brain!
>You feel her kiss against your cheek as you try to take stock about what just happened
>You feel Rose pull back against you
>You look back into her eyes
>Your gaze is met with questions
>Oh god you really fucked up this time Anon.
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch3 Pt3:The Dance  DakanMon Sep 17 21:17:16 2012No.4529534
 
Quoted by: >>4529539 >>4530633
 
 
 >>4529530
“Anon, I don’t…”
>Say something
“Is this something wrong…”
>Say something…
“Is it me?
>ANYTHING!
>”You’re a pony”
>...but that…
>Her eyes fill with confusion, fear, and rage
>And then nothing but sadness
>She pushes you away and gallops out of the Hall
>You look around for some help
>You see Robert and Lyra standing near by
>You can’t hear what he is saying, but you get the gist
>You run after Rose.
 
 
 
 
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DakanMon Sep 17 21:18:57 2012No.4529539
 
Quoted by: >>4529548
 
 
 >>4529534
End of Part 3
 
Yeah...
 
Im going to go hide in a bunker now...
 
 
 
 
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Rózowa RózaMon Sep 17 21:20:57 2012No.4529548
 
 
 >>4529539
You'd better, I'm coming after you for that cliffhanger.
 
I still love you though.
 
 
 
 
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Ponyville Apartments: Mission Adorable  PancakesMon Sep 17 21:27:37 2012No.4529613  
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>>4511894
> Soft. Fluttershy feels so soft to the touch.
> It takes me a minute to realize what I just did.
> And it takes me a few seconds more to notice that she isn't backing away.
*sob*
> Instead, she leans her head on my shoulder.
> The pegasus pony continues crying softly.
*sniff*
> Unsure of what to do, I start stroking her mane very slowly.
> Slowly, so as not to scare her.
*sob*
> Slowly, so she can get used to me.
> Slowly, so she has time to let it all out.
*sniff*
> And slowly, I feel her stop shaking. She lowers her wings.
> Then, she whispers in the tiniest voice.
"I'm... sorry."
> I hold her tighter in response.
> Not because I'm afraid that she'll run off.
*sob*
> But because...
> "It's alright, Fluttershy. It's alright."
*sob*
> I don't remember how long it took.
> But I didn't care. I stayed with her.
> More than a pony from another world, I realized.
> She was just a young girl, scared and lost in this world.
 
 
 
 
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Ponyville Apartments: Mission Adorable  PancakesMon Sep 17 21:29:37 2012No.4529630
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Quoted by: >>4529653 >>4547375
 
 
 >>4511894
> Soft. Fluttershy feels so soft to the touch.
> It takes me a minute to realize what I just did.
> And it takes me a few seconds more to notice that she isn't backing away.
*sob*
> Instead, she leans her head on my shoulder.
> The pegasus pony continues crying softly.
*sniff*
> Unsure of what to do, I start stroking her mane very slowly.
> Slowly, so as not to scare her.
*sob*
> Slowly, so she can get used to me.
> Slowly, so she has time to let it all out.
*sniff*
> And slowly, I feel her stop shaking. She lowers her wings.
> Then, she whispers in the tiniest voice.
"I'm... sorry."
> I hold her tighter in response.
> Not because I'm afraid that she'll run off.
*sob*
> But because...
> "It's alright, Fluttershy. It's alright."
*sob*
> I don't remember how long it took.
> But I didn't care. I stayed with her.
> More than a pony from another world, I realized.
> She was just a young girl, scared and lost.
 
 
 
 
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Ponyville Apartments: Mission Adorable  PancakesMon Sep 17 21:33:18 2012No.4529653
 
Quoted by: >>4530010
 
 
 >>4529630
> "Are you sure that you're alright now?"
"Y-yes. I think so."
> Very slowly, I pull myself away from the yellow pegasus.
> She clings to me again the moment I step back.
> "Umm, Fluttershy?"
"Oh! Sorry, about that. I just..."
> She lets go of me reluctantly.
> Her voice becomes almost inaudible.
"...felt so safe in your arms."
> She blushes beet red. Maybe I held her a little bit too long.
> I clear my throat and politely pretend not to catch that last part.
> "You were right, though. I should have watched you more closely."
"I was right?
> "Yep. You certainly are a lot more troublesome that I expected."
"I'm so sorry," she whispers. "This is all my fault."
> She lowers her head sadly.
"If I didn't get too excited around the children and animals-"
> "Don't worry about it. I had an idea of what I was getting into when I took this job."
"Eh? What do you mean?"
> "Heh, forget about it. Instead-"
> I take her by the hoof and give her a gentle smile.
> "Why don't you tell me a little more about your special talent."
"Oh, my!" she says, blushing. "It's not really that special, but I can-"
 
 
 
 
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Ponyville Apartments: Mission Adorable  PancakesMon Sep 17 22:19:37 2012No.4530010
 
Quoted by: >>4530030 >>4547375
 
 
 >>4529653
"Where are we going?"
> "Somewhere with the equipment we need."
> All Fluttershy and I need now is a way to get inside this place.
> I check the door. It's locked. Figures.
"Oh, no! What are we going to do now?"
> "Hmm."
> I quickly look around. Then, I see it.
> "Fluttershy? Do you think you could find me a large rock?"
"A large rock? O-okay..."
> A short while later, she returns.
"Will this one do?"
> "That's perfect. Now, stand back."
> I toss the rock through one of the windows. It shatters.
> Then, I unlock the window through the hole and open it.
> I'm too large to fit through, but-
"Are you sure? But isn't this breaking and entering?"
> "We'll just say that some crazy neighborhood kids took advantage of the chaos."
> I carefully push her through the window.
> "Watch the broken glass."
"A-alright."
> She quickly opens the front door from inside.
> After a quick glance around, I head in after her.
"I'm sorry for asking," whispers Fluttershy. "But is this your first time doing this? You act like you've done this before."
> I just give her an evil smile in reply.
> Yep. This really takes me back.
 
 
 
 
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Ponyville Apartments: Mission Adorable  PancakesMon Sep 17 22:22:58 2012No.4530030
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Quoted by: >>4530633 >>4547375 >>4547873
 
 
 >>4530010
"Are you sure that this is going to work?"
> "Honestly? I have no idea."
> But we need to try something. Applejack can't do this alone.
> I quickly switch on all of the speakers.
> Then, I signal at Fluttershy to start.
"H-hello? Can you hear me?"
> She whispers to the microphone softly.
> I turn up the volume so her voice can be heard.
"I know that it's a little troublesome, but I'd like to share something with all my new animal friends."
> I glance outside. Looks like her voice is being carried nicely.
> Good thing that the zoo's P. A. system still works.
"Oh! And to all my little human friends, too!"
> I turn to Fluttershy. She looks fairly calm.
> Probably because she can't see her audience.
"I'd like to dedicate this song to all my new friends here in the city zoo."
> She pauses. Then she covers the microphone for a moment.
"And I'd like you to listen, too," she whispers. "That is, if you don't mind."
> I give her a thumbs-up. She smiles, blushing a little.
"T-thanks."
> Fluttershy is ready now. She looks surprisingly confident.
> The pegasus pony puts her lips to the microphone.
> And she begins to sing.
 
 
 
 
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SPart !HPI3kcpRZYTue Sep 18 00:00:57 2012No.4530633
 
 
 >>4530030
>>4529534
two cliffhangers for one afternoon ! how could you guys be so cruel ?
@ Dakan you better be productive in your bunker xD
@Pancakes
nice cliffhanger, hope that no troll post a Jigglypuff xD
 
 
 
 
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BakalightTue Sep 18 00:16:58 2012No.4530782
 
Quoted by: >>4530853 >>4530888
 
 
 OK flexing my writing muscle here.
 
>You and Twilight Sparkle were running away from a ever increasing horde of demented bronies.
>You'd stop every now and again to take down some with your revolver but you were running out of ammo.
 
>There JUST had to be a Bronycon in town.
 
"DEAR PRINCESS CELESTIA"
 
>Twilight had conjured a letter out of thin air along with a magical floating quill scribbling furiously.
 
