"new ideals" By Ravensyntix666 (https://pastebin.com/u/Ravensyntix666) URL: https://pastebin.com/cCzB3Jc6 Created on: Thursday 20th of August 2020 11:20:39 PM CDT Retrieved on: Saturday 31 of October 2020 11:45:52 AM UTC KayneRIscariot: Yikes! I thought I had some! KayneRIscariot: I'm sorry, I can't find them. Must have lost them in the last computer crash. D: LeoCervantes: When you do message me LeoCervantes: Tyt KayneRIscariot: Surely! KayneRIscariot: Is there anything else I can help you with? c: RavenBlackPhoen1x: Hey Wolf. LeoCervantes: Ill.be heading anyways but thanks helping me out made a difference RavenBlackPhoen1x: Hey Leo been a good while. KayneRIscariot: I'm really glad to help, it's not a problem! You take care of yourself. KayneRIscariot: And hello. LeoCervantes: Yeah its been LeoCervantes: Caught me heading out but maybe will catch up another time RavenBlackPhoen1x: Ok have a good night LeoCervantes: Likewise RavenBlackPhoen1x: So i missed a spar huh? KayneRIscariot: Nah, I was helping Leo flesh out a description on a weapon concept. RavenBlackPhoen1x: Ah nice KayneRIscariot: I think he got a little overwhelmed by all the ideas and critique I offered. lol. RavenBlackPhoen1x: My apologizes names Raven pleasure I am a fellow fighting to this guy here. RavenBlackPhoen1x: There is nothing wrong with offering tips an all it is what helps us fighters get better at what is needed to be detailed in our posts. KayneRIscariot: Mhm! And it's a pleasure to meet you. You can call me Kayne or Elena. RavenBlackPhoen1x: Well it is a pleasure indeed. KayneRIscariot: I'm not active like I used to be, barely role-play on IMVU anymore. But, I thought it'd be nice to drop into educational rooms to discuss things and possibly help out where I can. RavenBlackPhoen1x: Nothing wrong there.....honestly i am taking a break myself from fighting as i been feeling a bit burnt out. KayneRIscariot: I haven't actually done a proper spar in a long time. xD KayneRIscariot: Actually, no. That's a lie. RavenBlackPhoen1x: XD RavenBlackPhoen1x: shameful. KayneRIscariot: I've done a couple in private role-plays, but they were no where near as detailed as they get on here. RavenBlackPhoen1x: The only one i had a long as fight with was someone by the name wearbear. RavenBlackPhoen1x: it went on from 3pm to 2am RavenBlackPhoen1x: it was that long. KayneRIscariot: Oh Gods. I don't miss that. RavenBlackPhoen1x: it was one longest fight i have ever had honestly. KayneRIscariot: I had one that lasted a couple of sessions... it was intense. xD RavenBlackPhoen1x: the only one i had not held back and one i looked forward too though i been wanting too give my all too this guy. - points with his thumb at war- RavenBlackPhoen1x: Well the fight with me and bear it was like it was more rp story fight than your just spar type. KayneRIscariot: I've been wanting to pick Warhowler's brain about his knowledge of the Occult. xD; RavenBlackPhoen1x: ? KayneRIscariot: Being a Norse Pagan myself, I was interested. RavenBlackPhoen1x: Excuse me one bit bathroom. RavenBlackPhoen1x: brb KayneRIscariot: Take your time. KayneRIscariot: I crashed. lel. RavenBlackPhoen1x: bk VelraxDIscariot: Welcome back ~ RavenBlackPhoen1x: sorry stomach been a wreck KayneRIscariot: Welcome back. Sorry to hear that, do you know what's caused it? D: RavenBlackPhoen1x: >> yeah XD KayneRIscariot: Oh. That makes me think I probably don't wanna know. lol. KayneRIscariot: I hope it gets better, anyway. RavenBlackPhoen1x: mixing food and coffee together i call it cleansing the stomach XD RavenBlackPhoen1x: anyways I was thinking..... RavenBlackPhoen1x: Mind helping me with something real quick i would like your thoughts on something if you be ok with that? KayneRIscariot: Ah, I wouldn't mind. I was helping Leo, so, I'm kind of in the headspace for it. lol. RavenBlackPhoen1x: Well I use in my post a steel called valeryain steel. And i been told I am not allowed too put it as indestructible at all as its called godmodding but there is a story behind its making .....so that can't actually be seen as a godmod correct? RavenBlackPhoen1x: I am only curious cause i been told now as i been using it alot but no one has said anything as i do post in the intro that it was