
| JoyKillR-II #1245099 3 months ago |
Here's Part 9 and the Epilogue of "Homecoming" combined in one post, complete with grammar corrections and more..."risque" detail. |
| Anonymous #1245236 3 months ago |
Mary Sue OC circle jerk ya'll. This has potential, but the lack of fluffy deaths in the situations you put them in makes these kind of boring with the lack of suspense. |
| Anonymous #1245249 3 months ago |
Not suspense, but tragedy yeah that's it. |
| JoyKillR-II #1245282 3 months ago |
@ #1245236 - The reason there were no deaths it because I was afraid of the potential backlash, since I'm again fluffy pony abuse. This was further pressured by people saying "No fluffies will die, this writer won't allow it."
I'd have probably heard: "Oh, you f-ing hypocrite!" "You let the fluffies die!" "How could you let them die this way?" Etc. Etc. Etc. If the majority ACTUALLY WANTED IT, I may have put in some parts when fluffies DID die in some of the situations. Besides, you really wanted to, you could imagine something bad happening to them upon their arrival to the animal shelter. As for this "circle jerk," I'm just adding a little frosting on the cake, as a little "treat" for those who have bothered to read this far. |
| Anonymous #1245356 3 months ago |
I guess you could write less life threatening situations or make them less severe. You are a pretty good writer, but as I said the lack of any real tragedy is a bit of a turn off. Its not like you're the killing them, just look at people like Gitton and superichigo they are the type of people who find anything dark to be sadistic and scary and the lack of fluffy deaths only appeal to them in all honesty. |
| JoyKillR-II #1245387 3 months ago |
By the way: MAKE YOUR OWN ENDING?
JUST KIDDING! But srsly, I'd hate to see how'd that turn out... |
| JP #1245414 3 months ago |
This was quite a good story. I read all parts, which is rare. |
| JoyKillR-II #1245455 3 months ago |
@ JP - Thanks! Did you like the ending? ;D |
| The_Mungoman #1246251 3 months ago |
Good ending, very awkward ;D
Good story all in all. |
| JoyKillR-II #1246265 3 months ago |
@ The_Mungoman - Indeed and thanks. What do YOU think will happen next? |