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| The_Mungoman #1411312 2 months ago |
Friggin' great story, probably the most character development I have seen in a fluffy pony story.
Fantastic job, deathproofpony. |
| PandaSennin #1411327 1 month ago |
Good one DPP. Nice abuse on the little colt. |
| Yorec #1411347 1 month ago |
That was pretty good, would've done the same thing to the colt too. No one rapes a child fluffy!! |
| FeralSocks018 #1411362 1 month ago |
Well done! You have won a gold star sticker. Enjoy!
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| NightJack #1411478 1 month ago |
Dumb stray got off lucky if you ask me. |
| Anonymous #1411630 1 month ago |
Ginger should just be whacked for a few hours with a sorry-stick for daring to get nearly laid by another fluffy pony. And then kept in a shoe-box for the rest of the week, only let out when she gets to eat something or needs to be cleaned after shitting and pissing in her shoe-box-living-room. |
| Mezzo #1411748 1 month ago |
^Punish the victim. Great idea, asshole. |
| deathproofpony #1411807 1 month ago |
@Nightjack - yeah, a little more abuse probably would have been in order.
@630 erm... you're talking about a little fluffy the size of your hand getting pinned down and almost raped by a full grown male three times her size. what was she supposed to do? Do you blame children that get molested by adults, too? |
| Anonymous #1411847 1 month ago |
the protag should just have killed that little vermin and then tell the daughter that the fluffy pony choked on its own fluff, or just get a new fluffy pony that looks similar to it. |
| Mezzo #1411859 1 month ago |
^Shut up, you asshole. |
| Anonymous #1411877 1 month ago |
That guy is stupid. He should have just put the fluffy pony in an enclosed litterbox for the whole two days, dumping the food inside and let it rot until the daughter comes back, then just wash it a little bit. And if it complains too much, just reset its memory again. |
| Anonymous #1413247 1 month ago |
Mezzo, you're just exacerbating the problem by reacting to it. Same goes for other people doing the same thing. I feel like it's futile to tell people how they should act online but if you're interesting look up the term "damnatio memoriae" or if you're familiar with Orwell's novels "Unperson" denotes the same concept. Although both intended to be applied retroactively I see no reason why an active adherence to it wouldn't be viable.
deathproofpony, nice job here using the different kinds of text to create different emotional associates with the characters, specifically using the Royal Canterlot Voice and alternately not using any capitalization at all for the fluffy. It works well in distinguishing the characters. If you don't mind me asking, did you take inspiration for a couple of story beats from some other recent submissions here? The "fluffy under a pot" reminds me of one of LordAnubis's recent submissions and the fluffy pegasus wanting to fly seems reminiscent of your own Dash fluffy story - though that's not bad thing since the latter was very well done. One final thing you did well here was the use of shorter sentences and sentence fragments. That style of writing works well with the second/no-person perspective, and in particular seems very fitting for the viewpoint character here. I didn't realize that you had also written the Dash story when I started writing this comment - I'm surprised you're able to handle stories with different tones and keep the tonal consistent within themselves. It would be good to see more of your writing. Thanks for sharing your work, and good luck with everything! |
| Ginger_Fig #1413409 1 month ago |
Ex-Wife should have provided you with a playpen. Big enough for fluffy to entertain herself...small enough so that she can't get into trouble or loose track of her shit box.
Sure fluffy will cry & beg to be let out and play but even a fluffy pony can survive being confined for one lousy week. |
| Anonymous #1413613 1 month ago |
Wow, Double P seems butthurt about something. His characters are always white knighting for fluffies just going through the natural process of mating. That's not cool, bro. Maybe he was molested as a child or something. Not that it's any excuse for horrible self insert mary sue luvfag stories.
-5/10 Stick to magnificent bastards abusing fluffies so that I don't catch the diabetus. |
| Mezzo #1414093 1 month ago |
^How about you shutting up. |
| Penis_Wiggle #1414127 1 month ago |
Mezzo I love you baby! |
| deathproofpony #1416027 1 month ago |
@613 - you sound like the one who was bad-touched by your uncle. I don't see why saving an underdeveloped baby foal from a pedophile adult colt is "white knighting".
As I've said over and over - if you're going to get butthurt like a faggot every time I write a story that has a happy ending then my work isn't for you. Filter it so I don't have to see you crying like a little bitch with a skinned knee. |
| deathproofpony #1416044 1 month ago |
@247 - yes, the fluffy under the pot was inspired by one of the recent drawings on here. I thought it would be pretty funny to punish the fluffy by banging on the side of the pot with a hammer or spatula or something. The fluffy flying bit just sort of popped in there... it was really just meant to be a little physical comedy, showing the borderline suicidal tendencies of the fluffy because it was too young to understand the world around it.
Thanks for the kind words. Hope you continue to enjoy my stuff. |
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