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I like your stories a lot.  They are obviously unique in subject matter, but I really like the whole psychology behind them.  I wish there were more stories like yours.

KL

i loved your stories. i masturbated to them and i came so hard. it went everywhere!would love to c more.xx

Nick

Johnny and the Nude Pictures:

 I liked it except for the mom in it

jafer

Thanks!  What was wrong with the Mom?

Eternal Night

Great story, really liked the kid fucking his dad up the ass. not
enough of that about. keep up the good work

anonymous

Thanks!

Eternal Night

Would love to see the story go on, maybe feature David's larger family and then the two families play together.  Thanks for the great work!

twistedgay

Johnny and His Best Friend

Keep up the good porno, I mean, work!

Chad

Well above average. I am enjoying a delightful story which I'm sure will have a happy ending. I am curious about "whore for a mother" and all and all you have me hooked. Now, please stay with it and finish the story. Thank you for your writing and posting where I can enjoy.

John

You're right.  I do have a happy ending in mind.  Unfortunately, I'm much better at starting stories than finishing them.

Eternal Night

i really enjoyed this storie i would however like a little more background info on the enchantments and stuff cause im compleatly lost about the whole lord ian thing

anonymous

great story sorry that there people belittle them so much like her mom did

robert

Alexia Finds Sarah

A sweet story.  I liked that it didn't get too clinical.

Baredickie

Thanks!  I'm not sure I follow your comment on not getting too clinical.

Eternal Night

What a shit!!

Fucke man

Fire Mary 1

 I loved your story because it was mysterious like sex. And nobody can fully explain sex or an orgasm with words alone. There is no way to describe the taste of people's holes. You can only lead people to human orifices and let them eat, drink and sniff. Assholes are fine, cocks are great, pussies are the greastest. I hope you agree. Please keep on writing.

Bob

Thanks!

Eternal Night

 I love the idea, it's so completly origional. I've always loved fire and I love sex, and this is a perfect combination of the two! The thought that she is  so innocent is appealing and the slow learning process is very intriguing. I'd love to see another like this, or better yet, a continuation of this one! Great work!

MoonlessAngelas

Thanks!

Eternal Night

I simply love stories that involve kids having sex of one kind or another. I really like it when the stories are about little girls naked outside in public and some teenage boys usually take advantageof them.

Moshe

I'm glad you liked it, even though it didn't have teenage boys or taking advantage.  I may include some teenage boys in part 3 if I get around to writing it, but I prefer the fairy tale sex that is as good for girls as it is for boys.

Eternal Night

urine is usually sanitary (yeast infections being one of the few exceptions), & from healthy partners when it's fresh, not unpleasant in taste, or sent. if you allow your self to become injured to it, you may even find that you may come crave it as part of the sex act,research urine consumption. Please leave  feces out of it..    ,
You seem to be describing something of a Bardo heaven, or idealized Asid trip. That's a fertile vane to minde. don,t be too hung up  on making a point though, it will come on it's own, you want to avoid, contrivance.
The intimate acts you describe  could be more fleshed out,dwelt upon, expanded, much more erotic minutia would be more erotically stimulating,  imagination yes! , how about some xuling &, or venuing were were 3 or, a multiplicity of, eroto-nexus'es, tongues, finger tips, genitalia, anie, ect. converge, connect and mutually interact upon one another simultaneously eg; D.P.s--3 way kiss's, ect...

Anonymous

I'm familiar with urine usually being sterile.  I accidentally tasted some of mine once, and it was liquid pain.  (I guess that's not universal.)  I may include urine in some stories, but usually not drinking it, and I intend to leave feces out of it.
I've looked up Bardo Heaven, and it doesn't sound quite right.  The most appropriate web page I found was about a place people go before reincarnation.  It's certainly intended to be a heaven place, but it's more about lasting ascension.
It's kind of nice to be asked for more details.  I've been accused (elsewhere) of being excessively graphic.  I couldn't find was xuling is.  Maybe I have to look harder.

