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I wrote this because Freud wouldn't shut up so I went full Oedipus complex. It was my first attempt at collaborative storytelling and fapfic so I had no idea what I was doing. Got some experience from it as I can see a lot of mistakes. Any critique and/or advice is appreciated. -IAFL

 

Real thread starts here: http://archive.heinessen.com/mlp/thread/S8895546#p8897570

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All this mother fucking talk going on...

 

>you have been Celestia's personal assistant for over a month now

>looking back, you don't know how you even got the position

>after hearing from a friend (who happens to be a guard) about an opening since the last one retired of old age, you threw in the application to him for filing

>it didn't hurt, and you needed a better job, but was hired the next day

>apparently it took months last time an assistant was hired because nobody wanted to be beside her

>and standing beside her is definitely a whole new experience

>you knew she was tall, but had no idea that she was easily a head more than you

>almost eye level with her bosom

>dear lord those tits

>everything about her was beautiful

>the voice, soft and caring

>those eyes, trusting and deep

>that smile, warm and inviting

>it became increasingly difficult to manage your responsibilities

>in honesty it wasn't hard

>had to maintain your appearance more, be more formal, watch what you say, remind her of things, but the hardest part of being her assistant was your dick

>what do?

 

GET CAUGHT MASTURBATING

 

>you can hear your loins screaming at you for release

>again

>the first time you rubbed yourself to the thought of her was after a particularly busy day

>had to be practically glued to her hip and help organize things

>the first thing you did when you got home was jerk it so hard that the resulting spray was a new personal record in distance

>and the shame afterward was also a record in all time low

>but it didn't stop there

>it wasn't just her body, but who she was that set you on fire

>it felt like she cared about you on a deep level

>she was never demanding, but always asked for assistance

>you almost don't have a job, having to practically find ways to assist

>every time you think about being more than a worker, your heart leaps into your throat

>the fact she doesn't like to be formal doesn't help in the slightest

>first name bases, jokes, casual conversation

>you want nothing more than to spend time with her, but it's almost to a point where you can't control yourself

>thankfully you carry a clipboard around for tactical placement when around her, but even the touching of it is making you quiver

>after jotting down something about something oh dear Celestia's tits you hope you wrote it down right and speaking of those tits you would fondle them while you ram that

>I HAVE TO GO NOW

>looking like Frankenstein's monster sped up you head to the nearest bathroom

>it wasn't until you were already rubbing out the pre-cum that you realize it was her personal one in her bedroom

>whatever

>as you kneel over the toilet and spank out the vile thoughts, you can't help but pant and moan her name as the release takes over

>weak at the knees, and still erect, you can hear your heartbeat and every breath

>you also hear something else

>a knocking

>"Anon, are you okay?

 

USE VOICE TO TIP OVER THE EDGE

ATTEMPT TO DO SO SILENTLY BUT FAIL

 

Try not to cum

Cum a lot

 

>suddenly, a light bulb appears over your head

>of course you locked the door when you came in, so this is foolproof

>you cave to your carnal desires and continue to masturbate

>then you ask her why

>"You seemed pale."

>sweet goddess even her medical observations are hot

>no, you reply, there's something wrong with my stomach

>the fact you aren't feeling guilt would be worrying if this didn't feel so great

>"Do you need the royal physician?"

>her voice is so sweet, so caring, like she's there for your needs

>at this point you are sitting on the proverbial throne facing the back of it as your knees couldn't bear your weight

>"Anon, please respond."

>that's all it took

>her saying your name in that angelic voice

>N-NO CELESTIA

>you try to say it as plainly as possible while you thrust into your own grasp as your body goes over the edge

>huffing as the last of yourself is shot into the back of the poor toilet, the image of her floods your mind

>her beauty is beyond anything you could hope to imagine

>her hair flowing in the non-existent wind

>that stare of concern

>holy shit she's standing in the doorway

>you're done for

>not only is she your boss, or just a princess, but A GOD

>as you sit there in total shock, cum covered dick still in hand, you begin to think of the worst possible thing she could do

>hate you

>what do?

 

QUICKLY PULL UP PANTS AND ATTEMPT TO NOT DROP SPAGHETTI TOO HARD

UNDER NO CIRCUMSTANCES LET SLIP YOU WERE THINKING OF HER

 

I FEEL BETTER NOW CELESTIA THANKS

 

>you have to salvage this

>sliding backward into your pants so you are sitting in front of the bowl hunched over you flush the evidence in one swift motion

>the fact you tapped your sac on the way back doesn't help

>you tell her that you feel better now thanks for the help I mean concern but it's out of my system digestive system that's the one I was talking about the thought of you helped thinking about my concern helped me

>as you gasp for air your mind goes blank

>staring at the water finishing it's return, you hear her walk behind you, then past you

>the guilt begins to set in

>she trusted you

>she trusted you and you wanted to fuck her like an animal

>the sound of a faucet turning on fills the room

>she hates you

>thinks you're vile

>the faucet stops

>tears begin to well

>you love her

>you swear that you wanted nothing more than for her to love you

>jumping slightly as a warm, damp cloth brushes over your eyes, the tears are wiped away

>turning towards her, she was that tender smile as she looks into your eyes

>"Come on, move your hands."

