
| Giant_Neckbeard #1289365 2 months ago |
Op here, I think I've worked out most of the kinks of the 'On the Rocks' story in my head, for now at least.
I've tried to be 'Dark' here, but I don't do 'Dark' well, so if it sounds forced, or seems a bit 'bipolar', please highlight and let me know where. As always, Tags. fluffies_abusing_fluffies fluffy_pony fluffy_pony_abuse fluffy_text grimdark_fluffies |
| liquidXTC #1289392 2 months ago |
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| Giant_Neckbeard #1289395 2 months ago |
Awwww, kitty! |
| Anonymous #1289398 2 months ago |
's pretty good. |
| Anonymous #1289418 2 months ago |
Honestly, I think that you've made a good job estabilishing the roles:
No-name as the hero, persuading unhappy mares with kindness, and caring about their feelings; Wittles and Honey, sad to say, as the spunky comedy relief, smart enough to outwit other fluffies but dumb enough to betray themselves; and Zodd as the brute, all muscle and no brain (seriously, he could be outwitted by a potted plant! That's dumb even by fluffy standards!). All in all, good work. |
| Giant_Neckbeard #1289425 2 months ago |
I'll be uploading Part 4 tomorrow, involving how Blue-Horn finds his Mares, and then the trip back to Haven.
Expect that pissed off Pegasus and a few more twists on the way back. |
| Anonymous #1289506 2 months ago |
I have no respect for bipolar writers. I don't feel like reading this retard shit. |
| Giant_Neckbeard #1289552 2 months ago |
Easily fixed, Anon #506. I tag these stories as grimdark_fluffies, Owner_is_destined_to_suffer.
Just put those on ignore, and you'll be fine. |
| Anonymous #1289561 2 months ago |
They are raiding dumpster fluffy ponies? I do expect some of the raiders to get caught at least and be brutally tortured and then executed, since dumpster fluffy ponies are noted to be quite cruel and aggressive.
Aside from that, I like it. Well done. |
| Giant_Neckbeard #1289569 2 months ago |
Well, while No-Name, Wittles, Honey have successfully 'captured' some Mares, the other Stallions, including Zodd and Blue-Horn have yet to do so.
And as the night progresses, Fluffies might get lost on the way to the Underground, some Herds might be willing to work together to stomp the Raiders into the dirt.... And of course, Rat Munstas .... |
| Giant_Neckbeard #1289648 2 months ago |
There is a reason No-Lips sent out the other Stallions for this. Either they succeed and bring back Mares, and he can start to see who will make a worthy successor, or they fail, and he loses nothing more than just another potential rival.... |
| andrewmyles #1289721 2 months ago |
Actualy, it was pretty good! Waiting eagerly for part four.
You good writer. Give hugs to good writer! |
| Giant_Neckbeard #1289829 2 months ago |
I actually wanted to ask, the fight between the two Unicorn Smarty Friends (or Alphas, if you prefer) was that comical enough for a heated Fluffy Pony argument, or should they have been trying to 'stab' each other with their horns?
Also the mental image of two Fluffy Ponies, bouncing up and down like demented tennis balls and shouting "DUMB DUMB DUMB!" at each other in perfect beat with each other as way of insults fills me with a particularly warped amusement. |
| Narko #1289833 2 months ago |
Meh... Not gritty enough. I need ultra fluffy violence to compensate for my insecurities. |
| Anonymous #1290044 2 months ago |
Zodd Fluffehraeper strikes again!
He's teh Abuse-Anon's in Fluffy Guise, right?! |
| Giant_Neckbeard #1290107 2 months ago |
^ No! Although I will admit to disturbing parallels between Zodd and some of the Abuse Lovers. |
| Anonymous #1290211 2 months ago |
^So Zodd is your fluffsona, Giant_Neckbeard? Always good to see that. |
| Anonymous #1291015 2 months ago |
Abuse lovers aren't Zodd. Zodd's just an average fluffy who happens to be bigger than the rest. And everyone knows what happens when you give power to self entitled idiots who care about themselves before all others. Everything goes to hell. Like America, thanks to Republicorp.
As for the story, I like it. Setting up Zodd and the pegasus as potential villains, with No-Name as the successor and Honey and Wittles as his possible Lancers. There's just the right amount of fluffy love mixed in with a plentiful dose of the violence and rape that makes for a good fluffy story. It's better than the other one about house fluffies who cry after sex, which does nothing but make me facepalm hard. Although I can't help but wonder whether the blue unicorn will be hoist by his own petard or instead become the big bad. |
| sigh #1291641 2 months ago |
I liked this chapter a lot, G_N! Although I kind of wish you would update this one more. Your other story is fun and all, but I'd nearly forgotten about this one, it had been so long! |
| lordanubis #1291914 2 months ago |
The plot, it thickens. I can't wait for the next chapter. |
| Anonymous #1327997 2 months ago |
Zodd: "Mares are coming with me, or I'll rape EVERYONE!"
I laughed at that part. |