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| Giant_Neckbeard #1368609 2 months ago |
Op here.
Long post is Long. Trying to work towards the 'End Game' here, which means we're on the downhill slope for the Grimdark_Fluffies. As always, Tags: fluffy_pony_dies fluffy_pony_lives fluffy_text fluff_pony foals foals_die grimdark_fluffies mares |
| Glord #1368622 2 months ago |
lol, didn't read.
I just saw the word "war". |
| PandaSennin #1368696 2 months ago |
Fucking epic man. You did not disappoint. |
| The_Mungoman #1368697 2 months ago |
These fluffies seem... strong.
Considering their usual strength (very, very little), their soft teeth and their mostly nonviolent behaviour, it seems odd for them to be able to disembowel their kin. |
| Giant_Neckbeard #1368721 2 months ago |
Ferals. Only the strongest survive, especially in the meat-grinder of a Human City where everything seems almost divinely inspired to kill them just by looking at them crosseyed.
Surge of adrenaline, Darwinian Evolution in Progress, differences in the Herd's living and eating habits, all of which conspire to make some Fluffies 'greater' than others. Zodd, for example, is an example of what a Fluffy might become over time, after multiple generations of hard living and survival. Also, trying to kill each other with air-bats is hardly going to work. I made a decision to give the Fluffies a bit more brutality towards each other for story progression. Also, don't expect their 'strength' to mean jack shit against other creatures. And yes, expect the Cannibal Fluffies to be like the freaking Monsters from the Berserk series when compared to their Fluffy Kin. A Cannibal Fluffy from the Garbage Dump is worth a dozen normal fluffies, and might even be a credible threat to a cat if several Cannibal Fluffies gang up on it with the element of surprise or a sneak attack. |
| NightJack #1368775 2 months ago |
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| Anonymous #1368825 2 months ago |
MOAR DISMEMBERMENT! |
| Anonymous #1368843 2 months ago |
how I hope this will end: random human comes out of nowher, every smarty friend challenge him and get themself and their herds killed, except No-lips who is smarth enought to run away and save his herd, he was the smartiest after all |
| Giant_Neckbeard #1368883 2 months ago |
Doubtful. No-Lips is way too old. This fight was, in part, written to portray that. If not for the Mares being so enraged they threw themselves into the fight, the No-Lips Herd would have been beaten, the Stallions killed or driven off and the Mares incorporated into the 'Park' herd.
No-Lips is dying of Old Age, a remarkable feat for a Fluffy Pony. Whether or not a Fluffy will be able to step up and hold the Herd together when he dies is a different story. And NightJack, The_Mungoman, is the story really that bad? |
| Anonymous #1368970 2 months ago |
Epic story. I like the positiver fluffy guy stories better, on a personal note, but this one has more of an epic feel to it. |
| Anonymous #1369185 2 months ago |
Here are your corrections. You properly changed the periods to commas in a few places, but you're still needlessly adding caps after quote marks even when you aren't starting a new sentence.
>"Pwaypwaypwaypwaypwaypwaypwaypwaypway!" they are shouting, eyes wide and frantic. >"Owr gwasses!" one of the Bad Smarty Friends yells, [...] >"[...] No-Lips Great Smarty Friend! Have hugh... hwuu... big hewd," the Blue Bad Smarty Friend snorts, [...] >"But he have no lips!" a Mare in their Herd yells. >"Hey! Who you?" you yell, trotting over to the strange Stallion. >"Stupid! Wickers stupid!" one of the Bad Smarty Friend yells, [...] >"[...] Stupid Fwuffie no stowp!" he yells. >"Owies! Meanie!" the Bad Stallion whines, [...] >"Woll Mumma to Hewd!" you shout to the Mares [...] >"No-Name coming! No-lips, I hewp yuu!" you shout at the top of your lungs, [...] >"Wah!" the Stallions cry out in pain and surprise, [...] >"YOU BAD FWUFFIES!" the Mares scream, [...] >[...] "Gwasses fo' evwy Fwuffie!" the Mares yell as they kick and bite the Stallions, [...] >"Yuu Mare now! Yuu no fight no moar!" the Mare screams, [...] >"Owr gwasses!" the Red Pegasus is yelling in defiance, [...] >"Where No-Name? Where fwiend," you cry in alarm, [...] >"No... not wike dis," you whisper. >"Yuu Good Fwuffie," you whisper to the entangled bodies. >"He dead." you sigh sadly, [...] >"Fwuffies!" you start to shout, [...] >"But gwasses diwty naow!" somebody whines. >"Why Honey have to cawy Twicks and woll Mares?" he whines, [...] >"No-Name is siwwy name, Good Fwuffies have Good Names," you say, [...] >"Only one way in!" you shout as a dumb Stallion tries to force his way in. >"No baybehs, Dumb Mare no need to woll," one of the Stallions had remarked [...] >"All Fwuffy Mummas into Safe Pwace!" you bark, [...] >"Nobody makes poopies in Safe Pwace," you begin, [...] >"Leaves, why no make poopies?" a younger mare whines, [...] >"[...] Wan baybehs crawwing in poopies?" you snap back, [...] >"[...] So baybehs come in Safe Pwace," you explain, [...] >"If Fwuffy Mummas make Poopies, Fwuffies must push away," you continue, [...] >"Hiccups sowwy! Poopies! Big Poopies!" she whines, [...] >"Foals! Hiccups, you Mumma," you whisper, [...] >"No baybeh. Poopies dis time," the Older mare grunts loudly, [...] >"Why... why happen?" you whisper as she leans her head against your shoulder, shuddering. >"Mink no know," she whimpers softly into your fluff. >"Mink is good Fwuffie," you assure her, [...] |
| Anonymous #1369268 2 months ago |
You going to fix Part 6? I don't wanna read this until I read part 6 first. |
| Giant_Neckbeard #1369445 2 months ago |
Wasn't aware that Part 6 was 'broken' in the first place.
