
| Giant_Neckbeard #1322432 2 months ago |
Long Post is Looooooooooooooooooooooooong.
After some complaints in the last post, I've posted the 'full' version of Chapter 5, and Chapter 6. Definitely not for Children. Also, some drama between a Park Herd and No-Lips Underground Herd is soon to come. |
| teyman10 #1322480 2 months ago |
jeezes,stop making up tags to avoid people who filter this shit out. |
| Giant_Neckbeard #1322586 2 months ago |
............. eh? I've done all the right tags, haven't I?
explicit_tag fluffies_abusing_fluffies fluffy_abuse fluffy_pony fluffy_text grimdark_fluffies If I've missed a Tag, please let me know. |
| PandaSennin #1322696 2 months ago |
Awesome story man. Keep it up. |
| teyman10 #1322701 2 months ago |
i added a common tag.
also, this is bad and you should feel bad for posting and maybe writing it. fluffies have to be loved,not tortured and abused. |
| PhilSrobeighn #1322725 2 months ago |
This is going to be an epic fluffy war eventually.
You've got, what, an internal assassin at the leader, a renegade general with a new army, and at least two other herds all coming for no-lips' head? I forsee No-name becoming a war hero, gaining a name, and becoming the Smarty Friend of Haven over a war-swollen herd. |
| PandaSennin #1322726 2 months ago |
@teyman10
At least it's just small animals that have the mindset of a toddler doing it to each other. It's quite realistic in that way and it does not have humans being cruel sadistic bastards for no reason. I hate most abuse stories here too but this is actually pretty good. |
| Anonymous #1322989 2 months ago |
I don't see anything |
| Giant_Neckbeard #1322998 2 months ago |
You'd probably enjoy the 'Owner_is_destined_to_suffer series then, Teyman10. I personally dislike 'Abuse' Stories, but I started this as an attempt to write an 'Abuse' story that actual had some reason for the abuse other than "Trollololololz only worth a nickle!" dribble. |
| andrewmyles #1323264 2 months ago |
@teyman10: different people like different kind of stories. Just like in real life, you can buy a cute little puppy, clean him and play with him all day, but there still be stray dogs.
Some abuse stories are unrealistic (apart from magical ponies). Stories about herds of fluffies are much more natural. Plus, it shows whether author has a talent to create a large number of characters without copying him/herself AND creating some complex behind story. This series is a perfect example that even a relatively simple and stupid fad can really turn into something bigger. |
| Anonymous #1323719 2 months ago |
@989
I don't see anything either. OP should throw his stuff up on a pastebin account so that it's easier to find everything. Also, random disappearing images won't prevent people from reading the stuff. |
| Anonymous #1323726 2 months ago |
/r/ OP put his stuff on pastebin.com |
| Anonymous #1323775 2 months ago |
The image isn't loading for me either |
| andrewmyles #1324019 2 months ago |
@726 i second that. |
| brony_in_denial #1324406 2 months ago |
What is the pastebin link? |
| Anonymous #1324480 2 months ago |
@406
I see what you did there. Unless you're actually asking for the pastebin link. There isn't one. And that's terrible. The author needs to get hip with the times. |
| Anonymous #1324494 2 months ago |
Not seeing anything. Has the 'picture' been deleted? |
| Anonymous #1324561 2 months ago |
Seems the image is too much for Firefox to handle. Neckbeard needs to upload the parts in smaller chucks or just get a goddamn pastebin like all other reputable fluffy fic authors. |
| Anonymous #1324584 2 months ago |
I had to use google chrome to read this. I like it so far. However, I still want the fluffy ponies also fleeing from humans who do find their haven, or having to leave haven because the humans are walling it off. Although that could be the finale. |
| lordanubis #1324626 2 months ago |
Neckbeard, please get a Pastebin. It's way easier to deal with than uploading pictures on Ponibooru.
That said, awesome chapter. Bitches love No-name. |
| Anonymous #1326381 2 months ago |
This story taught me an important lesson about mozilla firefox:
Apparently it can't handle images that long or something. |
| Anonymous #1326400 2 months ago |
so why did the unicorn's horns get stuck together when zodd headbutted them? |
| Anonymous #1326794 2 months ago |
Snook was best fluffy. A shame he died like all other truly good fluffies. Killed by his brethren. Such is the curse of the competent when surrounded by dumb shits. Clearly, this story is a metaphor for the state America is in, with No-Lips being a socialist who looks after even stallions who don't get mares, while Zodd and Blue Horn are capitalist fascists who believe in every fluffy fending for themselves and only those privileged with strength or smarts due to being born lucky being fit to rule. Clearly, this is heading towards a bad end, since No-Lips is the only leftist fluffy with the balls to kick ass. Snook was, too, but then...yeah. He will be missed. Like Raindancer and Big Heart. And soon, No-Lips.
Srsly tho, good story. A bit on the long side, though, and should also be posted on a pastebin. The chapters should be shorter, with each segment of a different perspective being its own chapter rather than belonging to a larger one. Making it too long, like this was, causes Firefox to have a load fart and not display it at all. Try to space it out a bit. As for the enemies of the herd, I'm hoping No-Lips and Blue-Horn will off each other fighting to the death while No-Name goes hero mode and kills Zodd. And that pegasus smarty, I still want him to get rescued from the scrappy heap and pull a heel face turn, maybe by taking a level in badass and getting a big damn hero moment. But the herd alliance, well, if they storm in then it's hard to imagine No-Lips' herd not getting their asses handed to them. The most believable way of defeating them would be to have some abusers come in and unintentionally stage a villainous rescue by abducting the alliance and torturing them to death. As for No-Name, I hope he gets his bitches under control. He needs to grow a pair, knock them both up and smack 'em until they get along. Problem solved, like the boss he'll need to be when No-Lips gets offed. @400 Fluffy pony bones are brittle and easily broken. The hornes probably got chipped, mangled and hooked on one another, causing the two great pain which, along with their lack of strength and intelligence, prevented them from figuring out how to get separated and ultimately sealed their fates. Stupid smarty friends. |
| Anonymous #1373578 2 months ago |
Image doesn't load in latest version of Google Chrome. |
| Anonymous #1414818 1 month ago |
This is on the rocks part 6? Doesn't work on firefox. |