"TODAY LEARNT THAT MOST HUMANS ARE GREAT PEOPLE, SOME A ROTTEN TO THE CURE AND SOME DOWN RIGHT INSANE.
 
SEND HELP
 
Your faithful student Twilight Sparkle.
 
>"Your god is not here Twilight" I said back to her
 
"We'll see"
 
 
 
 
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BakalightTue Sep 18 00:25:37 2012No.4530853
 
Quoted by: >>4530888
 
 
 >>4530782
>CAN YOU TAKE ME TO RAINBOW DASH? I WANT TO CUM INSIDE HER!
 
>No go away PLEASE begged Twilight. I downed the brony who said using up my last bullet.
 
>We head into the alley ways in a attempt to lose them but to no avail. We end up in a dead end, our backs against the wall as if we were facing a firing squad.
 
>"No where to run now my sweety waifu"
 
>Just as they were about the pounce, Twilight noticed a sewer entrance to magically threw me and herself into the sewer. They tried to follow but the hole was too big for those with a cheetos and big mac diet.
 
"WE'LL FIND YOU TWILIGHT. WE'LL FIND YOU ALL...
 
>"So this is what is feels like to have someone head over hoofs for you I guess".
 
 
 
 
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BakalightTue Sep 18 00:30:16 2012No.4530888
 
 
 >>4530782
>>4530853
Sorry if its a bit shit. But as of the moment I'm just getting some writing practise down. Anyone wanna tell me what they think.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousTue Sep 18 05:05:17 2012No.4533565
 
Quoted by: >>4535447
 
 
 4.5 hour bump.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousTue Sep 18 06:59:37 2012No.4535447
 
 
 >>4533565
evening bump
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousTue Sep 18 09:30:37 2012No.4537857
 
 
 After dinner bump.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousTue Sep 18 12:42:17 2012No.4542161
 
 
 morning bump
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousTue Sep 18 15:45:18 2012No.4544989
 
 
 I-should-be-in-bed bump
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousTue Sep 18 18:46:17 2012No.4546354
 
 
 bumpity bumpity bump
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousTue Sep 18 19:15:18 2012No.4546482
 
 
 high noon bump
 
 
 
 
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writerTue Sep 18 19:26:58 2012No.4546537
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Quoted by: >>4546926 >>4546941 >>4547198 >>4548136
 
 
 >write stuff I like, feel happy about it
>a few likes/favs which really make me pleased
>write clop
>feel like shit when I publish it due to guilt
>instantly more favs and views then other things
 
but why :(
 
 
 
 
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SPartTue Sep 18 20:37:38 2012No.4546926
 
 
 >>4546537
don't write it if you dont feel like it @__@
people who are into clop are easier with faves and likes
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousTue Sep 18 20:38:58 2012No.4546941
 
 
 >>4546537
To answer your question: sex sales
btw, what are you referring to?
 
 
 
 
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DakanTue Sep 18 21:17:38 2012No.4547198
 
Quoted by: >>4547508 >>4547661
 
 
 Hey all, an update from the bunker...
 
I'm writing Pt4 and i have had some...interesting developements.
Nothing bad... I promise...
Dont' know if it is going up tonight...
Be prepared...Revelations are coming...
 
>>4546537
I am personally not against clopfics
I am interested in what exactly you are talking about...
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousTue Sep 18 21:50:57 2012No.4547375
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>>4530030
>>4530010
>>4529630
 
 
 
 
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SPartTue Sep 18 22:05:38 2012No.4547508
 
 
 >>4547198
great to hear Dakan!
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousTue Sep 18 22:26:17 2012No.4547661
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>>4547198
 
Delightful news Dakan! As embarrassing as it is to admit, I've actually lost sleep over your story.
This shit better have a happy ending.
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch3 Pt4:Revelations pt1  DakanTue Sep 18 22:26:58 2012No.4547663
 
Quoted by: >>4547674
 
 
 >Dakan emerges from the bunker
Don't shoot! I have part 4!
 
>You chase Rose through the halls of the university
>Even in her gown she is faster than you are
>The sound of her hooves striking the ground disappear ahead of you
>From the sounds of it she may have exited the building
>As you turn the corner you spot a door leading out onto the central main grounds
>As you exit the building you can see the grounds are illuminated only by the full moon
>It is a clear star filled sky above you
>A beautiful night
>Or at least what should have been a beautiful night
>You took care of that quite handily
>You had to go and tell her that, didn’t you?
>You could have said anything, but you said that.
>You need to find Rose
>You have to explain to her everything
>But, what exactly are you going to explain to her?
>That you can’t see past the fact she is a pony?
>That she is too much of a friend for you to even get past that?
>What the fuck exactly is wrong with you?
>You were having such a great time with her
>Well, you aren’t going to get closer to an answer standing here talking to yourself
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch3 Pt4  DakanTue Sep 18 22:27:18 2012No.4547674
 
Quoted by: >>4547687
 
 
 >>4547663
>A quick sweep of your surroundings already confirm your suspicions
>Rose is nowhere within sight…
>But wait…
>On the light wind you can hear the fain sound of crying
>It’s difficult to place the direction…
 >You move further onto the main grounds searching for Rose
>On the ground up ahead you spot her discarded mask
>Ok so you’re on the right direction
>Another round of sobs finally gives you a solid direction
>Off to your right
>You head off the path to your right
>Rose’s sobs grow louder as you get closer and closer to her hiding spot
>Up ahead you can make out a silhouette of a pony sitting on the ground
>That’s her, it has to be Rose
>She is facing away from you
>You get closer and closer you slow your advance
>Through her sobs you can hear her talking to someone
>No somep0ny
“Oh dear Celestia, why…?”
>Is she… praying?
>You stop moving and listen in on what she is saying
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch3 Pt4  DakanTue Sep 18 22:29:38 2012No.4547687
 
Quoted by: >>4547696 >>4547698
 
 
 >>4547674
“Why did you and your sister have to send us here?”
>Wait…
“I know it was for the best, but why did you have to leave us in the process?”
>…What…
”and now we will never see equestria…”
“It’s all gone”
>…gone? What does she mean…?”
>She starts to cry again
>Through the sobs you can tell she is trying to catch her breath
“Gone…it’s all gone…”
“And worst of all… is him”
>Well fuck…
“I understand we are different…”
“But, that doesn’t change the way I feel…”
“I’m in love with a human…”
“And he cares nothing about me…”
“If only I wasn’t a pony…”
“Maybe then I could make him happy.”
>She cries even harder now
>You can tell she is near hysteria
>Barely able to catch a breath between sobs
>Even when she does, you can hear it clearly
“Anon…”
>She cries your name…
>And all you can do is stand by and watch her suffer in silence
>No, you refuse to let this mare to be hurt any further.
 
 
 
 
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Loscil !LoscilARtETue Sep 18 22:30:38 2012No.4547696
 
Quoted by: >>4547757
 
 
 >>4547687
Do you have by any chance a pastebin?
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch3 Pt4  DakanTue Sep 18 22:31:38 2012No.4547698
 
Quoted by: >>4547714
 
 
 >>4547687
>You take a few steps forward and clear your throat
>”Rose…”
>She turns around and looks at you
>She is surprised to see you
>She tries to stifle her cries and wipes her tears away
“Anon, what are you…?”
>You immediately see the change of emotions in her face
“NO! Get away from me! You are just a human!”
>Ok so you deserve that, you did call her a pony
>You take a few steps towards her
>”I just want to talk Rose.”
>She stares you down, her green rage filled eyes glinting in the moon light
“I don’t want to talk to you! Stay away from me!”
>You take another few steps forward
>”We need to talk Rose…”
>Pure rage flashes through her eyes
“I! SAID! NO!”
>Before you can comprehend what is happening you are flying flat on your back
>Your shoulder and your chest are in severe pain
>It takes you a few seconds to realize exactly what happened.
>She kicked you
>Her hooves had made connection with the middle of your chest and your right shoulder
>You try to move but waves of pain wash over you when you do
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch3 Pt4  DakanTue Sep 18 22:32:59 2012No.4547714
 
