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| Shaggy #1342439 2 months ago |
Keep up the story man, its getting good. |
| Anonymous #1342649 2 months ago |
No, this story is worse than ever. To not have the fluffies shit themselves in fear when faced with imminent death is a sure sign that these fluffies are blatant mary sues. The author's not even trying to make them nor the challenges they face even remotely accurate. That a random abuser didn't just up and try to squash them even though they're walking around in broad daylight only serves to stretch one's suspension of disbelief far beyond its limit.
Also, the way he portrayed the one human in the story reeks of bias. Making a strawman meanie without actually fleshing out the character and his possible motivations is an utter failure to disguise one of story's subliminal messages. I am disappoint. Fluffy love may be harder to write a good story about since it can't have comedy, drama or style, but that's all the more reason it should only be written by those capable of writing a good fluffy love story. OP doesn't seem to be one of those authors. |
| Tabula_Rojo #1343105 2 months ago |
anon 1342649, your critique lost all footing after the first sentence
Yeah Mungo, good stuff. That Dog owner was a jerk I hate when people are like that "Oh you're ruining my dog's training leave my dog alone" Fuck you buddy let your dog be a dog. |
| Anonymous #1343114 2 months ago |
>fluffies are blatant mary sues
That's the most retarded thing I've read today, and that's only because it's true. |
| Anonymous #1343867 2 months ago |
Anon #1342649 is desperatly trying to get happy fluffy pony-stories. |
| Anonymous #1343874 2 months ago |
The fluffy foals won't survive the next day. They have only eaten bad rotten stuff and didn't drink enough (yeah yeah, fluffy ponies drown when near water, but I doubt foals also drown, since they need fluffy dam milk to survive, so they aren't that death-prone to contact with water). |
| The_Mungoman #1343904 2 months ago |
@Anon874 Well, water is extracted from food as well, but that whole water loss thing was planned. |