created by a dragons fire gland. KayneRIscariot: No, "indestructible" is considered god-modding. Even the best weapons forged in the real world deteorate and have their flaws, in some way. RavenBlackPhoen1x: I only ask i can think of someway there is a flaw of course just wont be able too for awhile as my mind hasnt thought of one. VelraxDIscariot: There are ways to get around that though ~ RavenBlackPhoen1x: True i was curious though. But i never actually always go through using the blade half the time im fighting i tend too loose it midway through fighting so its just been me going hand to hand half the time. KayneRIscariot: How exactly did the material become created by a fire gland, though? Is it a by-product similar to a kidney stone, or is it... manually forged with dragon-breath or something? VelraxDIscariot: You could simply re-word that classification to "virtually indestructible by normal means" and specify a flaw that would be detrimental to the overall integrity or functionality of said item. Or simply state that the method used for creation could also be the means of breaking down the metals into their seperate components. RavenBlackPhoen1x: Honeslty it was soemthing i thought of during of doing more of my rp story for my character it was just thought of. RavenBlackPhoen1x: I honestly didn't put alot of thought of it back when i was doign up the sotry 10 years ago soo there are stil lalow of flaws i need to work on still. KayneRIscariot: Anything that doesn't have specified negatives, cons, loopholes, or flaws of some kind are typically considered to be god-modding and/or over-powered. RavenBlackPhoen1x: I been researching alot on what other metals i could use instead. VelraxDIscariot: It's easily fixed. VelraxDIscariot: You don't even need to change the material. Just implement some balancing. RavenBlackPhoen1x: I will think on both of what you have given. KayneRIscariot: Just out of curiousity, does the material "Valeryian Steel" only apply to certain universes? And wasn't that a material from Game of Thrones or something? RavenBlackPhoen1x: Actually i was told about that steel from an old friend of mine who was helping me with the facts on what steel to use as a source of a sword and he told me that but it was a first i heard it was from game of thrones....as i never watched the series. RavenBlackPhoen1x: - sighs- RavenBlackPhoen1x: to think it was from that series of all shows.....greeat. KayneRIscariot: Yeah, because "Valeryian" is from Game of Thrones. And if that's the case, you would be referencing that material, which would be copyright infringement. KayneRIscariot: So you could use or create another material very similar, that's not that kind of steel. And maybe in your biography or description have a reference note to it (maybe in a footer or something of the like). RavenBlackPhoen1x: Well seeing that is the case i will differently change the metal itself to soemthign else. RavenBlackPhoen1x: I am not up too using such things as such. When i had no intention of knowing baout it. RavenBlackPhoen1x: about* KayneRIscariot: Yeah, I can understand that. But that's sometimes the fun of creating new things; delving into new territory. RavenBlackPhoen1x: True but my character was created from scratch and i rather not have a sword metal and crafted from a show honestly. KayneRIscariot: No, no, of course. That's what I meant. xD RavenBlackPhoen1x: hell half of what raven does i na fight is from anime shows that i base in a real life way with draw backs and double edge sword effects but a blade itself is one thing i like to keep somehting that was created from scratch. KayneRIscariot: Okay. That sounds great. o/ RavenBlackPhoen1x: Sorry if i was rambling XD KayneRIscariot: It's fine! If you wanna bounce ideas, feel free! RavenBlackPhoen1x: sounds good. RavenBlackPhoen1x: Well I can explain my character to yeah both if you like to hear? KayneRIscariot: Ah, sure. Are there any aspects you specifically want critique on, though?