Quoted by: >>4547723
 
 
 >>4547698
“Anon! Mother of Celestia! I am so sorry!”
>You cough a bit, the pain continues
“Are you ok?”
>You slowly start to sit up and take an internal check of your body
>From what you can tell your chest and shoulder are heavily bruised
>She really knocked the wind right out of you
>”I’m fine, I think…”
>”I deserve that actually…”
>She turns away from you
“You deserve a little more than that…”
>You chuckle
>Ouch, ok it hurts to laugh
>”Rose, I don’t know what to say…”
>She turns back towards you
>You can still see a glint of anger in her eyes, but you see mostly sadness.
”I just want to know the truth…”
>You nod
>”You deserve that much, but I want the truth also…”
>She looks at you with confusion
>Then the sudden realization of what you’re talking about
“How much did you hear…”
>”I heard enough to know there is something more going on.”
>She looks at the ground
”I’ll tell you everything, but you need to go first.”
>You nod again
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch3 Pt4  DakanTue Sep 18 22:33:38 2012No.4547723
 
Quoted by: >>4547735
 
 
 >>4547714
>”I care about you Rose.”
>You can tell that got her attention
“You sure have a funny way of showing it”
>Ok not the good kind of attention
>”I know, I’m sorry about what I said…”
>”It’s just you’re such a good friend…”
“That is not what you said.”
>You swallow hard
>”I know…”
>”Rose, we are different…you’re such an amazing pony…”
“Why should it matter then?”
>It shouldn’t
>”I’m scared.”
>Where did that come from…
“And, you think I’m not?”
>That’s right
>She is the one out of place
>This is worse for her than it is for you
>She walks up to you and rubs against your side
>”I just want to be happy”
“I want you to be happy”
“Then what’s stopping you from being happy…?”
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch3 Pt4  DakanTue Sep 18 22:34:59 2012No.4547735
 
Quoted by: >>4547757
 
 
 >>4547723
>You kneel down and look into her eyes
>You can see how much she cares for you reflected back
>There should be nothing stopping me
>You take a deep breath; inhaling the smell of roses.
>You’re not going let anything stop you…
>You put both hands up on her face
>Why should you care what other people think?
>She closes her eyes as you begin to stroke her neck
>You want to be happy
>You close your own eyes and move forward
>You want Rose to be happy
>You lips meet hers
>You are going to be happy
>An electric feeling shoots down your whole body
>You feel Rose’s body tense and relax
>You pull her in closer, wrapping her in your arms
>The kiss seems to go on forever…
>As you break away you are both left breathless
>”Wow…”
>You can see Rose’s coat turn a deeper red
“Wow…”
>You can’t seem to take your eyes of her
>This mare, this beautiful mare
>You’re life just seems to become more and more complicated
>But there is another matter to attend to
>”I told you the truth, now you need to tell me…”
“Right, the truth…”
 
 
 
 
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DakanTue Sep 18 22:38:17 2012No.4547757
 
Quoted by: >>4547785 >>4547833 >>4547976 >>4548176 >>4551790
 
 
 >>4547735
End of Part 4
 
Originally I had Roseluck's secret in Part 4. But Part 4 became so long that I am putting it off for part 5.
 
>>4547696
http://pastebin.com/u/Fourdak
It gets updated right after I post here, all previous chapters are there aswell
 
Now for a question to the audience...
If I were to right something *ahem* intimate for this story, would you be interested? *cough* clopfic *cough*
 
 
 
 
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Loscil !LoscilARtETue Sep 18 22:42:17 2012No.4547785
 
 
 >>4547757
Awesome.
 
IMO, clopfics are OK.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousTue Sep 18 22:49:37 2012No.4547833
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>>4547757
 
Well, I've been reading for the romance myself, but if you're good at writing, um, more... intimate romance, then go for it.
 
 
 
 
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Ponyville Apartments: Mission Adorable  PancakesTue Sep 18 22:54:59 2012No.4547873
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Quoted by: >>4547896
 
 
 >>4530030
"When I look in your eyes," she sings.
"I see the wonder of the world in your eyes."
> Lovely?
"I see the flight of a thousand butterflies,"
"When I look in your eyes..."
> Slender?
 
"And it is no surprise,"
"To see the softness of the clouds in your eyes,"
> Graceful?
"The bright reflection of rainbows in the skies,"
"When I look in your eyes..."
> Tender?
 
> Where are the words that describe her?
> Caring? Angel?
> Kind and gentle?
> There are no words to describe her.
 
> Easier by far, say I,
> To steal the sky
> From the songbirds.
> Than to find the words that seem right.
> How do you describe a dream right?
> Rare are the words,
> Where are the words?
 
 
 
 
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Ponyville Apartments: Mission Adorable  PancakesTue Sep 18 22:58:59 2012No.4547896
 
Quoted by: >>4547943 >>4548213
 
 
 >>4547873
> Fluttershy covers the mic with her hoof after her song.
"Do you think that was alright?" she whispers.
> "Err... Uhh..."
"Oh! I'm so sorry," she says. "You see, I haven't been singing at all recently. I guess I might have missed a note or two..."
> She lowers her head sadly.
> "What are you talking about? That was great!"
"Eh? R-really?"
> "You have an amazing voice, Fluttershy! I can't see why you would think like that."
"Oh, you flatterer, you!"
> The pegasus pony blushes bright red.
> I am in a rare dilemma.
> Half of me wants her to continue singing,
> While the other half says that I should get these ponies out of here.
> Hmm. Why is this so hard?
"Umm, excuse me?"
> "Huh? What is it?"
"Should I sing another song?"
> I pause for a moment. Logic wins through (barely).
> And I reluctantly shake my head.
> "We need to find Applejack and head out before things get even more troublesome."
"I see. You're right, of course."
> Fluttershy sighs as she puts down the mic.
> "But if you'd like, I can take you to karaoke to sing again. That is, if you don't mind..."
"Eh?"
> She brightens up immediately.
"Okay. I'd like that."
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousTue Sep 18 23:05:37 2012No.4547943
 
Quoted by: >>4548335
 
 
 >>4547896
I recently tried to open your Pastebin and it didn't load.
Do you have an account?
 
 
 
 
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SPartTue Sep 18 23:09:37 2012No.4547976
 
Quoted by: >>4548006
 
 
 >>4547757
do as you pleased and it's going to please us, in the worest case senario, you could upload the clop part just on pastebin ? so everyone who don't want to read it, can easily skip it ?
 
 
 
 
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DakanTue Sep 18 23:12:57 2012No.4548006
 
Quoted by: >>4548109
 
 
 >>4547976
That's actually what I was thinking about doing. Since the clop would be more of fluff that actually adding any content to the story. I was trying to get an interest gauge before I actually wrote anything.
 
 
 
 
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SPartTue Sep 18 23:23:38 2012No.4548109
 
 
 >>4548006
on the internet is allways place for porn in one or the other way
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousTue Sep 18 23:26:57 2012No.4548136
 
 
 >>4546537
Twilit, is that you?
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousTue Sep 18 23:31:17 2012No.4548176
 
 
 >>4547757
i wouldnt mind a clopfic
 
 
 
 
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Ponyville Apartments: Mission Adorable  PancakesTue Sep 18 23:36:58 2012No.4548213
 
Quoted by: >>4548224 >>4548236
 
 
 >>4547896
> Fluttershy and I sneak back to where we last saw Applejack.
> On the way, I see that the remaining animals have returned to their pens.
> They wait patiently as the zoo keepers lock their cages one by one.
> Even the most vicious ones have a strangely calm look in their eyes.
> And that isn't all.
"Oh! That's so cute!" cries the pegasus.
> I quickly pull her back behind the bushes.
> She's right, though.
> All of the orphan children are obediently assembled near the entrance.
> The orphanage matron quickly confirms that they are complete.
> Fluttershy's song certainly has a powerful effect.
> Almost like magic.
"And there's Applejack!"
> Sure enough, the orange pony is standing together with a few zoo staff.
> They thank her again before leaving.
> After making sure they are out of sight, she turns around and winks at us.
> We quickly leave the bushes and walk up to her.
> "Everything alright on your side?"
"More or less," says Applejack. "We were gettin' overwhelmed back there! Good thing you got Fluttershy to sing on that P.A. thingy."
"Sorry about that," says the pegasus. "This is all my fault..."
> "Forget about it for now. It's time we make like a tree and -"
"Get the hay out of here!" cries Applejack.
> All three of us make a mad dash for the exit.
> Thus ends our visit to the city zoo.
 
