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| lordanubis #1400380 2 months ago |
More Boomer! See? He's not always a pouty little kid. Got more about this little guy planned. Not sure if I should write more about him first or do another fluffy discipline chapter. Anyone got a preference?
Pastebin dat shit if a nigga be hatin' reading a picture. |
| Yorec #1400404 2 months ago |
Well that was sweet. Boomer seems more akin to a small child than a fluffy pony, considering his capability for understanding. |
| Anonymous #1400443 2 months ago |
That is awesome. I love a cute Fluffy story. |
| The_Mungoman #1400484 2 months ago |
Friggin' adorable.
I like how he actually shows empathy. Makes him seem more like a pony (the cartoon variant his species is based on) and less like an animal with the ability to talk. Also, I like the owner. He acts just like I would in this situation. Fav'd. |
| Emiel #1400488 2 months ago |
He didn't die horribly?
BOOMER WILL LIVE. |
| sigh #1400545 2 months ago |
A fluffy love story that was good? My word, I haven't seen one of these in weeks! |
| The_Mungoman #1400551 2 months ago |
@Emiel CANGLATURATION
YOU IS A WINNER |
| lordanubis #1400568 2 months ago |
@Yorec Boomer is basically the dude's kid. Their relationship will become more explained later.
@Mungoman Fluffies that can barely do more that poop and babble are nowhere near as interesting as animals of intelligence, stunted and limited though it may be. @Emiel BOOMER WILL ALWAYS LIVE! |
| Ferrotter #1400584 2 months ago |
Boomer is a Good Fluffy. And this story was good too. |
| Yorec #1400585 2 months ago |
@Lordanubis
I see. |
| Anonymous #1400710 2 months ago |
Ugh, more shitty fluffy love. |
| Anonymous #1400711 2 months ago |
inB4 Appleloosa and his shitedits and/or claims of "BUTTHERT HUGBOX LUVFAGGOTRY OLOLOLO" |
| Anonymous #1400880 2 months ago |
Boomer lives. A fluffy story without death, abuse, or torture is automatically shit. |
| Anonymous #1401034 2 months ago |
BUTTHERT HUGBOX LUVFAGGOTRY OLOLOLO |
| cthulhlu #1401228 2 months ago |
daww cute |
| Anonymous #1401390 2 months ago |
Lordanubis, good to see more stuff from you! I've been enjoying your writing. Thanks for doing both the images and a pastebin.
The Boomer stories are fun to read and I hope you make more of them. I think you did a great job with the first one especially. I also really liked the entire seen with Boomer in the pot here. Though there are a couple of things if you're open to criticism: first of all, a fluffy lighting a stove on low regardless of self-immolation seems a bit far-flung to me. Then again I'm thinking of my gas stove operated with dials around three feet off the ground. I suppose everyone has a different canonization when it comes to fluffies so maybe that has something to do with it - it would be neat to hear your canon for fluffies if you wouldn't mind posting it. Secondly, while overall you do a good job of making the main character sympathetic at a couple of points here - namely leaving Boomer under the pot and intentionally burning his hoof - it seems incongruent with the other generally caring behaviors. Granted you do a good job of portraying the reasoning behind said actions so it's not too much of a stretch, but the latter in particular seems to be pushing it a bit. It's the difference between "Don't play in traffic son, you might get hit by a car" and "Don't play in traffic son, you might get hit by a car - now I'll run over you with my car to demonstrate" Although on a positive note it is good to see this be consistent with the "Training your Fluffy" pieces you've posted. I'm looking forward to seeing more of those as well, so I really hope you haven't given up on them. Thanks for sharing your writing, and good luck with everything! |
| lordanubis #1401476 2 months ago |
@390 First off, thanks for writing so much just to critique me. Feels good man.
The gas stove thing is a stretch, to be sure. I wanted to play off the recurring theme of "fluffies manage to kill themselves in the most impossible ways." I love the dark humor of 'how the fuck did they do that?' If they can kill themselves in unlikely ways, surely they can survive in unlikely ways too. The fire bit was a little tough love, and I went through a few scenarios for Boomer to experience getting burned without it being a terrible injury. The owner's logic went something like this: "fluffies remember pain better than words, so learning what getting burned feels like will reinforce the lesson." Not so much hitting him with the car, as you put it, as making him push the car to show how much force it has. A minor pain you can remedy now, or a major, possibly fatal, injury later. By all means, continue the critiques, it can only make me better. |
| Anonymous #1401633 2 months ago |
Good story. I like it, keep going |
| doomboy536 #1401775 2 months ago |
I like this. Good job! |
| deathproofpony #1401845 2 months ago |
Cute. Amazed the fluffy survived the dangers of a kitchen, but still cute. |
| Anonymous #1401991 2 months ago |
@LordAnubis - Thank you for responding so well to criticism, the Internet could use more people like you.
Concerning the stove - "Unobserved fluffies defy reality" is actually a really intriguing idea and it would be neat to see what good authors could do with the concept. However, since the rest of your writing in these settings seems more realistic it might not be a bad thing to use once in a while but you should try not to overdo it - unless of course you're writing a story that focuses on that. Since you asked earlier in the comments about whether you should write another fluffy discipline chapter or another Boomer one, unless you feel particularly inspired towards one or the other it's probably a good idea to alternate chapters so you don't burn out on one. It seems to me like they both take place in the same setting/canon, so it will be interesting to see if you use them to build on each other. |
| Tabula_Rojo #1402168 2 months ago |
Fluffy Pony = Scarlet Witch
got it also pretty fun story even if it is "Hugbox Luvfaggotry lol" |
| lordanubis #1402557 2 months ago |
Ain't nothing wrong with hugbox. Hugbox and abuse need each other for comparison. |
| FeralSocks018 #1402610 2 months ago |
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| Anonymous #1422024 1 month ago |
Small thing, it would be "la" cabeza. Adorable story though! |
| lordanubis #1428487 1 month ago |
Shows how much spanish I know. I just figured that Boomer was a boy, so I'd use the masculine form. |