> RavenBlackPhoen1x: Well there is one RavenBlackPhoen1x: its one i still need to work on most on how i post it. RavenBlackPhoen1x: https://pastebin.com/4g84pF6s RavenBlackPhoen1x: here this will give u base of what he is RavenBlackPhoen1x: but the one thing i been trying my best too work on posting in the right way is how is skin comes alive. RavenBlackPhoen1x: like flames but the way i word it is using snakes in a refernece but i feel it's not good enough too give a ideal on how his skins comes alive in that sort. KayneRIscariot: Okay. First and foremost; one of the biggest issues I'm seeing off the bat, disregarding the ability itself, is the temperature it supposedly reaches. KayneRIscariot: You do realize that temperature is hotter than the surface of the sun... right? KayneRIscariot: In comparison; the surface of the sun, in Celsius, is 5,504.85 degrees. RavenBlackPhoen1x: Thats the actual temperature i got off google. RavenBlackPhoen1x: and it was not to the sun temp RavenBlackPhoen1x: it was just what color was hot. RavenBlackPhoen1x: i looked up black flames but all i got was what color of flames are the hottest. RavenBlackPhoen1x: and that was the one temp i found out of all that towards white. as black flames dont exist soo i had too go with it. KayneRIscariot: Yeah, because black is the absence of light., RavenBlackPhoen1x: exactly KayneRIscariot: Fire emits light, so it would only be able to go towards white. KayneRIscariot: The closest to "black" you would actually get is an invisible flame, but that's a very cool temperature. RavenBlackPhoen1x: well i needed too make sure the flames had some sort of realism to them like heat wise. RavenBlackPhoen1x: i never been good with science so i had too look it up. KayneRIscariot: Yeah. Well, black is the absence of light, so it would be physically impossible to have black flames. However. If you're in a fantasy world, you could classify it as energy that has a searing effect similar to fire, but has no actual heat. KayneRIscariot: But if you're going to stick with flames, you would have to go with something that actually does emit light to stay on the visible spectrum and use some realism. RavenBlackPhoen1x: sooowhat do you think i could do about that? RavenBlackPhoen1x: I been doing my best with trying to find anything that may help with improving my posts more. RavenBlackPhoen1x: I do really good posts but they lack that i try and go for before i lost that bit of my fighting self back then. RavenBlackPhoen1x: but otherwise did you like the story for raven by chance? KayneRIscariot: Okay. Velrax made a point of saying that you could achieve the black color coming from a substance that's produced on the skin, as the body's way of controlling temperature. And that substance, in a fantasy setting, burns black. RavenBlackPhoen1x: ok KayneRIscariot: So you could then bring the temperature down to a more reasonable level and keep the color you're after. RavenBlackPhoen1x: ok soo how would i describe the form like a snake if you get my meaning by that. RavenBlackPhoen1x: i usually i try and give it detail onhow the flames come alive on him. KayneRIscariot: I'd be careful about saying the fire is his very skin, if he has any kind of anthropomorphic traits to his form. Now, I guess that would boil down to what your definition of "alive" is. Most people consider that word to define an organism, some organism that it's cell(s) has/have autonomous control over functions. Breathing, reproducing, etc. RavenBlackPhoen1x: Ok what i mean is like how fire burns. RavenBlackPhoen1x: when watching a camp fire RavenBlackPhoen1x: that way. KayneRIscariot: When you say "alive", is it just the flames being wild? RavenBlackPhoen1x: how it moves RavenBlackPhoen1x: yes KayneRIscariot: Okay. Then you'll want to specify that, so it's clear you're not meaning an actual living organism. RavenBlackPhoen1x: i been working on wording it in my post so ppl get the meaning by the fire being alive on him. RavenBlackPhoen1x: thank you. : If you click the second adjective, "being active, full of life", you can find some synomyms there. And if you like one of them, you can click it, and it may give you synonyms for that word, too! RavenBlackPhoen1x: will do actually KayneRIscariot: Just as an example. ^^ RavenBlackPhoen1x: i even bookmarked to make sure i can go bk to it anytime KayneRIscariot: Okay, awesome. I'm looking at other parts of the abilities right now, RavenBlackPhoen1x: how was the story btw out of curiousity