 
 
 
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Ponyville Apartments: Mission Adorable  PancakesTue Sep 18 23:38:19 2012No.4548224  
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>>4548213
> Her pet white rabbit sticks his tongue out in disgust.
"Oh, don't be like that, Angel! Despite all the trouble I caused, he was a perfect gentlehuman."
> Fluttershy closes the door behind her and trots over to her desk.
> She pulls out a bottle of ink and a feather pen.
> Then, she sings to herself softly as she writes.
 
"In your eyes," sings Fluttershy.
"I see something that fills me with glee!"
"I see the deepness of... something,"
"Something I feel you feel for me."
 
> When she finishes, the pegasus stands up.
> Angel pretends to vomit to further express his disgust.
> But Fluttershy ignores him and continues humming to herself.
> To Angel's chagrin. She continues singing in the shower happily.
 
"Dear Princess Celestia,"
"Today, I found out how easy it is to be misunderstood by humans,"
"They can be really scary and dangerous!"
"But I've also learned that they can be kind and gentle."
"And that we can't give up on them!"
"Because someday, I'm sure that we can all sing a beautiful song together."
"- Your Loyal Subject, Fluttershy"
 
 
 
 
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Ponyville Apartments: Mission Adorable  PancakesTue Sep 18 23:39:18 2012No.4548236
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Quoted by: >>4548335 >>4548364 >>4565017
 
 
 >>4548213
> Her pet white rabbit sticks his tongue out in disgust.
"Oh, don't be like that, Angel! Despite all the trouble I caused, he was a perfect gentlehuman."
> Fluttershy closes the door behind her and trots over to her desk.
> She pulls out a bottle of ink and a feather pen.
> Then, she sings to herself softly as she writes.
 
"In your eyes," sings Fluttershy.
"I see something that fills me with glee!"
"I see the deepness of... something,"
"Something I feel you feel for me."
 
> When she finishes, the pegasus stands up.
> Angel pretends to vomit to further express his disgust.
> But Fluttershy ignores him and continues humming to herself.
> To Angel's chagrin, she continues singing in the shower happily.
 
"Dear Princess Celestia,"
"Today, I found out how easy it is to be misunderstood by humans,"
"They can be really scary and dangerous!"
"But I've also learned that they can be kind and gentle."
"And that we can't give up on them!"
"Because someday, I'm sure that we can all sing a beautiful song together."
"- Your Loyal Subject, Fluttershy"
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousTue Sep 18 23:50:57 2012No.4548327
 
 
 Bump
 
 
 
 
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PancakesTue Sep 18 23:51:38 2012No.4548335
 
Quoted by: >>4548353 >>4548377 >>4548412 >>4548442 >>4548466 >>4548484 >>4548502 >>4548506 >>4553868 >>4554052 >>4555243
 
 
 >>4548236
And that ends the third chapter. All uploaded on my pastebin for easy access.
 
>>4547943
http://pastebin.com/u/ChocolateChipPancake
 
Someone else took the Pancakes account first. I can change my 4chan handle to ChocolateChipPancake if you guys like.
 
In other news, I have reached an impasse between myself and I. I'll need YOUR help to make a decision for the next chapter.
 
A. Rainbow Dash and Pinkie Pie visit the local video arcade.
B. The Mane 6 follow our protagonist on his day off (for varying reasons).
C. The Mystery Box
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousTue Sep 18 23:53:38 2012No.4548353
 
 
 >>4548335
A.
 
 
 
 
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PancakesTue Sep 18 23:54:17 2012No.4548364
 
Quoted by: >>4563089 >>4566901
 
 
 >>4548236
Also, an internet to those who figured out where the songs in this chapter are based on. Two internets if you can guess the song titles.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousTue Sep 18 23:55:37 2012No.4548377
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>>4548335
THE BOX
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousWed Sep 19 00:00:17 2012No.4548412
 
 
 >>4548335
B
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousWed Sep 19 00:03:37 2012No.4548442
 
 
 >>4548335
C, you cant resist a mistery box man
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousWed Sep 19 00:06:17 2012No.4548466
 
 
 >>4548335
A
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousWed Sep 19 00:09:37 2012No.4548484
 
 
 >>4548335
A
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousWed Sep 19 00:10:38 2012No.4548502
 
 
 >>4548335
If you can, write all of them, it would be great.
 
 
 
 
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SPartWed Sep 19 00:11:17 2012No.4548506
 
Quoted by: >>4548725
 
 
 >>4548335
in that order ?
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousWed Sep 19 00:39:37 2012No.4548725
 
Quoted by: >>4549011
 
 
 >>4548506
I think he means you should pick the choice for the next chapter. Sorta like voting, I guess.
 
 
 
 
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SPartWed Sep 19 01:09:17 2012No.4549011
 
 
 >>4548725
i know, but i want all 3 !
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousWed Sep 19 04:55:18 2012No.4551790
 
 
 >>4547757
Hey, personally, I don't mind intimacy in any story as long as it's well written and not mindless; has a basis for it. So, if intimate is what you're going to do, it won't sway me. Go for it
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousWed Sep 19 05:08:38 2012No.4551983
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Quoted by: >>4553384 >>4553973
 
 
 Keeping this alive for the return of Dakan and moar Rose.
Christ, if I lose any more sleep over his story, I'll go full autism.
I'm seriously jerking off with my own tears.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousWed Sep 19 06:40:58 2012No.4553384
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Quoted by: >>4553973
 
 
 >>4551983
Pic related
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousWed Sep 19 07:08:57 2012No.4553868
 
 
 >>4548335
 
Although the mystery box is as tempting as ever, for the continuity's sake I'll pick A.
 
Besides, we're bound to get a heap load of those boxes after the initial exposition chapters will end and the story switches to the next gear.
>Implying that point A. is one of the last character introduction chapters
 
Anyways, have fun writing the next batch, Pancakes! We'll be waiting.
 
 
 
 
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DakanWed Sep 19 07:15:17 2012No.4553973
 
Quoted by: >>4555666 >>4556406
 
 
 >>4553384
>>4551983
Um thanks... I think
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousWed Sep 19 07:21:38 2012No.4554052
 
 
 >>4548335
C. Always go with the mystery box!
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousWed Sep 19 08:44:17 2012No.4555243
 
 
 >>4548335
A!
A for the love of celestia!
 
I can just imagine what shenanigans RD and Pinkie can get up in an arcade
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousWed Sep 19 09:15:18 2012No.4555666
 
Quoted by: >>4558202
 
 
 >>4553973
We can go back to the death threats if you'd like
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousWed Sep 19 10:03:17 2012No.4556406
 
Quoted by: >>4558202
 
 
 >>4553973
You took one of my favorite ponies and made a love story around her so my feels are justly felt Sir.
You're also quite good at your writing.
 
 
 
 
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DakanWed Sep 19 11:37:17 2012No.4558202
 
Quoted by: >>4561480
 
 
 >>4555666
Well, satanic trips confirm...
 
I'm kidding...
 
>>4556406
Your welcome. And thanks for the compliment. I don't consider my writing that good though...
 
Update bump: Idk if update tonight... I kind of want a little bit of a buffer before I post the next chapter...
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousWed Sep 19 14:47:38 2012No.4561480
 
 
 >>4558202
gotta dig that demonic timing
You are skilled bro, I find this story enjoyable
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousWed Sep 19 16:46:57 2012No.4563089
 
Quoted by: >>4565044
 
 
 >>4548364
Dr. Dolittle (1967).
 
How did you get the lyrics for a deleted scene?
 