Fire Mary 2

i sure liked it

Anonymous

what a wonderful wonderland you've created, so pure and beautiful.  thanks

Anonymous

I rarely give perfect scores but this should be a 9 out of 10 at least. Writing Mary's adventures in a "normal" world would be interesting.

Rune

Thanks!  I certainly mean to continue this series with Mary's adventures on earth.

Eternal Night

Wonderful! I wish I was part of your fantasy world. Literally.

Barney

I Came For You

Thats good !

Steven

Thanks!  You're the first reader to give me permision to quote.

Eternal Night

Rating = 4, but needs a good proof reading and editting

Dreamer

Thanks!  It's been enough time since I've written it that I think I can start proof reading now.  If anyone has issues they want to mention, feel free send me comments on them!

Eternal Night

This is so surreal and speaks so much of love and affection. I really love it. You've got a great imagination. I hope I have dreams about this!

Faloku

Sorry I just got bored

anonymous

wonderfully done! where may i find more?

yang

A very interesting story. It took several reading to find out where you were going with it. Being a Pagan Priest helped my understand it better. Too many life-times, too little rest. Looking forward for the next installment.

WOLFMANN

I'm sorry about making it hard to read.  I write purely for fun of course.  Your reference to being helped by being a pagan priest was interesting, since my direct knowledge of it is minimal.  A next installment is problematic.  I don't see a sequel with that character, though I started on a prequel.  I do intend a lot more in the same multiverse.

Eternal Night

great story it really gets me a hard on

msira

Naked Place

splendid imagination and verbalizing !

Anonymous

Absolutely stunning story.  I love your poetic prose; I can pull it off for a phrase or two, but never can I maintain it through a story like this.  Well done, ol' bean.

Stefan

Gee Thanks!

Eternal Night

The Sickness

Genius, Eternal Night.

I frequently check with your site for new stories, but I know from the quality of your work that you are a painstaking craftsman. And when you do finally post something, it is worth the fairly long wait. Always profound, always insightful, always enchanting and deeply moving.

I enjoyed this line immensely: "I did as he commanded, and then snickered at the irony that the man who objected to magical condoms that couldn't be felt was now insisting on protection."

I am wondering what your magic(k)al education consists of? You definitely have an intuitive/developed idea of how magic(k) should operate in your own world.

This may sound a bit "out there" but I find in your stories a reflection of something in the deep psychology of human beings--a kind of map of our unconscious thought functions. And its beautiful. Painful sometimes, but awe-inspiring.

The river of hate that powers a spell to destroy the world... who hasn't felt that? But you give it a name and a context. And being fed, and literally gaining strength and sustenance from sex... that is, after a fashion very real too. The liminal world that we can astrally escape to in order to recharge or sort things out... also psychologically real.

I'd enjoy having a long conversation some time.

KL

Thanks!

Eternal Night

Need more detail of the surroundings from a 1st 3rd person perspective. Story is intriguing but the chapters could be longer. I like that you haven't focused on sex and more on the actual story. This has potential to be a very great read!

1

Thanks!  You're right that it could use more detail.  I may rewrite things later.

Eternal Night

The Sickness : Luke

Aww, come on.  How did I screw it up?

Eternal Night

The Incest Burner:

A different kind of "erotic fantasy" to be sure! unexpected and lovely.

anonymous

Thanks!

Eternal Night

Monster In The Woods 1 - Clair

abit more anal description?

anonymous

Was that a request, or was that sarcasm?  I guess the rating was 4, and anal isn't my favorite at the moment.  I'll think about it.

Eternal Night

Amazing.  What an interesting illumination of the backstory of the Lord Ian character.

Anonymous

Actually, the Lord Ian in "Monster In The Woods" and the one in the "Johnny" series are two entirely different characters, though they are both rooted in me.  I'm sorry I created this confusion

Eternal Night

Looking forward to a sequel. Please.

Capt 69

I've completed a part 2, but it's kind of boring.  If I find a way to improve it or complete part 3, I'll post it.  Part 3 is definitely interesting, but I've been swept away by other stories, which are mostly set in the same universe.

Eternal Night

Celia And The Antlered One: