Title:           Grammar Explosion and its stellar sequel
Author:          Anonymous
Pastebin link:   http://pastebin.com/SqdMAhSV
First Edit:      Monday 11th of June 2012 01:48:55 AM CDT
Last Edit:       Monday 11th of June 2012 01:48:55 AM CDT

GRAMMAR EXPLOSION!!!!
 
>God damn, you don't get it.
 
[Grammatically fine]
 
>There's a difference between making a short, one sentence point once in the entirety of a story, and knowing how to use that, as opposed to making everything that, when it's more rare, it has much more impact, or it's much more choppy, or a lot of other things that HELP STORY TELLING.
 
[This sentence is a mess to read. Commas FUCKING EVERYWHERE. Consider revision. Apply yourself]
 
HOW I WOULD DO IT:
[[There's a difference between making short, one sentence points in a story. It's supposed to highlight those moments. With everything a one sentence phrase, you lose that edge. As a result, you make your prose less compelling.]]
 
>And structuring similar thoughts, into one paragraph, instead of making them all sentences.
 
[Seriously, apply yourself.]
 
>It's the purpose of the paragraph. It's how we read.
 
[I see that you understand how to write short sentences. That's good.]
 
>>blandish insults
>No, these are general insults, they're meant to attack the thread as a whole.
 
[Comma Splice]
 
>I was around [for?] the first couple, I came back, and read through 5 threads worth of schlock before coming to these conclusions.
 
[English might not be your native language. Oh, comma splice.]
 
>I can't remember writers names, because I hate names and ignore them, whether it be /b/reads, here, or fwuffy poni threads.
 
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GRAMMAR EXPLOSION 2: ELECTRIC BOOGALOO IN DA HOOD
 
>>2498414
>One that admits his work is filth. How refreshing.
 
[Grammatically correct]
 
>Go improve then, sign up for actual writing classes, and come back, show these people how it's done.
 
[How you speak IRL =! Written English. Try harder.]
 
>>I'm not going to hurt anyone
>I think you people are some of the cancer of this board, but that's just me, your contributions make it spiral ever further.
 
[Comma Splice (jesus fucking christ, dude)]
 
>Then again, you could not care about a board on 4chan, but damn it all, I can say I tried because of these posts.
 
[Comma Splice]
 
>>2498454
>Two. My lord, not in the weeks I've been doing this has it happened so quickly.
 
[Passive voice]
 
>Anyways, the point is to hopefully cause some of you to either leave, or improve.
 
[Unnecessary Comma (after 'leave')]
 
>Either will keep these threads from fucking up the board with your current level of writing.
 
[Subject unclear. Consider revision.]
 
HOW I WOULD DO IT:
[[Choosing either the former or the latter will keep these threads from becoming the cancer of the board.]]
 
>But, since you're content to go with[,] "it's the internet, I don't got to do shit[,]" I guess I'll say to you what I say to all hedonistic shitbags who can't be bothered to care a bit for self preservation sake.
 
[You forgot some pretty necessary commas. It's ironic since you abuse them everywhere else. (I added them for you)]
 
 Fuck off you incessant twat.
 
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