 
 
 
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SpartWed Sep 19 21:02:57 2012No.4564606
 
 
 bump
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch3 Pt5:Revelations Pt2  DakanWed Sep 19 21:23:18 2012No.4564739
 
Quoted by: >>4564752
 
 
 Ok, so I decided to stay up late again and write something... Looks like chapter 3 is going to be a long one... ;)
 
>”So what is the truth then?”
>You and Rose have moved to a nearby bench
>She lies next to you on the bench with her head in your lap
>You rub her stomach as she looks up at you with concern in her eyes
“It’s all gone…”
>Her eyes begin to fill with sadness and tears
“My home, my garden, Ponyville, all of Equestria; it’s all gone.”
>A tear rolls down her face
>You automatically wipe it away
>”What do you mean it’s all gone? What happened?”
>Her eyes stare off into the night sky
“I remember the events like they happened yesterday”
“It all began with a meeting held in the town square.”
“We were all gathered there awaiting an important announcement”
“Celestia and her sister, Luna, suddenly appeared on the stage in front of the crowd.”
“But they looked different, Celestia said it was because she was and image projected throughout Equestria”
“She said that she, Luna, and several high ranking Unicorns had been following a developing situation.”
“She said that she didn’t want to alarm the population until she was sure about what it was or that it couldn’t be avoided.”
“Celestia told us that our world was dying.”
“And there was nothing we could do to stop it.”
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch3 Pt5:Revelations Pt2  DakanWed Sep 19 21:25:39 2012No.4564752
 
Quoted by: >>4564766
 
 
 >>4564739
“There was a short panic the followed shortly after”
“But the crowd was soon calmed by Celestia”
“She went to explain that tremors would happen throughout the land.”
“They will only get worse and more frequent as we get closer”
“She ended by offering us hope.”
“She said that it was Luna who had discovered a far off place, which would be safe from this disaster.”
“She promised when the time was right we would go there.”
“During the following month earthquakes shook our land”
“We got more news about the land we would soon be going to.”
“It was filled with creatures that walked on two legs and were called humans.”
“Celestia had made contact with them and was in negoations about us coming to their world”
“We were told we would be welcomed and well taken care for by the humans.”
“There were only a few restrictions.”
“The most important one that was stressed is that we couldn’t tell the general populace about this until it was announced.”
“Then came that final day.”
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch3 Pt5:Revelations Pt2  DakanWed Sep 19 21:26:18 2012No.4564766
 
Quoted by: >>4564783
 
 
 >>4564752
“I wasn’t lying to you when I said I was working in the garden before it happened”
“The ground began to shake, but it was different”
“On this day, morning became night.”
“I looked up into the sky and the sun was no longer there”
“I rushed to the center of town with everyp0ny else.”
“There Princess Celestia spoke with us one final time.”
“She told us it was time to leave.”
“She then apologized”
“Because she and Luna had to stay behind”
“It was going to take all of their magical ability to transport us to earth”
“They had to stay back to make sure they got everyp0ny.”
“She ended by saying that she loved us all and good luck.”
“There was a bright flash of light, and I found myself in the metal box where you found me.”
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch3 Pt5:Revelations Pt2  DakanWed Sep 19 21:28:59 2012No.4564783
 
Quoted by: >>4564792
 
 
 >>4564766
>Her eyes refocus and look up at you
>As she does, her eyes quickly fill with tears again
>There is nothing that you and her can do to stop the incoming water works
>You pick her up and hold her close as she cries on your shoulder
“It’s all gone…Anon…”
“My garden…my beautiful garden…”
“My home…Equestria… all gone…”
“We can never…go back”
“Even our princesses…”
>She continues to cry
>You hold onto her tightly slowly stroking her mane trying to console her
>But what can you do?
>It’s not like a regular loss of a home
>Her whole world was erased from somewhere
>All that is left is her and everp0ny else that now resides on Earth
>You can only try
>”At least you and all of your friends are ok”
>She sobs a little less and starts to calm down a little
>”I know that we can’t rebuild your home exactly like it was…”
“But, you can build you a new one here.”
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch3 Pt5:Revelations Pt2  DakanWed Sep 19 21:30:17 2012No.4564792
 
Quoted by: >>4564803
 
 
 >>4564783
>She looks at you.
“You mean build ourselves one here.”
>You stare into her gorgeous green eyes
>”You and me, it won’t be easy, but we find a way to make it work.”
>”That is if you still want an idiot human like me.”
>She smiles and giggles
“I’ll take you, stallion; if you’ll take just a pony.”
>You chuckle
>She called you a stallion
>For some reason you find that… enticing.
>”I guess I’ll have to settle for just a pony.”
>You pull her in close again
>Your lips meet hers for a second time
>You move your tongue across her mouth begging for an opening
>She slowly gives way allowing your tongue to enter her mouth
>Your tongues intertwine around one another
>You slowly move your hands down her back
>Your hands stop at her cutie marks
>You can feel a change in texture underneath your hands
>You’re about to explore further when Rose breaks off the kiss
>She smiles at you
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch3 Pt5:Revelations Pt2  DakanWed Sep 19 21:31:39 2012No.4564803
 
Quoted by: >>4564812
 
 
 >>4564792
>”Is something wrong”
>Gets off the bench and start to walk away, she turns her head back towards you
“I can’t let you discover everything in one go can I?”
>You smile broadly
>Oh Rose, you are a tease…
>”Well, the night is still fairly young…”
“Oh? What do you have in mind?”
>”Well the dance is here winding down, but that doesn’t mean this is the only place…”
“I would like to have some more of that punch”
>You smile and put your arm around her neck
>”I got a good place for that…”
>You and rose exit the university grounds and hail a taxi
>As you ride to your next destination you get some very interesting looks from the taxi driver
>What? He acts like he has never seen a grown man make out with a pony before…
>The taxi driver lets you out at a bar that is only a few blocks from your apartment
>As you enter you know that you and Rose are clearly over dressed
>If that wasn’t enough to grab the attention of the bar
>Your and Rose’s behavior is
 
 
 
 
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The Roseluck Chronicles Ch3 Pt5:Revelations Pt2  DakanWed Sep 19 21:32:58 2012No.4564812
 
Quoted by: >>4564822 >>4569795
 
 
 >>4564803
>You both sit at a booth in the back
>Always close to one another
>You drinking down a few beers
>Rose is drinking down appletinis again
>The hour gets late and pretty soon the bar is calling for last call
>You and Rose stumble into the street
>Now just to get back to the apartment
>Which way was that again…
>You somehow manage to find your way home
>Although you have a pretty hard time trying to open the door
>Why is it so hard to use keys with a pony constantly bumping into you?
>You finally master the lock and practically fall into the apartment
>You and Rose stumble drunkenly over to the couch
>You sprawl out onto the couch first
>Rose falls second right on top of you
>You both are laughing hard
>Rose, alcohol, that smell
>It’s almost too much for you to bear
>You wrap your arms around her
>You pull her in close and whisper in your ear
>”Are you tired?”
>She laughs
“Mmm, not yet…”
>”Well then, let’s see how much energy you have left…”
 
 
 
 
>>
 
DakanWed Sep 19 21:34:57 2012No.4564822
 
Quoted by: >>4565062
 
 
 >>4564812
End of Part 5
 
Hehe...next update will be pastebin only...;)
I'll post here when its ready
Time for bed!
 
 
 
 
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Ponyville Apartments: Need for Steed  PancakesWed Sep 19 22:06:58 2012No.4565017
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Quoted by: >>4565033
 
 
 >>4548236
> I slowly open my eyes.
> And my world is filled with...
"Oh! Are you awake now? Earlier, I thought that you were awake but-"
> Pink.
"-you weren't. So I decided to stay here and wait. But it was really hard to-"
> Pinkie.
"-keep quiet so I started playing a song in my head. And before I knew it-"
> Pinkie Pie.
"-I was humming a tune. And then you started to stir. So I stopped, and then-"
> "Pinkie Pie!" I cry out.
"Yes!?"
> I still can't figure out how this pony breaks into my room.
> No locks damaged. No walls or doors tampered.
> It's almost like a closed room murder mystery.
> Minus the murder, thankfully.
> She gives me this great big smile.
> Her clear blue eyes are filled with excitement.
> Ugh! I sigh to myself and decide against scolding her.
> "Good morning," I manage.
"And good morning to you! While I was waiting, I came up with this song just for you!"
> "Huh? Wait, what-"
"Good morning, little sleepyhead! Today's the day at LAST!"
> Oh, no.
"With Rainbow Dash and Pinkie Pie, complete now is our CAST!"
> Tell me she's not...
"Today's the day you promised us! We won't let you say NO!"
> I plant my palm upon my face.
"So fun and laughter, here we come! Just please get up, let's GO!"
> She is. Oh, wow.
 