>at this point, emotionally drained, you can't even resist as you sit up and reveal yourself

>she cleans your body, never showing a sign of disgust

>what do?

 

ask for a blowjob

 

ERECT

 

gotta say, celestia seems a lot calmer about all this than we are

 

lamely explain what you were doing but don't slip and tell her you were thinking of her

 

>why isn't she mad?

>why aren't you mad?

>"Why would I be mad?"

>then you remember who this is

>she's immortal

>probably above and beyond such... ways of thinking

>you can't help but feel insignificant as she finishes

>of course you're still erect

>as she washes the cloth, you regain your composure and fasten your trousers

>you say the first thing that comes to mind

>thanks

>oh gee Anon that's real fucking smooth

>just thank a timeless god for wiping the cum off your dick

>"You're welcome..."

>there seems to be no wrong way to talk to Celestia

>doesn't help the feeling of being so lowly

>but the attraction towards her is more than it ever was

>she offers a hand to you

>grabbing it, she helps lift you to a stand

>you can't help but hold on as you gaze upward at her

>her eyes are so easy to lose yourself in

>it's not until she starts walking with you in tow that the fascination is broken

>remembering that you used her private chamber's bathroom as a masturbatory aid, she sits you on the nearest surface

>her bed

>even when sitting next to you, she's a good deal bigger than you

>"Tell me what's on your mind?"

>a blowjob

>FOR FUCK'S SAKE MAN NO SERIOUSLY WHAT THE FUCK IS WRONG WITH YOU THIS IS YOUR CHANCE TO LOVE HER AND HERE YOU ARE TELLING AN ALL POWERFUL BEING TO SUCK IT AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA

>she's laughing

>"It's been some time since someone has been so forward."

>Celestia I'm sorry. You are just the most gorgeous thing I have ever witnessed. Every time I'm with you, I want more of you. Who you are. Your body. I know I'm worse than scum, being a mortal, but I swear to you that I would give my life if you only asked if it meant you would love me. It drives me wild. I can't control myself. Please, please don't hate me.

>you lay your soul barren to her, not being able to hold back the tears again

>what do?

 

Rest your head on her shoul- ON HER TITS

REST YOUR HEAD ON HER TITS

 

the answer is obvious give her the dick

if she will have it of course, sunhorse is not for the rape

 

>as you sit there a blubbering pile and a miserable man, she pulls you toward her

>of course you naturally lay across her gigantic bosom

>not that you mind

>she doesn't seem to either

>as you wrap your arms around her into an embrace the thought of fisting her until her juices spray everywhere dude what the fuck stop that

>...

>so soft

>...

>so warm

>the crying stops almost immediately

>now calm, you can hear her heartbeat

>such a simple thing is better than any song you have ever heard

>this peace is something you've never felt before

>the idea of just being a mortal doesn't matter when she has you in her hold

>but you have to know

>almost too afraid to ruin what is happening right now, you ask

>do you love me?

>"Of course I do, dear Anon."

>no Celestia, I mean it

>me

>"It has been a long time since I have had a partner. You are so endearing... when you talk to me, it's to me, not my title. To who I am, not what I am. If you will accept me, you may have me."

>I promise to love you forever

>"No Anon..."

>she pulls your face out of her chest and looks deep into your eyes

>a strange emotion on her face

>one of both happiness and sadness

>"You won't be with me forever. I will outlive you, as I have done to many before you."

>then right now, let me have you here and now

>"...you may have me now."

>what do?

 

KISS HER

 

>you have to stand up in order to get into a working kissing position

>when you do so, standing over her, she smiles sincerely

>you take her head into your hands, looking at her, she waits

>her hair feels somewhere between silk and water

>her skin warm like a sunny day

>her eyes are genuine, no trace of anything other than pure love

>you slowly bring your lips toward hers, feeling her breath upon you

>the contrast of her patience and your excitement makes it feel like she'd do anything for you

>all you have to do is ask

>pressing into her, she receives it without qualm

>her hands still resting on her lap, she allows whatever you desire

>she gives small pushing into you every once in awhile, making it hard to control yourself to savor this

>using your tongue to explore her mouth, the sensation is almost too much to control your breathing

>opening your eyes so close to hers is like being in large pools of pale magenta

>pulling away, she lets out a soft giggle and smile

>like a thanks for what you've done

>"You must have waited a long time for this."

>you have no idea

>what do?