Just use Google Chrome, that seems to not throw a hissy fit when encountering larger files and/or pictures. |
| lordanubis #1369467 2 months ago |
Awesome as always, dude. Good to see another smarty friend that's responsible for its herd, even if he's not quite as good as No-Lips. |
| Anonymous #1370162 2 months ago |
Part 6 is still broken, sir. Image doesn't load in Google Chrome. (ver 18.0.1025.168)
Are you planning to get a tumblr or a pastebin? |
| Giant_Neckbeard #1371533 2 months ago |
Will PonyRIG murder me if I upload Part 6 since it's already here, I wonder. Nnngh. |
| Anonymous #1371784 2 months ago |
this and deathproof are my favorite fluffy series, I check them every day! Reminds me so much of the Warriors series, I love reading it |
| Anonymous #1372163 2 months ago |
@445
Firefox and Chrome don't load part 6. Opera loads part 6 of On The Rocks AND .mht files. It's a good backup browser, but only for .mht files and long images. It gets too bloated with extensions to be practical, though. As for Chrome, it's spyware AND the extensions have no meaningful vetting process. Part 6 doesn't load in it and it can't load .mht files either. Internet Explorer is just shit by virtue of being IE. Firefox and Opera are the only browsers worth using. You can't even customize the toolbars for chrome and IE. Microsoft and Google fail at basic browser features that have been around for about a decade. And that's terrible. As for the story, it's starting to get stale and boring. It needs some crazy awesome fluffy abusers and molesters to liven things up. FOR COMEDY! |
| Giant_Neckbeard #1372182 2 months ago |
In regards to the Humans, I was attempting to keep them as these strange, god-like monsters that the Fluffies must avoid at all costs.
That said, when the Herds do encounter the 'Two Leg Munstas', I promise there will be some shocks, and a very big twist. |
| PhilSrobeighn #1381001 2 months ago |
If No Name gets his name before the epic conclusion, I will be disappoint.
That is the climax. |
| Anonymous #1391072 2 months ago |
A salute to you,Giant_Neckbeard for making this intriguing story about a group of most abused semi intelligence fictional creatures on the internet.Your stories truly shine in contrast to the fandom's other mainstream stories.
I　considered myself to be very fortunate to bump into your story before I almost totally give up on fluffy ponies fanfics after reading through many disappointing and badly written stories. This fandom had over saturated with cheesy gory and mindless violence stories. The over used sleazy violence visualization on fluffy abuse had worn out its charm once you read the n-th similar abuse stories. //Repeating content will get old real fast and it is certainly something that cannot generate any lulz. In comparison, your idea of this story is very refreshing.That is, to let the reader to partake the though of a fluffy pony character. You are quite thoughtful in depicting how these fluffy ponies cope with the trouble using their limited cognitive capability. This is definitely one of the most engrossing fluffy pony story I had ever read on this site.You had not only created a well developed fluffy ponies story with substance,but also gave these fluffy ponies characters unique personality which make the story really stand out among other. Keep up the good work there. (^^)b love your story. |
| Anonymous #1403659 2 months ago |
Some of those old fluffies should be dying soon. I hope NoName gets his promotion to smarty friend before NoLips dies and NoLips can take his place with the old fluffies.
NoLips needs more stallions it seems. Does he rely on births to replenish them or does he only bring in stallions like NoName when it's one at a time or he can establish dominance like he did with the dumb friend in the first chapter? I kind of got the impression Coal was a good leader since he took decent care of the pregnant fluffies and set limits, until things fell apart. Or does he just do the things all the smarty friends should do and it's the bad ones that don't. If Unicorns can make sparks like that I'm surprised they don't do better scaring off predators. What kind of animal doesn't mind it's fur singed? |