 
 
 
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Ponyville Apartments: Need for Steed  PancakesWed Sep 19 22:09:18 2012No.4565033
 
Quoted by: >>4565044 >>4565528
 
 
 >>4565017
> One random song later, Pinkie and I head to Rarity's apartment.
> "Are you sure that Rainbow's here?"
"Yep! She said that she wanted to look all 'nice' today!"
> "Nice? That doesn't sound like her, at all."
"That's exactly what I said! But when Rarity heard, she insisted to fix Rainbow up at her place."
> "Well, this sounds promising..."
> I knock a few times on the door, but no answer.
> The door doesn't seem locked, but-
"Let me take care of this!" says Pinkie Pie.
> She lets herself inside without hesitation.
"Rainbow! Rarity! Are you in here?"
"We're in the back, darling!" answers Rarity. "Can you help us out for a moment? I can't seem to get this right..."
"Okey, dokey, lokey! We're coming in right now!"
"We?" repeats Rainbow. "W-wait a second! D-do you mean that he's in the room!?"
"Right you are!" says Pinkie. "I'm sure that he'd love to see-"
"No, wait!" cries Rainbow. "He can't come in here! Don't let him in here!"
"Stop struggling!" says Rarity. "You'll rip the hem!"
"B-but!"
> I quickly clear my throat to interrupt.
> "Go ahead, Pinkie," I say. "I'll just wait outside."
"What? But your fingers could really help us out with this!"
"Hush, Pinkie," says Rarity. "A lady needs time to get prepared."
> An awkward silence. An idea comes to mind.
> Why don't I wait and see what happens next?
> But the better part of me pulls through.
> And I let myself out the apartment without incident.
 
 
 
 
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PancakesWed Sep 19 22:12:58 2012No.4565044
 
 
 >>4563089
That's right! Have an internet! inb4 oldfag. Not really my generation of theater, but let's just say that I have a taste in classics.
 
>>4565033
Continuation after a break.
 
 
 
 
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SpartWed Sep 19 22:14:58 2012No.4565062
 
 
 >>4564822
GREAT !
 
 
 
 
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Ponyville Apartments: Need for Steed  PancakesWed Sep 19 23:17:17 2012No.4565528
 
Quoted by: >>4565721
 
 
 >>4565033
"So, what do you think?" asks Rainbow Dash.
> Honestly, I'm not sure what I'm supposed to be seeing here.
> After all, the human illusion spell doesn't work on me.
> All I see is a cyan pegasus pony with a rainbow-colored mane and tail.
> But of course, I can't tell her that.
> "You look... nice."
"Really!?"
> Rainbow smiles widely at those words.
> From the back, Rarity calls out to us.
"Rainbow, dear?" she says. "If he is to see your new look, then he'll have to look through this mirror."
"Eh? B-but that means that he'll see my human form!"
"That's the point, dear."
"Forget it!" she says. "Besides, he says that I look fine just as I am."
> "Uh, sure. Right."
"Enough idle chatter, girls!" cries Pinkie Pie suddenly.
> We all jump at her sudden outburst.
> She is the last person I'd expect to say that.
"We are wasting precious minutes!" says the pink pony. "Neigh! We waste precious SECONDS!"
> She grabs my arm with one hoof and Rainbow with the other.
"ONWARD TO FUN AND ADVENTURE!" she cries.
> With that as her battlecry, she pulls us both with her as she jumps out of the window.
> Wait, what? Out the window? What the hell?
> Those are the last thoughts in my head as the three of us fall toward the ground.
 
 
 
 
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Ponyville Apartments: Need for Steed  PancakesWed Sep 19 23:35:39 2012No.4565721
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Quoted by: >>4565779 >>4596596
 
 
 >>4565528
> "Pinkie Pie?" I ask. "Where did you get that trampoline earlier?"
"I found it," she answers.
> "Yes, but where did you find it?"
"I dunno. It was just lying around, I guess."
> A hoof taps my shoulder.
"Don't bother trying to figure it out," says Rainbow. "It's just Pinkie Pie being Pinkie Pie."
> Ugh, never mind. This is making my head hurt.
> Let's just try to forget that she just had us jump out of a building.
> And we just 'happened' to land on one of her trampolines to break the fall.
"So, this 'video arcade' place," continues the cyan pony. "What's so cool about it, anyway?"
"Really, Rainbow?" interrupts Pinkie. "It's just one the most fun and wonderful places in this city! You act like you haven't learned anything from human television!"
"That doesn't really answer my question," says Rainbow. "And didn't Twilight tell you that too much TV will rot your brain?"
"Oh, Rainbow! You know that I don't believe that old mare's tale."
> I chuckle to myself as I watch their exchange.
> Rainbow frowns at me.
"And you haven't been much help, either. Some guide you are!"
> "Take it easy, Rainbow. I just thought that rather than describing it..."
> I raise my hand and point at the entrance dramatically.
> "It would be easier for you girls to see the place yourselves."
> I can't help but smile as both of them fall silent.
> Their eyes widen and glitter with excitement.
> Great big smiles form on their mouths.
> Like children in a candy factory.
 
 
 
 
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PancakesWed Sep 19 23:41:38 2012No.4565779
 
Quoted by: >>4565787 >>4571707
 
 
 >>4565721
Ending here for now. Updated pastebin, too.
 
Starting to think that I'm having far too much fun writing Pinkie Pie. But then, who doesn't?
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousWed Sep 19 23:42:17 2012No.4565787
 
Quoted by: >>4566061
 
 
 >>4565779
Pinkie is fun indeed.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousThu Sep 20 00:20:58 2012No.4566061
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>>4565787
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousThu Sep 20 01:52:58 2012No.4566901
 
 
 >>4548364
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=cAbCNtk8sOM
 
The scene reads so differently now.
 
 
 
 
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Loscil !LoscilARtEThu Sep 20 03:48:17 2012No.4568204
 
 
 Bumpan
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousThu Sep 20 05:35:37 2012No.4569795
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Quoted by: >>4569924 >>4571079
 
 
 >>4564812
OP This story is fukken amazing, you better fucking not leave out ANYTHING. WE want details and feels. Feels I've had plenty from this now I want details. Keep it up OP!
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousThu Sep 20 05:43:37 2012No.4569924
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>>4569795
I agree with this Anon, you're hitting everyone right in the feels. Autism levels are off the charts Sir; we would like MOAR
 
 
 
 
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DakanThu Sep 20 06:37:37 2012No.4571079
 
 
 >>4569795
Glad to hear that you are enjoying the story. But, I'm not THE OP. im just the writefag who happened to have his story ready to start a new thread. The title of OP belongs to Mr. Blue. It was his original post about pillow case that got us here.
 
 
 
 
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again and again.  LeStrangeThu Sep 20 07:13:37 2012No.4571707
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>>4565779
Never a disappointing story when I read those words of yours.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousThu Sep 20 07:32:18 2012No.4572009
 
Quoted by: >>4573635
 
 
 These roselucks fics are for some reason bring more love in my relationship.....ugh damn autism just oozing out of my pores.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousThu Sep 20 09:18:17 2012No.4573635
 
 
 >>4572009
you dont have to have autism to be inspired silly
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousThu Sep 20 09:44:17 2012No.4574154
 
Quoted by: >>4574195
 
 
 What is the pastebin link for the Roseluck fics? I'm going to be pissed if i miss them
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousThu Sep 20 09:46:57 2012No.4574195
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Quoted by: >>4574577 >>4575259
 
 
 >>4574154
 
http://pastebin.com/u/Fourdak
 
Here you are Anon.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousThu Sep 20 10:04:17 2012No.4574577
 
 
 >>4574195
>http://pastebin.com/u/Fourdak
 
 
Ok, now I am gonna sound like a tard.
 