 

pull her tits out of her garment, and suck the milk from her tits

 

>looking downward at her chest, you can't help but be mesmerize

>the slight rising and falling along with her breathing

>the way they press into one another

>the slight pudge as it tries to escape her garment

>you catch yourself before you drool and look back at her face

>still as beautiful

>no, even more so

>you feel frozen in place, wanting but not knowing what she wants

>what could she possibly want

>even trying to put yourself in her place feels impossible

>not being able to figure out, you decide to give up and ask

>Celestia, what do you want me to do?

>"I take pleasure in that you are fulfilled."

>...that is the most generous thing anybody has ever said to me

>this prompts another laugh from the goddess

>you kind of feel like a play thing, a toy compared to Celestia, but even being that is more than what you can dream for

>well, if she likes it when I like it...

>reaching down, you stroke the tops of her mounds

>placing your hands into the brazier, you lift and push the clothing underneath

>they are glorious

>as you knead them, the instinct of suckling them becomes overpowering

>going downward, you remember how much bigger she is than you

>apparently she sees your attempts and grabs you into her lap

>the way she holds you so you can easily access her nipple is humbling

>licking the areola, the idea of what you are doing causes you to shake in your own body

>placing the tip into your mouth, the automatic motion of grabbing the entire breast feels natural

>as you intake, you begin to notice the lactation

>filling yourself with this God, this sensation of more than peace, of completion, washes over you

>your hips begin to move on their own, and you feel her free hand freeing your member

>as she strokes it, you moan into her teat as you pull the liquid from her

>what do?

 

rub her belly and hips while she strokes you

 

>being cradled in one arm while her other gently fondles your manhood is one of utter submissiveness

>her heartbeat is felt not only around your hands, but through your lips

>the rhythm drowning out all else

>you love Celestia

>everything about her

>your life is hers

>her digits are long as they wrap around your rod, stroking it with a gentle power

>releasing the current breast from your hands, but not your mouth, you wish to feel more of her body

>running your fingers around both sides of her giantess torso, the size is more than welcoming

>grabbing her hip, the realization of how massive her ass is under this veil hits you

>when you first stood next to her, before all these thoughts, you couldn't wrap your head around how... larger proportioned she was to you

>but now, it's a feeling you didn't know you needed to feel

>the clothing still in the way, you think of how to remove it

>it's then you remember just how hard you're hitting that nipple

>oh shit what if you went too far and hurt her

>releasing it with an audible pop, you hear her exhale

>take it off

>you say halfway between a beg and command

>you try to stand as your own clothes are getting in the way, it seems like you are too lost in the sensation to even do so

>falling backwards, her magic catches you

>"Be careful... let me help..."

>as you slightly levitate, she uses her hands to remove the articles piece by piece

>you wanted her to be shed first, but maybe it's better this way

>once nude, you can't help but feel shame when comparing your body to hers

>but her smile is forever sincere, like she is grateful that you love her

>what do?

 

effortless deepthroating with lots of ball-cradling and ass-grabbing

 

>while still in the air, you reach out for her

>she steps forward and you guide her for another passionate kiss

>after you can't take it anymore, you pull back and slowly push downward

>as she kneels in front of your groin, you place yourself in her mouth

>the warm cavern envelopes you as you can't help but go to the hilt as fast as you can

>then you feel like an asshole

>awaiting a scolding for what you thought was ramming a meat stick into her tonsils, you become surprised as the next thing felt is her tongue stroking the bottom length

>letting go, she takes her time gently bobbing back and forth

>you would have blown your load again but the earlier emptying into a sewer line and the fact she's taking her time enjoying your body whilst being affectionate to it has given you a small boost

>but even if the soul is willing, the flesh is weak as you can feel yourself getting closer

>wait, you tell her

>she removes you from her grasp and looks up

>still levitating, your dick next to her face, you have to tell her again

>I love you Celestia

>and giving that smile which still continues to make you burn with desire, "I love you too."

>I can't hold it

>"Then let me drink of you, as you drank from me."

>and then, without another interruption, she's back on you

>but still as gentle and slow as ever

>her hands have found a purpose, with one cradling your balls and the other grabbing your backside

>she pushes you into her, and you float back out, as she tugs your testicles her tongue goes around the shaft

>not knowing what else to do as this pleasant torture continues, you reach down and grab her hair as it waves upward

>the build up was the longest you've ever had

>each intake of air felt exhilarating as you shook

>when the moment hits, she pulls you in fully, hugging the lower half of your body

>it feels like an eternity of ecstasy

>what do?

 

Okay guys, Celestia fic writer here.

I don't know what to do at this point. I'm honestly new to this writing shit, this is like the third thing I've made. Tried padding it out as long as I could while stretching my descriptions. I can see it being almost twice as long as it is now, so I guess it's time to call it quits. Maybe I'll create a pastebin and ask for more input to continue the story, but Iunno. Critique needed please.