by chance. KayneRIscariot: Might I suggest bringing the temperature on those flames down to like, 1,500 Celsius? That should be enough of a temperature to work with quite a few materials, without going seriously overboard. RavenBlackPhoen1x: i can do that actually RavenBlackPhoen1x: i been meaning too fix my bio a bit more in fact KayneRIscariot: It's still a very high temperature, and you can tweak it as you like. But, if I recall correctly, a lot of materials have to be heated to at least 315 Celsius. KayneRIscariot: So 1,000 Celsius should be enough. lol. RavenBlackPhoen1x: after the whole sword thing i been feeling it needs to change as i kepted getting told alot. yet not one person ever said anything till now. RavenBlackPhoen1x: i been researching the heat complex for flames and metal as well the strength too the metal as well and the only one i can think of i found is titanium and carbon. KayneRIscariot: Sorry, I'm trying to read it and my eyes are actually hurting. ;o; RavenBlackPhoen1x: sorry KayneRIscariot: It's okay, it's just a bright white screen. Bright whites tend to bother my eyes. RavenBlackPhoen1x: actually that story and every took me ten years too created RavenBlackPhoen1x: create* RavenBlackPhoen1x: and i am still trying too add and fix after that long. RavenBlackPhoen1x: hell i know how too kill off raven and that took ten years in it self too think of. RavenBlackPhoen1x: and it works for my character as i was the one who thought of it. KayneRIscariot: I started skimming through and noticed at the end that you mentioned the character has a device that creates and closes black holes... A lot of people would say that's extremely over-powered and defies a lot of physics. KayneRIscariot: Now, that being said, it could be possible to reword it as some kind of wormhole. RavenBlackPhoen1x: yea RavenBlackPhoen1x: dont mind that part RavenBlackPhoen1x: at the time i was experimenting RavenBlackPhoen1x: alot RavenBlackPhoen1x: i will have that part itself changed KayneRIscariot: Okay. I just wanted to point that out. A wormhole doesn't start devouring mass like a black hole does, to my knowledge. It's instead a gateway/tunnel of sorts. RavenBlackPhoen1x: yea as i said was experiment with things while doing his story soo that part was a bit overbaord but it was a story i still need tow tweak more. RavenBlackPhoen1x: but RavenBlackPhoen1x: the location where i have as he is born is a real place in germany RavenBlackPhoen1x: i looked it up RavenBlackPhoen1x: its actually a small village KayneRIscariot: So, he's the result of a forbidden interaction. He is separated from his mother entirely, or? RavenBlackPhoen1x: well his mother is actually alive RavenBlackPhoen1x: i furthered the story havent added to it yet there but his mother used a illusion on him at the time too see what would happen KayneRIscariot: I'm having a really hard time reading all this. I'm just seeing there's obviously a conflict between him and his mother later. RavenBlackPhoen1x: its ok dont expect you to oread it all RavenBlackPhoen1x: well he found his mother still alive and only found out what he killed off was a shadow of her an illusion she used KayneRIscariot: Okay, so, you'd need to clarify then somewhere, even if it's a sidenote, that it was an illusion. RavenBlackPhoen1x: and he and his mother came to terms too him fnding out hisfather was trying to use him as a weapon itself. RavenBlackPhoen1x: i will fix it up and add to it RavenBlackPhoen1x: i just havent had time too in real as much RavenBlackPhoen1x: at the time i wasnt able too add it ws an illusion when it happened till a friend who agreed too play as ravens mother furthered his story a bit more KayneRIscariot: Even if it's something as simple as saying "Little did he know, it was all a trick of the mind." KayneRIscariot: Something that simple would denote that it's not what it seems. RavenBlackPhoen1x: true RavenBlackPhoen1x: hence why i crafted this character RavenBlackPhoen1x: i held on to him for 11 years now KayneRIscariot: I'm sure he'd be fine once you flesh him out and tweak details. RavenBlackPhoen1x: i tend too hehe RavenBlackPhoen1x: hence why i needed some help with tweaking RavenBlackPhoen1x: and i do thank you both with your ideals