But that's DAMN handy. Thanks for the link.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousThu Sep 20 10:40:38 2012No.4575259
 
 
 >>4574195
Thank you.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousThu Sep 20 10:54:18 2012No.4575497
 
Quoted by: >>4575607 >>4575673
 
 
 That feel when you read through the entire thread and a feeling of pure want fills you more and more as you hit the refresh button.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousThu Sep 20 11:00:58 2012No.4575607
 
 
 >>4575497
Read through these two threads?
>>/mlp/thread/4115172
>>/mlp/thread/4164403
 
 
 
 
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SpartThu Sep 20 11:04:58 2012No.4575673
 
 
 >>4575497
i know that
 
>ponyvill appartments
http://pastebin.com/u/ChocolateChipPancake
 
>Pillow Case - She likes Clothes
http://pastebin.com/HtNbiz2s
 
>The Roseluck Chronicles
http://pastebin.com/u/Fourdak
 
>The Motor City
http://pastebin.com/u/Mortimer_Mouse
 
 
so you have them all in one handy post
thanks to all authors again ! great job you do here!
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousThu Sep 20 11:22:17 2012No.4576053
 
Quoted by: >>4579664
 
 
 PiE > AiE
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousThu Sep 20 14:21:37 2012No.4579664
 
 
 >>4576053
Agree
 
 
 
 
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W4rpThu Sep 20 17:47:18 2012No.4582657
 
 
 Ooooh! I can see an awesome moment with Rose!
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousThu Sep 20 21:05:37 2012No.4583670
 
 
 Might as well bump; its been 3.5 hours.
 
 
 
 
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SpartThu Sep 20 22:49:37 2012No.4584117
 
 
 bump for best thread
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousThu Sep 20 22:53:37 2012No.4584146
 
 
 Bump
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousThu Sep 20 23:05:37 2012No.4584214
 
Quoted by: >>4584329 >>4586050 >>4589479
 
 
 You know, this pastebin would fit so well in this whole PiE thread...
 
http://pastebin.com/u/Dovapony
 
 
 
 
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SpartThu Sep 20 23:22:57 2012No.4584329
 
 
 >>4584214
thanks for the new stuff to read ^.~
 
 
 
 
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SpartFri Sep 21 02:33:37 2012No.4586050
 
Quoted by: >>4588507
 
 
 >>4584214
god damn it, that i good i have to say
 
 
 
 
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.  LeStrangeFri Sep 21 05:19:38 2012No.4588507
 
Quoted by: >>4589123
 
 
 >>4586050
Lol wut?
 
 
 
 
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SpartFri Sep 21 05:58:57 2012No.4589123  
 
 
>>4588507
sorry i bucked this up
i mean "god damn it, that is goot i have to say"
 
better now ?
 
 
 
 
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SpartFri Sep 21 06:16:59 2012No.4589479
 
 
 >>4584214
man that was cool, thanks for this anon
 
 
 
 
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Dein Donut Deutschlands erster Donut Online Shop  WalaheriaFri Sep 21 06:25:18 2012No.4589636  
 
Quoted by: >>4589982 >>4590072 >>4590807
 
 
 DeinDonut ist Deutschlands 1. offizieller Donut Online Shop. Bei uns findest Du eine riesen Auswahl an leckeren Donuts, ob schokoladig oder fruchtig, bunt oder nussig-
hier findet jeder etwas f?r seinen Geschmack! Falls nicht-dann kannst Du Dir DeinDonut selbst kreieren. der Fantasie sind dabei keine Grenzen gesetzt!
[url=http://www.deindonut.de]DeinDonut[/url]
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousFri Sep 21 06:47:38 2012No.4589982
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Quoted by: >>4590072
 
 
 >>4589636
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousFri Sep 21 06:52:57 2012No.4590072
 
Quoted by: >>4590113
 
 
 >>4589636
Your donut is Germany's first official donut shop. With us you can find a huge selection of delicious donuts that chocolaty or fruity, colorful and nutty
everyone can find something f? r his taste! If not, then you can make your donut itself create. the possibilities are limitless!
 
>German
L2 Google Translate
>>4589982
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousFri Sep 21 06:55:37 2012No.4590113
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Quoted by: >>4590807
 
 
 >>4590072
Oh, well, of course someone would want to advertise their german donut shop on an Anonymous image board within a my little pony fanfiction thread. You gotta know your target consumers and all that.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousFri Sep 21 07:44:18 2012No.4590807
 
 
 >>4589636
>>4590113
lel
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousFri Sep 21 09:14:57 2012No.4592236
 
Quoted by: >>4593099
 
 
 Damnit i want more roseluck so bad.
 
 
 
 
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DakanFri Sep 21 10:14:18 2012No.4593099
 
Quoted by: >>4593428 >>4593613 >>4593904 >>4594288 >>4594895 >>4595398
 
 
 >>4592236
And you will have her...
 
Later tonight...
 
Right now I'm at work...
 
Prepare your body...
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousFri Sep 21 10:35:38 2012No.4593428
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>>4593099
 
 
 
 
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SpartFri Sep 21 10:45:17 2012No.4593613
 
 
 >>4593099
ready 2 read more
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousFri Sep 21 10:47:17 2012No.4593659
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So where are Mouse and Blue?
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousFri Sep 21 10:59:52 2012No.4593904
 
 
 >>4593099
oh god mah dick
 
 
 
 
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ChrysalisFri Sep 21 11:16:57 2012No.4594288
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>>4593099
 
I love you sir
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousFri Sep 21 11:18:57 2012No.4594349
 
 
 requesting Lyra and Octavia in the midst of a musical battle.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousFri Sep 21 11:40:38 2012No.4594895
 
Quoted by: >>4599260
 
 
 >>4593099
Based Dakan i cant wait
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousFri Sep 21 12:02:58 2012No.4595398
 
Quoted by: >>4600623
 
 
 >>4593099
How long have you been writing this kind of stuff anyways?
 
 
 
 
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Quoted by: >>4596506 >>4596751
 
 
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AnonymousFri Sep 21 12:54:58 2012No.4596506
 
 
 >>4595660
Wrong thread,
 
 
 
 
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Ponyville Apartments: Need for Steed  PancakesFri Sep 21 12:58:59 2012No.4596596
 
Quoted by: >>4596660 >>4596936
 
 
 >>4565721
> "Here."
> I hand each of them a magnetic card worth 200 credits.
"Uh, okay?" says Rainbow. "So, what are these?"
"Oh!" cries Pinkie. "I know! I know! These are 'credit card' thingies, aren't they?"
> "Close, but not exactly. We call these 'game cards'. As long as there are credits on them, you can swipe these on the machines here and play games."
> Rainbow holds her card with both hooves and stares at it closely.
"I don't get it," she says finally. "Can you run that by me again?"
> I look around and spot a familiar light gun shooting game.
> "Let me show you two."
> I swipe my card. Then, I pull out the gun and ready my foot on the pedal.
> "Wonder if Wild Dog finally dies for good in this one?"
"Wild Dog? Who's that?" asks Pinkie.
> "Heh. You'll see."
> In the next few minutes, I demonstrate a quick run of the game.
> My reflexes certainly aren't what they used to be, but I manage to clear the first couple of stages with a couple of swipes.
> Both ponies watch excitedly, and by the time I finish, their eyes are practically popping out of their sockets.
"Everything was like," says Pinkie. "Bang! Bang! Bang! Bang! Bang! Bang! RELOAD! And then suddenly, KABOOM!"
"That was so... AWESOME!" cries Rainbow. "Are all the games like this?"
> "Of course not," I say sternly. "The newer ones are a lot more fun!"
> The two ponies start squeaking excitedly.
 
 
 
 
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Ponyville Apartments: Need for Steed  PancakesFri Sep 21 13:02:19 2012No.4596660  
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>>4596596
"Wow!" cries Pinkie. "What's that machine called?"
> The pink pony tugs on my shirt and points toward one of the machines.
> How perfectly fitting. I can't help but smile to myself.
> "That one's a popular rhythm and dance game."
"Ooo! Can you tell me how that one works?"
> "It's pretty simple, really. See those arrows on the dancing platform? You need to step on them according to the timing of the arrows shown on the game screen. More points if you can step to the beat, so to speak."
"That sounds really fun!"
> Without another word, Pinkie swipes her card on the machine.
> Then, she looks at me expectantly.
"Aren't you joining me?" she asks.
> "Uh, I think I'll pass."
"Oh, don't be silly!"
> She pulls on my arm with both hooves.
> "But Pinkie! I'm not really a good dancer..."
"Everyp0ny how's to dance, silly!"
> "B-but -"
> The pony covers my mouth and gives me a wink.
"Besides, everyp0ny knows that it's more fun to dance with a partner!"
> Pinkie gives me the biggest smile.
> "... ugh, fine."
> Damn it. I just can't refuse her when she does that.
> I swipe my card on the machine beside her.
> And the music starts to play.
 
 
 
 
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PancakesFri Sep 21 13:06:53 2012No.4596751
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Unrelated, but...
>>4595660
.. wat?
 
 
 
 
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Ponyville Apartments: Need for Steed  PancakesFri Sep 21 13:14:54 2012No.4596936
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Quoted by: >>4597860 >>4598163
 
 
 >>4596596
"Wow!" cries Pinkie. "What's that machine called?"
> The pink pony tugs on my shirt and points toward one of the machines.
> How perfectly fitting. I can't help but smile to myself.
> "That one's a popular rhythm and dance game."
"Ooo! Can you tell me how that one works?"
> "It's pretty simple, really. See those arrows on the dancing platform? You need to step on them according to the timing of the arrows shown on the game screen. More points if you can step to the beat, so to speak."
"That sounds really fun!"
> Without another word, Pinkie swipes her card on the machine.
> Then, she looks at me expectantly.
"Aren't you joining me?" she asks.
> "Uh, I think I'll pass."
"Oh, don't be silly!"
> She pulls on my arm with both hooves.
> "But Pinkie! I'm not really a good dancer..."
"Everyp0ny knows how to dance, silly!"
> "B-but -"
> The pony covers my mouth and gives me a wink.
"Besides, everyp0ny knows that it's more fun to dance with a partner!"
> Pinkie gives me the biggest smile.
> "... ugh, fine."
> Damn it. I just can't refuse her when she does that.
> I swipe my card on the machine beside her.
> And the music starts to play.
 
 
 
 
>>
 
.  LeStrangeFri Sep 21 13:57:37 2012No.4597860
 
 
 >>4596936
i hope anon will play one easy or medium.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousFri Sep 21 13:57:37 2012No.4597869
 
 
 moar? Anyone?
 
 
 
 
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Ponyville Apartments: Need for Steed  PancakesFri Sep 21 14:12:59 2012No.4598163
 
Quoted by: >>4598697 >>4598841
 
 
 >>4596936
> We start with a few easy songs.
> At first, Pinkie doesn't do all that well.
> Which is perfectly understandable because 'hooves'.
> But after several more songs and a few more card swipes...
"Ooo! Why don't we try this song!"
> "Uh, Pinkie? This song is at 'Challenge' difficulty. I don't think-"
"It'll be fine. Let's go!"
> She makes the selection before I can respond.
> Well, this can't be too hard.
> The music starts. Sounds like the usual techno/dubstep remixes.
> Suddenly, ARROWS EVERYWHERE.
> "What the fu-"
"Woo! Now that's what I'm talkin' about!" cries Pinkie.
> She steps on the platform without missing a single beat.
> I watch with mouth agape, missing a number of moves on my side of the screen.
> Isn't this her first try on this song?
> How does she even-
"Eyes on the screen, human!" she bellows.
> "H-huh? Oh right!"
> I turn back to the screen and try my best to hit at least some of the easier steps.
> Up. Down. Right. Left. Left. Left. Split.
> My legs start to ache painfully. But I grit my teeth and try to keep up.
> And after what seems like an eternity, the song finally ends.
> I crumple down on the platform.
> Can't feel... my legs.
> I glance up at the screen. Yep. My score is horrible.
> Then, I turn toward Pinkie's side of the screen.
"Ooo, look at that!" she says. "I just KNEW that all of the previous songs were too slow!"
> Zero Misses. Nearly all of her moves scored "Marvelous", with a few "Perfect".
> H-how did she even!?
 
 
 
 
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Ponyville Apartments: Need for Steed  PancakesFri Sep 21 14:47:39 2012No.4598697
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Quoted by: >>4598794 >>4599058 >>4600032
 
 
 >>4598163
> At the other side of the video arcade, Rainbow swipes her card again.
> After trying a few different games, she settles on a racing machine.
> Her first few tries are unimpressive, but she learns quickly.
> And soon, her skills start attracting a small crowd of spectators.
"H-how did she do that? That hairpin curve is impossible at that speed!"
"Dude, check it! That chick's got mad skills!"
"Man, I never even seen anything past that stage!"
> Naturally, Rainbow enjoys the attention.
"Oh this?" she says. "This is nothing! Wait till you see... this!"
> She does a 360 degree turn as a stunt for her audience,
> All the while maintaining her first place position.
> The crowd cheers as she crosses the finish line.
"Thank you! Thank you! Thank you! You're all very kind!"
> Then, suddenly, the cheers stop.
> Someone walks through the crowd - a man wearing a biking helmet.
> The helmet is painted like a burning human skull.
> There is a trace of menace in his voice as he speaks.
"Not bad!" he says. "Not bad at all! You new in town?"
"As a matter of fact, I am," she answers proudly.
"Well, isn't that cute?" says the man. "Unfortunately, I don't appreciate some little girlie showing off in my territory."
> He puts down three fresh game cards on top of the machine.
"So why don't we have a few matches? For keeps, of course."
> Rainbow takes a careful glance around.
> Neither Pinkie nor the apartment manager are nearby.
"You're on, tough guy!"
 
 
 
 
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PancakesFri Sep 21 14:54:57 2012No.4598794
 
Quoted by: >>4599058
 
 
 >>4598697
Done for now. Pastebin updated, etc.
 
Let me know what you guys think of the chapter so far.
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousFri Sep 21 14:58:58 2012No.4598841
 
 
 >>4598163
Evidently, Pinkie is Korean
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousFri Sep 21 15:17:37 2012No.4599058
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Quoted by: >>4599338
 
 
 >>4598794
>>4598697
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousFri Sep 21 15:36:58 2012No.4599260
 
Quoted by: >>4600573
 
 
 >>4594895
>still no clopfic
well fuck
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousFri Sep 21 15:44:57 2012No.4599338
 
 
 >>4599058
My sentiments exactly
 
 
 
 
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SpartFri Sep 21 16:56:57 2012No.4600032
 
Quoted by: >>4600989 >>4601698
 
 
 >>4598697
guess RD would like Initial D xD
 
 
 
 
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DakanFri Sep 21 17:59:37 2012No.4600573
 
 
 >>4599260
Hold ur ponies, people! I just got back from work. Im gonna relax a bit then start pounding out some clop. I promise it will be out tonight!
 
 
 
 
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DakanFri Sep 21 18:06:57 2012No.4600623
 
 
 >>4595398
As far a greentext stories and stories in general, this is my first one. I am pulling alot of the stuff from when I used to DM a D&D campaign.
 
Why do you ask?
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousFri Sep 21 19:03:38 2012No.4600989
 
 
 >>4600032
 
>"xD"
>x fucking D
 
you bring shame to your family.
 
 
 
 
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DakanFri Sep 21 20:20:57 2012No.4601428
 
Quoted by: >>4601620 >>4601721
 
 
 I made a promise, and I always deliver
 
http://pastebin.com/kEdjeGDw
 
Happy Clopping
 
captcha: hand copinm
 
 
 
 
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AnonymousFri Sep 21 20:45:37 2012No.4601620
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>>4601428
 
 
 
 
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DakanFri Sep 21 20:45:37 2012No.4601624
 
 
 A new piece of PiE:
>>4601604
>>4601604